Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make the response more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific supporting details and avoid awkward phrasing. Use linking words to connect ideas and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I walk a lot because I’m trying to lose weight. I usually walk every morning or in the early afternoon and cover about 10 kilometers, which is roughly 10,000 steps. This routine helps me stay active and manage my weight.

Sugestão: Give a direct, grammatically correct topic sentence, then briefly explain reasons with clear linking words. Correct tense and sentence structure are needed; avoid fragmented sentences.

Exemplo: No, I didn’t go for walks often when I was a child. Instead, I spent most of my time at home helping with chores and studying, so I preferred staying indoors.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear reason, then give two or three specific, well-linked details. Avoid repetition of synonyms and unclear words. Use linking words such as 'because', 'for example', or 'also'.

Exemplo: People like to walk in parks because the environment is peaceful and comfortable. For example, parks have benches and paved paths where you can rest, and the trees and green spaces create a calming atmosphere that helps people relax and clear their minds.

Sugestão: Use a simple conditional and avoid repeating ideas. State your preference clearly, then give one or two concise, specific supporting details with linking words.

Exemplo: If I had the chance, I’d like to take a long walk in a local park. Parks have benches and paved paths for comfortable strolling, and the greenery and trees are soothing and help me unwind.

Sugestão: Provide a clear answer about the most recent walk using correct past tense and coherent sentences. Avoid unclear names or fragments; if naming a place, state it cleanly and give a brief reason using linking words.

Exemplo: I started walking about a month ago and recently I went for a walk at McKinley Park because it’s close to my home. There are many other walkers there, which motivates me to exercise more regularly.

× Yes, I do walk a lot because my goal is serious to lose weight.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot because my goal is to lose weight.

The sentence uses an unnecessary emphatic 'do' with a habitual action; use simple present 'I walk' for routines. Also 'my goal is serious to lose weight' is ungrammatical: say 'my goal is to lose weight' to express purpose. Suggestion: Use simple present for habitual actions and the correct infinitive structure 'goal is to + verb'.

× I do it every morning or early in the afternoon for 10 kilometers daily, roughly 10K steps.

✓ I do it every morning or early in the afternoon for 10 kilometers daily, roughly 10k steps.

The use of 'do' is acceptable for emphasis but unnecessary. The main correction is stylistic: keep consistent format '10k' or '10,000' and avoid mixing forms. No major grammatical error; keep simple present for habitual action. Suggestion: Say 'I walk every morning or early in the afternoon for about 10 kilometers, roughly 10k steps.'

× No, I didn't often go outside to have a walk when I was at.

✓ No, I didn't often go outside to go for a walk when I was at home.

The original has an incomplete clause 'when I was at.' which lacks the noun 'home'. Also 'have a walk' is acceptable but 'go for a walk' is more natural. Use past tense 'didn't' with base verb 'go'. Suggestion: Complete the clause and use natural collocation 'go for a walk'.

× Helping my family with the chores and with my studies.

✓ I helped my family with the chores and focused on my studies.

This fragment lacks a subject and finite verb, making it a sentence fragment. Convert to a full sentence in past tense to match the context: 'I helped...' and 'focused on my studies'. Suggestion: Always include a subject and conjugated verb; combine related actions in parallel structure.

× So yeah, I prefer staying at home to do all of those.

✓ So yeah, I preferred staying at home to do those things.

Context refers to childhood, so past tense 'preferred' should be used. Also 'all of those' is awkward; 'those things' is clearer. The verb form 'prefer staying' can be kept but tense must match. Suggestion: Match tense to the time frame and use clear noun phrase 'those things'.

× Well, some people like to walk in parks because there are a lot of benches there, locks.

✓ Well, some people like to walk in parks because there are a lot of benches, paths, and blocks.

The word 'locks' seems incorrect in this context—likely intended 'paths' or 'blocks'. This is a word choice error (adjective/noun misuse). Replace with appropriate nouns. Also remove redundant 'there'. Suggestion: Choose correct nouns for features of parks: 'benches' and 'paths' or 'lawns'.

× Also there are a lot of trees and green spaces which are very pleasing, soothing and pleasant to see so they can relax and think fresh.

✓ Also there are a lot of trees and green spaces which are pleasing and soothing to see, so people can relax and clear their minds.

Redundant adjectives 'pleasing' and 'pleasant' and awkward phrase 'think fresh'. Use 'clear their minds' or 'refresh their thoughts'. Maintain present tense for general statements. Suggestion: Avoid redundancy and use natural collocations like 'clear their minds' or 'feel refreshed'.

× If I will have a chance, I'd like to walk in local parks also because there are a lot of benches and pads where I can relax and stroll comfortably, and also there are a lot of green spaces and trees which are very pleasant and soothing to see, which makes me more relaxed.

✓ If I had the chance, I'd like to walk in local parks because there are many benches and paths where I can relax and stroll comfortably; there are also many green spaces and trees that are pleasant and soothing to see, which would help me relax.

In conditional sentences, the correct form is 'If I had the chance' (second conditional) rather than 'If I will have a chance'. 'Pads' is likely a mistake for 'paths'. Use 'would' to express hypothetical result and concise punctuation. Suggestion: Use correct conditional structure ('If I had..., I would...') and correct park feature vocabulary ('paths' not 'pads').

× Malai started walking a month ago and I walk in McKinley, W because it is close to my home and there are a lot of people who also walk there which makes me more motivated to. Walked in exercise more.

✓ I started walking a month ago and I walk in McKinley Walk because it is close to my home and many people also walk there, which motivates me to exercise more.

The original mixes names and tenses and contains sentence fragments ('which makes me more motivated to. Walked in exercise more.'). Correct by using consistent past simple for start 'I started...', present simple for habits 'I walk...', fix the place name 'McKinley Walk' (assuming intended), and combine fragments into a single coherent sentence. Use 'motivates me to exercise more' as a correct collocation. Suggestion: Keep tense consistency, avoid fragments, and use natural verb phrases like 'motivates me to exercise more'.