Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add a brief detail. Avoid phrases like "say I" which are unnatural. Mention frequency and context and use linking words if adding details.

Exemplo: Yes, I walk a lot. I try to walk about 10,000 steps every day because it helps me stay fit and clear my mind.

Sugestão: Use past tense consistently and give a specific detail. Begin with a direct topic sentence about frequency, then support with a linked detail (use linking words like "especially" correctly).

Exemplo: Yes, I often went outside as a child. Especially, I used to play and walk in a field near my house with my friends.

Sugestão: Give a clear, concise reason and one or two specific supporting points. Avoid awkward phrasing and abstract terms like "inner courage"; use concrete benefits and linking words such as "because" or "for example".

Exemplo: People like to walk in parks because the fresh air and green surroundings are relaxing. For example, seeing others exercise can motivate you and make walking feel more enjoyable.

Sugestão: Answer the conditional question directly with a location and a reason. Use a topic sentence stating where you would go, then add one sentence explaining why, using linking words like "because" or "so".

Exemplo: If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk along a coastal path. I enjoy sea views and the sound of waves because they help me relax and think clearly.

Sugestão: Use past tense for a recent action and be specific about time and place. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add a short supporting detail using a linking word like "yesterday" or "last week."

Exemplo: I went for a short walk near my house yesterday. I walked around the neighbourhood park for about 20 minutes to get some fresh air.

× Yes, say I walk a lot and every day I walk 10,000 steps.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot, and every day I walk 10,000 steps.

The original sentence contains an incorrect filler 'say' which is unnecessary and breaks tense and sentence flow. Remove 'say' and add a comma before the conjunction to join two independent clauses. Suggestion: omit conversational fillers unless purposely used and keep simple present for habits.

× Uh, yes, I go outside when I was child especially I go in a field just near my house.

✓ Uh, yes, I used to go outside when I was a child; especially, I went to a field just near my house.

The question asks about past habitual actions, so use past tense or 'used to'. The original mixes present ('go') with past ('was'), and omits the article before 'child'. Correct by using 'used to' or past simple and include 'a' before 'child'. Also add punctuation and an article before 'field' if needed.

× The people like to walk in park just because if you see someone for doing exercise or walking then you can feel energy and inner courage will be increased to do walk and exercises.

✓ People like to walk in parks just because when you see someone exercising or walking, you can feel energized and your inner courage to exercise increases.

Multiple issues: unnecessary definite article 'The' before 'people' removed; 'park' needs plural or article ('in parks' or 'in the park'); 'if you see someone for doing exercise' is ungrammatical—use 'when you see someone exercising'; awkward phrase 'feel energy and inner courage will be increased to do walk and exercises' changed to natural expressions 'feel energized' and 'your inner courage to exercise increases'. Use parallel structure and correct verb forms.

× I would like to walk long when I get off.

✓ I would like to take a long walk when I get off.

The phrase 'walk long' is incorrect; use the noun phrase 'take a long walk' or 'walk for a long time'. Also 'get off' needs context (e.g., 'get off work' or 'get off the bus'). Ensure the verb+noun collocation is correct and add the object 'a long walk'.

× I go for walk lightly just near my house.

✓ I go for a light walk just near my house.

The original omits the article 'a' before 'walk' and uses 'lightly' (an adverb) where an adjective 'light' describing the noun 'walk' is appropriate. Use 'go for a light walk' or 'I take a short walk'. Keep present simple for habitual action and correct word form.