Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail (e.g., exact types or examples). Use a linking word to connect ideas and correct small grammar issues (e.g., 'two-storey' or 'two-story' consistently).

Exemplo: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home because I live in a rural area. Instead, the tallest structures are two-storey government offices and a small shopping mall, while the local condominiums are only a few floors high.

Sugestão: Fix grammar and complete your sentence. Use one clear topic sentence, then give two specific examples linked with connectors. Avoid vague phrases like 'that makes me curious' — explain why or how. Keep it under five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I often photograph buildings that inspire me. For example, when I travel I focus on interesting architectural details, such as ornate facades and stained-glass windows in churches, because they show craftsmanship and historical styles.

Sugestão: Be more direct by removing hypothetical phrasing. Provide one specific reason and one concrete detail about the museum to enrich your answer (e.g., a particular exhibit or artifact). Use a linking word to connect the reason.

Exemplo: I would like to visit the National Museum in Manila because it preserves Filipino history and culture. For instance, I want to see its archaeological and ethnographic exhibits, especially the ancient artifacts that illustrate pre-colonial life.

Sugestão: Remove awkward phrasing and repetition. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons why (views, privacy, amenities). Use linking words and correct minor errors (e.g., remove extra 'I').

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building, ideally a penthouse, because waking up to panoramic city or mountain views would be relaxing. In addition, higher floors usually offer more privacy and quieter surroundings.

× There aren't tall buildings near my home because I live in a rural area.

✓ There aren't any tall buildings near my home because I live in a rural area.

Use 'any' with negative sentences containing 'there are' to indicate the absence of countable items. Without 'any' the sentence sounds incomplete or less natural. Suggestion: Add 'any' after 'aren't' when negating existence of plural countable nouns.

× The only tall buildings near my home are two-story buildings and these are government offices and malls.

✓ The only tall buildings near my home are two-story buildings; these are government offices and malls.

The sentence itself has correct plural forms, but punctuation and clarity improve meaning. Use a semicolon or separate into two sentences to link the ideas clearly. Suggestion: Use appropriate punctuation to separate clauses for clearer meaning.

× There are also condominiums and apartments, but they aren't tall.

✓ There are also condominiums and apartments, but they aren't tall.

No grammatical number error; sentence is correct. No change needed. Suggestion: None.

× I take photos of buildings that interest and inspire me.

✓ I take photos of buildings that interest and inspire me.

This sentence is correct: verbs 'interest' and 'inspire' properly relate to the subject 'buildings'. No change needed. Suggestion: None.

× For example, when I travel, I take photos of buildings that makes me curious and fascinate me about their architectural design.

✓ For example, when I travel, I take photos of buildings that make me curious and fascinate me with their architectural design.

The relative clause refers to 'buildings' (plural), so the verb should be 'make' not 'makes' (subject-verb agreement). Also 'fascinate' should be used with 'me' as object; using 'with their architectural design' is a more natural prepositional phrase than 'about'. Suggestion: Ensure verbs agree with plural antecedents and choose correct prepositions ('fascinate someone with something').

× I specifically like stained glass windows of churches and.

✓ I specifically like stained glass windows of churches.

The sentence ends with a dangling conjunction 'and' creating an incomplete structure. Remove 'and' or complete the list. Suggestion: Avoid trailing conjunctions; finish the list or remove the conjunction.

× If there is a building that I would like to visit, it would be the National Museum located in Manila City in the Philippines.

✓ If there were a building that I would like to visit, it would be the National Museum in Manila, Philippines.

This is a hypothetical conditional about an unreal or unlikely situation. Use subjunctive 'were' for the 'if' clause. Also streamline place name: 'Manila, Philippines' is more natural than 'Manila City in the Philippines.' Suggestion: Use 'If there were' for hypothetical situations and prefer concise place names.

× I like to visit the National Museum because it holds a lot of history and culture that inspire and motivate me.

✓ I like to visit the National Museum because it holds a lot of history and culture that inspire and motivate me.

The sentence is grammatically correct: 'history and culture' (plural concept) correctly take plural verbs 'inspire' and 'motivate'. No change needed. Suggestion: None.

× Yes, I would like to live in a tall building, perhaps a penthouse.

✓ Yes, I would like to live in a tall building, perhaps in a penthouse.

Add preposition 'in' before 'a penthouse' to show location; otherwise the phrase is acceptable but slightly awkward. Suggestion: Use 'in a penthouse' to indicate living location.

× The idea of me waking up to a panoramic view of the city or the mountain really excites me.

✓ The idea of waking up to a panoramic view of the city or the mountains really excites me.

Use gerund clause 'the idea of waking up...' rather than 'the idea of me waking up' for more natural English. Also 'the mountain' should be plural 'the mountains' or 'a mountain' depending on meaning; 'the mountains' is more natural when contrasted with city views. Suggestion: Use gerund after 'the idea of' and ensure number agreement for the landscape term.

× I think it is peaceful and I it would make me happy.

✓ I think it is peaceful and it would make me happy.

There is an extra pronoun 'I' causing a structural error. Remove the redundant 'I' so the conjunction links the two clauses correctly. Suggestion: Read sentences aloud to detect extra words and ensure clauses connect properly.