Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make your answer more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Correct collocations (say 'infrastructure is not sufficient' or 'there isn’t sufficient infrastructure') and avoid redundant phrases.

Exemplo: I enjoy walking, but I don’t walk much in my city because the infrastructure is not sufficient. For example, there are few sidewalks and long distances between destinations, so I usually only walk from the nearest bus stop to my office each day.

Sugestão: Use a clear past-tense topic sentence and reduce repetition. Use linking words to sequence events (e.g., 'first', 'then'). Correct awkward phrases: 'I used to walk with classmates to the nearest park' and 'I went home walking with my aunts'.

Exemplo: Yes. When I was a child I often walked with my classmates to the nearest park. After playing there, I would walk home accompanied by my aunts, which was always very fun.

Sugestão: Give a clear general statement, then two specific reasons linked logically. Fix grammar (plural/singular), and use appropriate vocabulary: 'provide shade' not 'give you shades'. Avoid repetitive phrasing.

Exemplo: People like walking in parks because they are pleasant and comfortable. For example, trees provide shade and shelter from direct sunlight, and parks often have paths and benches, which make walking more enjoyable and less tiring.

Sugestão: Make your intention clear and avoid vague or incorrect expressions. Use correct collocations ('discover new foods, cafés, or museums') and correct the ending phrase — perhaps you meant 'offers experiences beyond expectations.' Keep it concise with one or two reasons.

Exemplo: I would like to take a long walk around the city to discover new foods, cafés, and maybe find an unexpected museum. I enjoy spontaneous exploration because it often leads to memorable experiences I wouldn’t plan.

Sugestão: Clarify timing and correct contradictions. Use past simple or present perfect appropriately: 'lately I have only been walking...'. Fix grammar and meaning: explain whether you walk at home or not. Avoid confusing sentences.

Exemplo: Lately I have only been walking the short distance from the nearest bus stop to my office. In my neighborhood the distances are long and the infrastructure is poor, so I usually use my car to travel between places.

× I like to walk, however due to the infrastructures that not really sufficient to support me here in Indonesia, so I really walk only from the nearest bus stop to my office daily.

✓ I like to walk, however due to the infrastructure that is not really sufficient to support me here in Indonesia, I only walk from the nearest bus stop to my office daily.

Errors: 'infrastructures' should be singular 'infrastructure' when referring to the general system (singular/plural issue, ID 1). The clause 'that not really sufficient' is missing the auxiliary verb 'is' (subject-verb agreement/present tense issue, ID 6 and 27). The sentence also had an unnecessary 'so' after the clause; use a comma and a correct clause connector. Suggestion: use 'the infrastructure that is not really sufficient' and simplify the final clause to 'I only walk from the nearest bus stop to my office daily.' Suggested grammar problem type ID: 1

× Yes, I would like to have someone from my school to the nearest park and then after the park I went home with walking accompanied with with my aunts back then and it was such a fun walk.

✓ Yes, I used to go with classmates from my school to the nearest park, and after the park I walked home accompanied by my aunts; it was such a fun walk.

Errors: 'would like to have someone from my school to the nearest park' incorrectly uses 'would like' and structure (should be simple past/habit 'used to' or 'went'). This is a tense issue (ID 6/5). 'Went home with walking accompanied with with my aunts' has word order and preposition errors: 'walked home accompanied by my aunts' (preposition/pronoun and verb form issues, IDs 11 and 8/9). Remove duplicate 'with'. Suggestion: use 'used to go with classmates' or 'I went with classmates' and 'walked home accompanied by my aunts.' Suggested grammar problem type ID: 6

× I tend to think because most of the park are equipped with so many trees, so when you're walking these trees actually give you shades and hindered you from direct sunlight.

✓ I think this is because most parks are equipped with many trees, so when you walk these trees actually give you shade and protect you from direct sunlight.

Errors: 'most of the park are' should be 'most parks are' (singular/plural and article error, IDs 1 and 22). 'I tend to think because' is awkward; 'I think this is because' is clearer (tense/aspect, ID 6). 'So many trees' can be 'many trees' (quantifier, ID 14). 'Give you shades' is incorrect: 'give you shade' (uncountable noun 'shade', ID 13). 'Hindered you' is wrong verb form/context: use 'protect' or 'shield' (verb choice and past participle misuse, IDs 13 and 9). Suggestion: simplify and use present simple for general truth and correct noun forms. Suggested grammar problem type ID: 1

× Therefore it will be much more interesting and you're not really sweaty from walking.

✓ Therefore it is more pleasant and you do not get very sweaty from walking.

Errors: 'it will be much more interesting' is awkward for a general statement; use present simple 'it is more pleasant' (tense issue, ID 6). 'You're not really sweaty from walking' uses informal 'sweaty' and adverb placement; better: 'you do not get very sweaty from walking' (adverb placement and adjective use, IDs 20 and 13). Suggestion: use 'is more pleasant' and 'do not get very sweaty.' Suggested grammar problem type ID: 6

× I really want to try to take a walk around the city just to find some new foods or new cafes or accidentally find a new museum in the block because in my opinion, some spontaneous activity will be offering you much more funds that beyond unexpected.

✓ I would really like to take a walk around the city to find new foods or cafes, or perhaps discover a museum nearby, because in my opinion spontaneous activities can offer you much more fun than you expect.

Errors: 'I really want to try to take a walk' is wordy; 'I would really like to take a walk' or 'I would like to walk around the city' is more natural (modal/tense issue, ID 4/6). 'Find some new foods or new cafes' repetition and 'in the block' is unnatural; use 'nearby' (word choice, ID 13). 'Will be offering you much more funds that beyond unexpected' contains multiple errors: 'funds' should be 'fun' (wrong word), 'that beyond unexpected' is incorrect comparative structure; correct is 'more fun than you expect' (vocabulary and comparative error, IDs 13 and 25). Suggestion: use concise phrasing and correct collocations like 'discover a museum' and 'more fun than you expect.' Suggested grammar problem type ID: 13

× Lately I just walk from nearest bus stop to the office. Meanwhile at home I really walk because the distance is so far away and the infrastructure is limits me to walk. Therefore at home in my neighborhood I would rather using my car to move from 1 space to another.

✓ Lately I have just been walking from the nearest bus stop to the office. At home I rarely walk because the distance is too great and the infrastructure limits me. Therefore in my neighborhood I would rather use my car to move from one place to another.

Errors: 'Lately I just walk' should be present perfect continuous or present perfect 'I have just been walking' for recent habitual action (tense issue, ID 7/6). 'From nearest bus stop' needs the definite article 'the nearest bus stop' (article error, ID 22). 'The infrastructure is limits me to walk' mixes forms; correct: 'the infrastructure limits me' or 'the infrastructure prevents me from walking' (subject-verb agreement and verb form, IDs 27 and 11). 'I would rather using my car' should be 'I would rather use my car' (verb form after 'would rather', ID 8). '1 space to another' should be 'one place to another' (word choice and number/quantifier, IDs 14 and 13). Suggestion: use present perfect for recent habits, correct articles, and correct infinitive after 'would rather.' Suggested grammar problem type ID: 6