Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors (use singular/plural correctly and correct word order).

Exemplo: Yes. Most buildings near my home are low-rise apartments, but there is one tall government office building nearby. For example, it has about twelve floors and stands out because it houses the municipal offices.

Sugestão: Use a clear topic sentence and explain reasons with linking words. Replace informal or incorrect phrases (e.g., 'digging photos') with correct verbs like 'taking photos'. Keep sentences concise and correct verb forms and tenses.

Exemplo: Yes, I often take photos of buildings because I plan to design my own house in the future. I compare their styles and materials, so I can decide which features I want to include in my design.

Sugestão: Answer directly, then give one clear reason with a specific detail. Avoid vague or confusing statements about funding; focus on why the building interests you (architecture, history, location). Use linking words to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit the Kathmandu Mall because its modern architecture and large glass façade look impressive. In addition, I have heard it has a rooftop garden and several local shops that showcase Nepali crafts.

Sugestão: Give a direct response followed by one or two specific reasons linked clearly. Avoid repetition and incorrect phrases (e.g., 'sun rides'). Use varied vocabulary to describe views and daily routines.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to live on the top floor of a tall building because I could enjoy panoramic views of the city. For instance, I love watching the sunrise from my balcony and seeing the city lights at night, which helps me relax after work.

× There are all similar type of building but there is one building which is a government building where that is tall other other than tall than other buildings in my home.

✓ All the buildings are of a similar type, but there is one government building that is taller than the other buildings near my home.

Original sentence has pluralization and article errors: 'all similar type of building' should be 'all the buildings are of a similar type' to match plural nouns and use the definite article; 'that is tall other other than tall than other buildings' is ungrammatical and needs rephrasing to 'that is taller than the other buildings' to show comparative form and correct plural reference. Suggestion: identify the noun number, use correct articles ('the') and form comparative adjectives with '-er' for short adjectives or 'more' for longer adjectives.

× Yeah, I love digging photos of everything and I take photos of building because I am planning to build a build building for for in my future.

✓ Yes, I love taking photos of everything, and I take photos of buildings because I am planning to build a building in my future.

The verb 'digging photos' is incorrect; use the gerund 'taking photos'. Also 'photos of building' needs plural 'buildings'. Remove repeated words 'build' and 'for for'. 'In my future' is acceptable but better as 'in the future' or 'in my future plans'. Suggestion: use correct verb+ -ing collocation ('taking photos') and check for unintended repetitions.

× So I take them and I compare them. Which one is better and which one should I make?

✓ So I take them and compare them to decide which design is better and which one I should build.

The questions 'Which one is better and which one should I make?' are understandable but awkward. 'Should I make' is vague for buildings; use 'should I build'. Also combine sentences for clarity: 'compare them to decide which design is better'. Suggestion: choose precise verbs ('build' not 'make') and use an object ('design') when comparing types of buildings.

× Yeah, there is a building in my country that I would like to visit and it is a Kathmandu Malls building and it was constructed by the by the income of every government to government employees, so.

✓ Yes, there is a building in my country that I would like to visit: Kathmandu Mall. It was constructed using the incomes of government employees.

Awkward phrasing 'a Kathmandu Malls building' and repetition 'by the by the'. Use 'Kathmandu Mall' if it is a single building. 'Constructed by the income of every government to government employees' is incorrect; use passive 'constructed using the incomes of government employees'. Suggestion: simplify 'there is a building' to identify the building and use 'using' to show means of construction.

× Obviously, I want to live in a tall building at the top floor so that I can take care and enjoy the views of the of our city and and I can enjoy the every morning, morning and sunset and every morning sun rides and every evening sunset from.

✓ Obviously, I want to live in a tall building on the top floor so that I can enjoy the views of our city, the sunrises every morning, and the sunsets every evening.

Use 'on the top floor' not 'at the top floor'. Remove duplicate words 'and and' and awkward phrases 'take care' and 'enjoy the every morning, morning and sunset and every morning sun rides'. 'Sun rides' is incorrect; use 'sunrises'. Simplify and use present simple 'I want' and 'I can enjoy' consistently. Suggestion: use correct prepositions ('on'), correct collocations ('sunrises', 'sunsets'), and avoid repetition.