Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No) then add one or two specific details. Avoid repetition and fix errors (e.g. "on the outskirts", "I work on the 10th floor"). Use linking words like "but" or "however" correctly.

Exemplo: No, there aren’t many tall buildings near my home because I live on the outskirts of the city; most nearby buildings are only two or three storeys. However, when I go to work I can see several skyscrapers, and I actually work on the 10th floor of my office building.

Sugestão: Good structure but watch verb tense and word choice. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific example with correct past tense and linking words. Replace "like" with "liked" and avoid small grammar slips.

Exemplo: Not usually. I don’t photograph buildings often, but on a recent family trip to Dubai I really liked the Burj Khalifa, so I took several photos of it to capture its impressive height and design.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence and specific reasons. Fix grammar and complete the final thought. Use linking words like "because" and give at least one detail about what attracts you (e.g. carvings, materials). Keep it under five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I would love to visit the Sanctuary of Truth in Thailand because when I went once it was still under construction. I couldn’t see its complete structure, and I’m especially eager to admire its intricate wooden carvings and traditional Thai architectural details, so I hope to return when it’s finished.

Sugestão: Begin with a direct answer and use correct grammar. Explain reasons clearly and concisely, using linking words like "because" and correct phrases (e.g. "I prefer", "I feel dizzy and uncomfortable"). Avoid contradictory phrases ("choose to live in an apartment with more than three stories" conflicts with fear of heights).

Exemplo: No, I wouldn’t want to live in a tall building because I’m afraid of heights. I often feel dizzy and uncomfortable at high floors, so I prefer ground-floor or low-rise apartments where I feel safer.

× And no, I actually live in the outskirts of the city, so I could find only buildings with two or three floors.

✓ No, I actually live on the outskirts of the city, so I can only find buildings with two or three floors.

Use 'live on the outskirts' not 'in the outskirts'. Also use 'can' (present ability) instead of 'could' for habitual or current facts, and place 'only' before the verb or object ('can only find') for correct adverb placement.

× However, when I go to office, I could see tall buildings with more than 30 floors.

✓ However, when I go to the office, I can see tall buildings with more than 30 floors.

Use the definite article 'the' with 'office' when referring to a specific workplace. Use 'can' for present ability instead of 'could' which implies past or conditional; also use 'go to the office' rather than 'go to office'.

× Even I sit in the 10th floor of my of in my workspace.

✓ I even sit on the 10th floor of my workspace.

Use 'on the 10th floor' not 'in the 10th floor'. Remove the duplicate and misplaced words 'of my of in'. Place 'even' before the verb for natural emphasis: 'I even sit on...'. Also use the definite article 'the' with ordinal numbers.

× No, I don't take pictures of buildings very often. However, when I went to Dubai recently with my family for a vacation, I like the Burj Khalifa Tower.

✓ No, I don't take pictures of buildings very often. However, when I went to Dubai recently with my family for a vacation, I liked the Burj Khalifa Tower.

Maintain past tense consistency when describing a past trip: 'went' requires 'liked' (past) instead of 'like' (present).

× Therefore I took some pictures of that building.

✓ Therefore, I took some pictures of it.

Replace 'that building' with 'it' for natural reference to a just-mentioned landmark and add a comma after 'Therefore' for clarity. Sentence structure is improved by concise reference.

× When I went there it was under construction so I couldn't see the entire architect of the building.

✓ When I went there it was under construction so I couldn't see the entire architecture of the building.

Use 'architecture' (noun) rather than 'architect' (person). 'Entire architecture' is not perfect but acceptable; better: 'the whole architecture' or 'the entire architectural design'.

× So when I get chance I would like to visit it again and see its traditional architecture and the.

✓ So when I get the chance I would like to visit it again and see its traditional architecture.

Add the definite article 'the' before 'chance'. Remove the trailing 'and the.' which is incomplete. 'Would like' is correct for polite future intention; ensure sentence is complete.

× To be honest, I am afraid of heights, choose to live in an apartment with more than three stories.

✓ To be honest, I am afraid of heights, so I choose to live in an apartment with no more than three stories.

Add 'so' to connect cause and effect. Original 'choose to live in an apartment with more than three stories' contradicts 'afraid of heights'; likely intended 'no more than three stories'. Clarify meaning and correct logical coherence.

× Another reason is the dizziness and the uncomfortable I get whenever I reach any tall places.

✓ Another reason is the dizziness and discomfort I get whenever I reach tall places.

Use nouns 'dizziness' and 'discomfort' together; 'uncomfortable' is an adjective and cannot follow 'the' here. Remove unnecessary 'the' and 'any' for natural phrasing.