Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct minor grammatical mistakes. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one brief supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid repetition (e.g., "and and").

Exemplo: No, there aren’t tall buildings near my home because I live in a rural area. However, when I visit the city I can see many skyscrapers, which I find impressive.

Sugestão: Organize your answer: give a direct yes/no topic sentence, then explain briefly with one or two clear reasons using linking words. Correct grammar (tenses, articles, word order) and avoid repeating words like "sometimes" multiple times.

Exemplo: Yes, I do take photos of buildings, but only occasionally. I wait for the right lighting because if the sun is in the wrong position it can cause glare or lens flare, so I try different angles until I get a clear shot.

Sugestão: Be precise and natural: use correct prepositions and reduce redundancy. Provide one or two specific reasons why you want to visit, using linking words for coherence.

Exemplo: Yes, I would love to visit the Eiffel Tower in Paris because it is an iconic structure and a great example of 19th-century engineering. Also, I want to see the city views from the top and learn more about its history.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear direct response, then give one or two concise reasons using linking words. Avoid repeating the same idea (danger) and correct phrasing (e.g., "not that I would love" → "I wouldn't want to").

Exemplo: I wouldn't want to live in a tall building, although I enjoy visiting them for the view. I worry about safety in events like earthquakes and about the inconvenience of evacuating from high floors.

× No, actually, because we live far from the city so we don't usually see tall buildings here.

✓ No, actually, we live far from the city, so we don't usually see tall buildings here.

Sentence had no major tense error but needed a comma before coordinating conjunction 'so' joining two independent clauses. Use present simple 'live' and 'don't see' for habitual actions. Suggestion: add comma to improve sentence structure and clarity.

× But when I go to the big city, I can see some tall buildings and and that's it.

✓ But when I go to the big city, I can see some tall buildings, and that's it.

Duplicate 'and' is a typographical error; add comma before 'and' to separate clauses. Present simple 'go' and modal 'can' are correct for habitual ability. Suggestion: remove duplicate word and punctuate properly.

× Sometimes when the angle on the sun is at the right spot because sometimes if you took a angle on the building and the sun is blocking your the lens on the camera, the picture will get blurry or sometimes had a shiny bright copy of it.

✓ Sometimes, if the sun is at the right angle and it is not blocking the camera lens, the picture will not be blurry; otherwise it may have a shiny glare.

Original sentence mixes tenses and has incorrect noun phrases ('took a angle', 'angle on the sun', 'blocking your the lens') and wrong verb forms ('had a shiny bright copy'). Use present simple to describe general conditions, correct collocations: 'sun at the right angle', 'camera lens', 'shiny glare'. Suggestion: keep consistent present tense for general truths and simplify structure.

× So you need to be patient and look for a perfect angle to take your shot.

✓ So you need to be patient and look for the perfect angle to take your shot.

Minor article issue: 'a perfect angle' is acceptable but 'the perfect angle' is more natural when giving advice. Verb forms 'be patient' and 'look for' are correct. Suggestion: choose 'the' for specificity when advising.

× There is a particular building that I would love to see with my own eyes. It's on Paris, It's the Eiffel Tower.

✓ There is a particular building that I would love to see with my own eyes. It's in Paris; it's the Eiffel Tower.

Use preposition 'in' with cities (not 'on'). Also use lowercase after semicolon and proper punctuation instead of comma splice. Suggestion: say 'in Paris' and join sentences correctly.

× It's a very magnificent building structure that has been built for almost 2 centuries and it's very fascinating to see that it's still standing for all those long years anyway.

✓ It's a magnificent structure that was built almost two centuries ago, and it's fascinating to see that it is still standing after all these years.

Original has redundancy ('very magnificent building structure') and awkward tense/phrasing. Use 'was built almost two centuries ago' for completed action in past, and 'after all these years' for duration. Avoid double 'very' and combine clauses clearly. Suggestion: simplify noun phrase and use past tense for construction time.

× Not that I would love to live in a tall building, but I would love to see the view from a tall building because living in a tall building can sometimes be dangerous if there's an earthquake and you're too high up and it's too difficult to for you to go down.

✓ I wouldn't want to live in a tall building, but I would like to see the view from one because living in a tall building can be dangerous during an earthquake when you are high up and it is difficult to get down.

Original used awkward phrasing 'Not that I would love to live' and mixed modalities. Use conditional preference 'I wouldn't want' and 'would like' for preference. Correct phrase 'get down' instead of 'go down' and remove unnecessary words. Suggestion: use clearer modal verbs and concise wording.

× So it's very dangerous for some reasons to live in a tall building, but I enjoy the view from up there. But still it's dangerous.

✓ So it can be dangerous to live in a tall building for several reasons, but I enjoy the view from up there.

Repetition ('But still it's dangerous') and awkward phrasing 'for some reasons' should be 'for several reasons' or 'for some reasons'. Combine ideas to avoid redundancy. Suggestion: remove repeated sentence and use concise phrasing.