Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and directly answer the question first, then add one or two clear supporting details. Correct grammar (e.g., “I live in Sengkang” not “I here in Singapore”). Avoid irrelevant or confusing details (e.g., ‘hot’ roof). Use linking words like ‘however’ to contrast Singapore and the Philippines.

Exemplo: Yes. I live in Sengkang in Singapore, so there are many tall HDB buildings nearby. However, when I lived in the Philippines countryside, houses were simple and often made of bamboo and wood, which is very different from the apartment blocks here.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence and reduce fillers (uh). Use linking phrases to explain reasons and give a specific example of the kind of scenery you photograph. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., ‘landscapes’, ‘sunsets’).

Exemplo: Not really. I prefer taking landscape photos, especially sunsets, forests and trees, because those scenes help me feel connected to nature. For example, I often photograph coastal sunsets when I visit the beach.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer then briefly explain your preference with a specific alternative. Remove hesitations and redundancies. Use linking words like ‘rather’ or ‘instead’ to show contrast and add a short example of a place you would visit.

Exemplo: Not really. I would rather visit natural places than famous buildings because I am a nature lover. For instance, I prefer visiting national parks or coastal reserves to see wildlife and scenic views.

Sugestão: Answer directly and give two clear reasons with concise phrasing. Eliminate repetitions and hesitations. Use linking words (‘because’, ‘also’) and provide a specific image of the kind of home you prefer.

Exemplo: No, I prefer living in the countryside because it is quieter and has natural scenery. I like a simple, single-storey house with a garden where I can relax and enjoy fresh air.

× Yes, I here in Singapore I'm living at Seng Kang.

✓ Yes, I live here in Singapore; I'm living in Sengkang.

The student used incorrect word order and omitted the main verb for simple present. Use 'I live here' for general residence and 'I'm living in Sengkang' or 'I live in Sengkang' for clarity. Also correct preposition 'at Sengkang' to 'in Sengkang' since we use 'in' for towns/areas. Suggestion: say 'I live here in Singapore; I live in Sengkang.'

× So mostly here in Singapore the houses are HDB so it's more on buildings.

✓ So, mostly here in Singapore the houses are HDB flats, so there are more apartment buildings.

The phrase 'HDB' needs a noun ('flats' or 'blocks') and 'it's more on buildings' is ungrammatical. Use plural 'there are more apartment buildings' to describe quantity. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: 'So, mostly here in Singapore the houses are HDB flats, so there are more apartment buildings.'

× But way back in the Philippines I'm living in province so the houses there are built of bamboo.

✓ But back in the Philippines I lived in the province, so the houses there were built of bamboo.

The student mixes present and past. When referring to past residence use past tense 'I lived' and 'were built'. Also add article 'the province' and change 'way back' to 'back' for naturalness. Suggestion: 'Back in the Philippines I lived in the province, so the houses there were built of bamboo.'

× So it's a simple and made of wood or the hot, the roof is made of hot.

✓ They were simple and made of wood, and the roof was made of thatch.

The original sentence uses wrong adjectives and repeats 'hot' incorrectly. Use 'simple' as adjective describing houses and 'thatch' (or 'palm leaves/metal') for roof material. Keep consistent past tense 'were' and 'was'. Suggestion: 'They were simple, made of wood, and the roof was made of thatch.'

× I don't like to take photos of buildings but instead I like to take photos of scenery, especially environment and natural uh, scene like sunset, trees, forest and all because it makes me uh, connect to the nature.

✓ I don't like taking photos of buildings; instead, I like taking photos of scenery, especially natural scenes like sunsets, trees, and forests, because they make me feel connected to nature.

Use gerunds after 'like' when describing preferences ('like taking'). 'Environment and natural scene' is awkward—use 'natural scenes'. 'Makes me connect to the nature' is incorrect; use 'make me feel connected to nature'. Plural agreement: 'they make' for 'sunsets, trees, and forests'. Suggestion: 'I prefer taking photos of natural scenes such as sunsets, trees, and forests because they make me feel connected to nature.'

× Now, I don't think so.

✓ No, not really.

This sentence is acceptable but short and informal; for conversational clarity, 'No, not really' is more natural as a response to 'Is there a building you would like to visit?' Suggestion: use concise negative responses in spoken English.

× For now, I don't have any, uh, buildings to like to visit, but instead I like to go to places where it is more on environment than buildings to connect with the nature, as what I said, because I'm a nature lover.

✓ For now, I don't have any buildings I want to visit; instead, I prefer to go to places that are more natural than built-up so I can connect with nature, as I said, because I'm a nature lover.

Avoid 'to like to visit'—use 'I want to visit' or 'I would like to visit'. 'It is more on environment' is unnatural; use 'places that are more natural than built-up'. Remove redundant article 'the' before 'nature'. Suggestion: 'I don't have any buildings I want to visit; I prefer natural places so I can connect with nature.'

× I prefer to live in a province because it's more, uh, peaceful and then the scenery is natural.

✓ I prefer to live in the province because it's more peaceful and the scenery is natural.

Use 'the province' for referring to rural area contextually, or 'the countryside'. Remove filler 'then' and extra commas. Suggestion: 'I prefer living in the countryside because it's more peaceful and the scenery is natural.'

× I can. And also I don't like to live in building because it's too high.

✓ Also, I don't like living in a building because it's too high.

Fragment 'I can.' is incomplete and should be removed. Use gerund 'living' after 'like' and include article 'a building'. 'Too high' is acceptable but 'too tall' or 'too high up' may be more natural. Suggestion: 'I don't like living in a tall building because it's too high up.'

× I like to live in a simple home home.

✓ I like to live in a simple home.

The word 'home' is repeated. Remove duplication. Also 'a simple home' correctly uses singular. Suggestion: 'I prefer living in a simple home.'