Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and avoid filler words (uh, umm). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct small grammar issues (e.g., "high-rise blocks" → "high-rise buildings", "single family house" → "single-family houses").

Exemplo: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home. Because it’s a small town, most people prefer single-family, one- or two-story houses, so there is little demand for high-rise buildings.

Sugestão: Reduce hesitation and combine sentences more smoothly with linking words. Use correct noun forms and articles ("a building" not "a buildings", "interesting architectural details" without extra article). Mention a specific example to make your answer more vivid.

Exemplo: I rarely photograph buildings because I’m not very interested in architecture. However, if I come across a building with striking details — for example, an ornate façade or unusual windows — I’ll often stop to take a photo.

Sugestão: Eliminate fillers and make the main point clear in one sentence, then add a specific descriptive detail. Correct phrasing ("One Pillar Pagoda" and "sits on a stone pillar"), and avoid repetition. Use linking words like "because" or "for example" for clarity.

Exemplo: One building I’d like to visit is the One Pillar Pagoda in Hanoi, Vietnam. I want to see it because it sits on a single stone pillar and resembles a lotus flower, which I find architecturally unique and beautiful.

Sugestão: Clarify and correct grammar ("live in a high-rise building", "I feel safer on higher floors"). Remove hesitations and restructure the second point: explain how views help you relax with a linking word like "also" or "because". Fix unclear phrase "I can not see the size" — likely meant "I can see the cityscape" or "I can enjoy the view".

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to live in a high-rise building because I feel safer on higher floors. Also, the large windows would give me a wide view of the city, which helps me relax after a busy day.

× Well, there are not, uh, there aren't any tall buildings around my neighborhood.

✓ Well, there aren't any tall buildings in my neighborhood.

Use 'there aren't any' with 'in my neighborhood' rather than 'around my neighborhood' for natural phrasing; the main issue is the use of 'there be' construction and repetition. Remove redundant 'there are not' and keep a single correct negative 'there aren't any'. Use consistent preposition 'in'. Suggestion: say 'There aren't any tall buildings in my neighborhood.'

× because people here are living in a small town and they are not really interested in living in a high rise blocks and things like that.

✓ because people here live in a small town and they are not really interested in living in high-rise blocks or things like that.

Use simple present 'live' for habitual or general facts instead of 'are living'. Also use plural noun without article 'high-rise blocks' not 'a high rise blocks'. Hyphenate 'high-rise'. Replace 'and things like that' with 'or things like that' for clarity. Suggestion: prefer simple present for general statements and correct noun number and article use.

× Uh, also people love to live in one or two-story houses, umm, I mean single family house and.

✓ Also, people love to live in one- or two-story houses, I mean single-family houses.

Use hyphenation 'one- or two-story' and 'single-family' as compounds modifying 'houses'. Maintain plural 'houses' to match 'people'. The original ended abruptly; complete the sentence. Suggestion: use compound adjectives and match plural forms.

× Well, I rarely take pictures of, uh buildings because, umm, I don't really pay attention to architecture.

✓ Well, I rarely take pictures of buildings because I don't really pay attention to architecture.

Remove extraneous comma and filler words; 'pictures of buildings' is correct plural. The grammar issue was punctuation and unnecessary pause interrupting noun phrase. Suggestion: keep noun phrase intact: 'take pictures of buildings'.

× But sometimes when I run into a buildings with a particularly interesting architectural details, I would stop and, uh, capture the moment.

✓ But sometimes when I run into a building with particularly interesting architectural details, I stop and capture the moment.

Use singular 'a building' (not 'a buildings') and plural 'details' is fine but remove 'a' before 'particularly'. Use simple present 'I stop' for habitual action rather than 'would stop'. Remove filler commas. Suggestion: ensure noun number agreement and use simple present for habits.

× Umm, a building that I'm particularly in, just did in visiting is the one Pillar Pagoda in Hanoi, Vietnam.

✓ A building that I'm particularly interested in visiting is the One Pillar Pagoda in Hanoi, Vietnam.

Original has incorrect word order and missing forms: use 'interested in visiting' to express preference. Capitalize proper name 'One Pillar Pagoda'. Remove extraneous words 'just did in'. Suggestion: use correct participial phrase 'interested in visiting'.

× Uh, it is because the building has a really interesting structural, uh, detail sitting on a stone pillar, uh, looking like a Lotus flower bloom, which is really attractive to me.

✓ It is because the building has a really interesting structural detail sitting on a stone pillar, looking like a lotus flower in bloom, which I find very attractive.

Remove extra commas and fillers. Use 'structural detail' (no comma). Use 'lotus flower in bloom' for natural phrasing and lowercase 'lotus'. Rephrase 'which is really attractive to me' to 'which I find very attractive' for clarity. Suggestion: avoid redundant pauses and choose natural noun phrases.

× Yes, I do love the idea of a living in a high rise block because I feel safer especially on higher floors.

✓ Yes, I do love the idea of living in a high-rise block because I feel safer, especially on higher floors.

Remove extra article 'a' before 'living'. Hyphenate 'high-rise'. Add a comma before 'especially' for readability. Suggestion: omit unnecessary articles and use compound adjectives correctly.

× Also uh with windows overlook the city or the sceneries around, I can not see the size and relax at the same time.

✓ Also, with windows overlooking the city or the surrounding scenery, I can see the view and relax at the same time.

Use 'overlooking' (present participle) to modify 'windows'. 'Sceneries' is not standard; use 'surrounding scenery'. 'Can not see the size' is unclear — likely 'can see the view'. Combine into clearer clause. Suggestion: use correct participle to modify noun, choose uncountable 'scenery' and use clear verbs like 'see the view'.