Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, remove filler words, correct vocabulary (use 'take the MRT' not 'text the MRT'), and add one specific detail linked with 'because' or 'so' to explain. Keep to under 5 sentences.

Exemplo: Not really. I usually take the MRT or the bus to work, and I only walk short distances when I shop because most stores are close to the stations.

Sugestão: Be direct and use past tense consistently. Begin with a topic sentence, then give a specific example using linking words like 'for example' or 'because'. Avoid fillers and grammatical errors.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. For example, my grandmother used to take my sister and me to her farm every weekend, where we helped her feed the animals and walk around the fields.

Sugestão: Give a more organized answer with varied vocabulary and specific reasons. Start with a general statement, then list two clear reasons with linking words like 'for instance' or 'also'. Avoid short fragments.

Exemplo: People like walking in parks because it is relaxing and good for health. For instance, many walk their dogs, and others, especially older people, go there to do gentle cardio and socialize.

Sugestão: Answer directly with confidence and correct phrasing. Use conditional form properly ('If I had the chance'). Give a clear reason and a specific place or route, avoiding vague phrases like 'beautiful videos'.

Exemplo: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along the Bondi to Coogee coastal trail in Sydney because the sea views and beaches make the hike very scenic and peaceful.

Sugestão: Use past tense consistently and be specific about what you did. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details (where, who, what you did) linked with 'and' or 'so'. Avoid hesitations and repetition.

Exemplo: A couple of days ago I walked around New Tampa City with friends; we browsed several shops and did some window shopping before having coffee together.

× I usually, uh, go to work by taking the MRT or taking a bus and if I want to you know, go shopping, I always text the MRT to the areas.

✓ I usually take the MRT or a bus to go to work, and if I want to go shopping, I always take the MRT to those areas.

The original uses 'by taking' awkwardly; English prefers 'take the MRT' for transport. 'Taking a bus' should be 'a bus' not 'taking a bus' in this parallel structure. Also 'text the MRT' is incorrect verb choice; likely 'take the MRT' was intended. Use 'those areas' instead of 'the areas' for clarity.

× Oh, yeah, I will say yes. When I was a kid, my grandma always took my older sister and me to her farm and we would always, you know, helping my grandmother.

✓ Oh, yeah, I would say yes. When I was a kid, my grandma always took my older sister and me to her farm and we would always help my grandmother.

'I will say' is unnatural in this context; 'I would say' or 'I would say yes' is better. The clause 'we would always, you know, helping' mixes forms; after 'would' use the base verb 'help', not the -ing form. So change to 'we would always help my grandmother.'

× Uh, in my opinion, I think they just, umm, like to walk their dogs in the park and do some cardio exercises. Especially elderly people. I don't go to the park often, so yeah.

✓ In my opinion, people like to walk their dogs in the park and do some cardio exercises, especially elderly people. I don't go to the park often, though.

Sentence fragments: 'Especially elderly people.' should be attached to the previous sentence. 'They' is vague; use 'people' to match the question. 'So yeah' is conversational; 'though' is more natural here. Clarify and combine for grammatical completeness.

× If you have a chance, when it is a tough question, I would probably say Australia, I think, 'cause I know Sydney has a long walk away and there are beautiful videos over there. So, yeah.

✓ If I had the chance, I would probably say Australia, because I know Sydney has long walks and there are beautiful views there.

The response mixes second conditional forms incorrectly. For a hypothetical, use 'If I had the chance, I would...'. 'When it is a tough question' is unnecessary and unclear. 'Long walk away' and 'beautiful videos over there' are incorrect phrases; use 'long walks' and 'beautiful views there.' Also replace informal 'cause' with 'because.'

× Well, recently, like a couple days ago, I went to, uh, New Tampa city to make my friends and we just hang out and go in the shop, uh, when window shopping, so.

✓ Well, recently, a couple of days ago, I went to New Tampa City to meet my friends, and we just hung out and went into shops to do some window shopping.

'Make my friends' is incorrect; use 'meet my friends.' Tense inconsistency: 'we just hang out' should be past tense 'hung out' to match 'went.' 'Go in the shop' should be 'went into shops' and 'when window shopping' should be 'to do some window shopping.' Also add articles and correct prepositions for natural phrasing.