Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, avoid redundant phrases, and limit to maximum five sentences. Use linking words properly and fix vocabulary errors (e.g., "electric scooter", "rather not suitable"). Add one specific example about frequency or a recent walk to enrich content.

Exemplo: I don't walk much these days because my schedule is very busy, so I usually use my electric scooter. Also, the hot and rainy weather in Ho Chi Minh City makes walking uncomfortable. However, I try to walk for 20–30 minutes in the evenings on weekends when I have time.

Sugestão: Good structure and specific details, but correct minor grammar errors and tighten phrasing. Use linking words to show sequence or contrast (e.g., "because", "so"). Keep it within five sentences and add a short specific memory to make it more vivid.

Exemplo: Yes, I used to go for walks almost every evening with my family when I was a child because we had several parks near our home. We would play games, explore nature and sometimes have a picnic, so walking became a family tradition that I enjoyed.

Sugestão: Solid, relevant answer with clear reasons. Improve cohesion by starting with a direct topic sentence and using linking words (e.g., "Firstly", "Additionally"). Add a brief example or result to be more specific.

Exemplo: People often walk in parks mainly for exercise and fresh air. For example, regular 30-minute walks in a park can help improve fitness and reduce stress, and parks are safer and more pleasant than busy streets.

Sugestão: Make the topic sentence clearer and correct odd word choices ("in a house" and "St. performances" unclear). Limit to five sentences and give a specific city or example of what you'd explore. Use linking words like "for example" or "such as".

Exemplo: I would like to take a long walk in a historic city center, such as the old quarter of Hanoi. For example, I would stroll along narrow streets to admire the architecture, visit small cafes and watch street performances to learn about the local culture.

Sugestão: Correct grammar and vocabulary errors, make the answer coherent and concise, and avoid unclear phrases (e.g., "pump into friends", "by kids"). Use linking words to sequence actions and provide one specific recent example (where, when, who you met).

Exemplo: Recently I walked around the city center to do some shopping. I enjoyed looking at shop windows and watching a street performer, and I also bumped into a former colleague near a cafe, which made the walk more enjoyable.

× Note, I don't go very often these days.

✓ I don't go very often these days.

The word 'Note' is unnecessary and unusual at the start of this spoken answer. Removing it produces a natural sentence. Suggestion: omit extraneous discourse markers or use 'Actually' or 'To be honest' if you intend to emphasize a contrast.

× My schedule is quite tight, so I usually ride my electrical scooter.

✓ My schedule is quite tight, so I usually ride my electric scooter.

The adjective 'electrical' describes something related to electricity (device type), while 'electric' is the correct adjective for vehicles powered by electricity. Use 'electric scooter'.

× Besides, the weather in Ho Chi Minh City is after not suitable for walking, so I tend to choose other forms of exercise like cycling when I have time.

✓ Besides, the weather in Ho Chi Minh City is not suitable for walking, so I tend to choose other forms of exercise like cycling when I have time.

The extra word 'after' is incorrect here. Remove it to form the correct negation 'is not suitable'. Suggestion: say 'it is often not suitable' if you mean this happens frequently.

× Yes, I used to go for a walks almost every evening with my family when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I used to go for walks almost every evening with my family when I was a child.

The phrase 'a walks' mixes singular and plural. Use either 'a walk' or plural 'walks'. Here 'walks' fits with 'almost every evening'.

× Walking was not only to play with friends or explore nature, but also a family tradition.

✓ Walking was not only for playing with friends or exploring nature, but also a family tradition.

After 'not only' when listing purposes, use 'for' + gerund form. Change infinitives ('to play', 'to explore') to gerunds with 'for' to match parallel structure: 'for playing... or exploring...'.

× I would really like to take a long walk in a house, historical district or an old city center.

✓ I would really like to take a long walk in a historic district or an old city center.

'In a house' is unlikely for a long walk and 'historical district' is better expressed as 'historic district'. Also keep parallel articles consistent: 'a historic district or an old city center' — here 'an' before 'old' remains appropriate; alternatively drop 'a house' which is odd in context.

× I find this fascinating to explore interesting architecture and learn about the city.

✓ I find it fascinating to explore interesting architecture and learn about the city.

Use 'it' as the dummy object for the adjective 'fascinating' when followed by an infinitive clause: 'I find it fascinating to...'.

× City walks are always exciting because they are new shops, cafes, and even St. performances to discover.

✓ City walks are always exciting because there are new shops, cafes, and even street performers to discover.

The original sentence lacks the verb 'are' after 'because' and uses 'St.' incorrectly. Rephrase using 'there are' for existence and expand 'St.' to 'street' and 'performers' for clarity.

× Recently I went for a walk around the city center to do some shopping.

✓ Recently I went for a walk around the city centre to do some shopping.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; only regional spelling 'centre' vs 'center' may vary. No tense correction needed. (Kept as 'centre' if using British English.)

× I really enjoy looking at a shop windows or watching St. performers.

✓ I really enjoy looking at shop windows or watching street performers.

Use 'shop windows' without the article 'a' because windows is plural. Replace 'St.' with 'street' for clarity.

× It's also the right way to relax and sometimes I even pump into friends or colleagues by kids.

✓ It's also the right way to relax, and sometimes I even bump into friends or colleagues with my kids.

Several errors: 'pump' should be 'bump' (to meet by chance). Preposition 'into' follows 'bump'. 'By kids' is incorrect; use 'with my kids' if you mean accompanied by them. Add a comma before 'and' for clarity in speech.