Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. how often you walk), then give one or two supporting reasons using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid vague or self-contradictory phrases and fix verb tenses and subject agreement.

Exemplo: I don't walk a lot, but I try to walk for about 20 minutes most days. Walking clears my head and helps me relax after work, so I usually walk in the evening to wake up my body and reduce stress.

Sugestão: Use correct past tense and a clear topic sentence. Add a specific detail or brief example and a linking word to make it coherent. Keep it to two or three sentences maximum.

Exemplo: Yes, we often walked after dinner when I was a child. It was a family routine and we would chat with neighbors, which helped me feel connected to the community.

Sugestão: Start with a clear reason and use plural/singular correctly. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore) and give one concrete effect. Avoid vague or colloquial phrases like "make you more like a human."

Exemplo: People like walking in parks because parks have open spaces and a peaceful atmosphere. For example, after a busy day, walking there reduces stress and helps people feel refreshed and calmer.

Sugestão: Answer directly with correct conditional grammar and keep sentences concise. Specify a single place and give one or two clear reasons with correct verb forms. Avoid unclear expressions like "fight back the sense of innocence."

Exemplo: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk around my neighborhood because I enjoy talking with elderly neighbors about their experiences. Also, seeing children play lifts my mood and reminds me of simpler times.

Sugestão: Use correct past tense and fix noun errors. Begin with a clear past-tense reply, then add one specific detail about the park and one result. Keep language natural and avoid incorrect phrases like "I can alive."

Exemplo: Recently I went for a walk in a park, as I mentioned earlier. The park is spacious with fresh air and a peaceful atmosphere, and walking there helped me recharge after a busy week.

× Well, I would not say a lot, but I think work, it can clear my head.

✓ Well, I would not say a lot, but I think walking can clear my head.

The sentence uses 'work' incorrectly as a noun here; the speaker means the action 'walking'. Use the gerund 'walking' to refer to the activity. Also remove the unnecessary comma and the pronoun 'it' to create a grammatical subject for 'can clear'. Suggestion: replace 'work, it' with 'walking'.

× When you work, slow down.

✓ When you walk, slow down.

'Work' is incorrect in context; the intended verb is 'walk'. Use the present tense verb 'walk' for general statements. The meaning is giving advice about walking, so 'walk' fits. Suggestion: change 'work' to 'walk'.

× It's a great exercise for you in daily life.

✓ It's a great daily exercise for you.

Word order is awkward. 'Daily' should modify 'exercise', so place it before 'exercise'. Also 'for you' is acceptable but better after 'exercise' to maintain natural English order. Suggestion: say 'a great daily exercise for you'.

× Oh yeah, we usually taking a walk after dinner.

✓ Oh yeah, we usually took a walk after dinner.

The original mixes the adverb 'usually' with a present participle 'taking' which is ungrammatical for past habitual action. The question asks about childhood (past), so use the past tense 'took' or 'used to take'. Suggestion: use 'we usually took a walk' or 'we used to take a walk'.

× It is a pretty common habit and we also chat with our neighbors.

✓ It was a pretty common habit and we also chatted with our neighbors.

The question is about childhood (past). The verbs should be in past tense: 'was' and 'chatted'. Suggestion: change present tense verbs to past tense for past context.

× I think it is a good method to connect with our community.

✓ I think it was a good way to connect with our community.

For past context, use past tense 'was'. Also 'method' is formal; 'way' is more natural in conversation. 'It' refers to the habit, so past reference 'was' is required. Suggestion: use 'was' and consider 'way' instead of 'method'.

× From my point of view, I think park has an more open spaces and it has tranquil and peaceful atmosphere.

✓ From my point of view, I think the park has more open space and a tranquil, peaceful atmosphere.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'park'. 'an' is incorrect before 'more' and 'spaces' should be singular 'space' or 'open spaces' without 'an'. Also 'a tranquil, peaceful atmosphere' needs the article 'a' and adjectives separated by a comma. Use singular or plural consistently. Suggestion: use 'the park has more open space and a tranquil, peaceful atmosphere'.

× You can release your stress there after a busy works and you can recharge yourself.

✓ You can relieve your stress there after a busy week and you can recharge yourself.

'Release your stress' is unnatural; 'relieve' or 'reduce' is better. 'a busy works' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'a busy week' or 'busy work' depending on intended meaning. 'Relieve your stress after a busy week' is natural. Suggestion: replace with 'relieve your stress after a busy week'.

× Make you more like a human I think.

✓ It makes you feel more human, I think.

Original is a fragment without a proper subject and verb form. Use 'It makes you feel more human' to express the idea; add 'I think' as a comment. Suggestion: use 'It makes you feel more human, I think.'

× Well, if I have the chance, I think I would choose to work around the neighborhood because I can chat with my neighbors or some elderly people who has many interesting experiences and I can play with some kids to fight back the sense of innocence.

✓ Well, if I had the chance, I think I would choose to walk around the neighborhood because I could chat with my neighbors or some elderly people who have many interesting experiences, and I could play with some kids to recapture a sense of innocence.

The conditional 'if I had the chance' requires past subjunctive 'had' to match 'would choose'. 'Work around the neighborhood' is incorrect; use 'walk around the neighborhood'. 'Who has' should be 'who have' to agree with plural 'people'. 'Fight back the sense of innocence' is awkward; 'recapture a sense of innocence' or 'relive a sense of innocence' is more natural. Also verbs in consequent clause should use 'could' to match hypothetical condition. Suggestion: use correct conditional form, plural verb agreement, and natural phrasing like 'walk', 'have', 'recapture'.

× Well, actually it's a park, just like I mentioned before.

✓ Well, actually it's a park, just like I mentioned before.

No grammatical change required here; sentence is acceptable. (If treating past reference, 'mentioned' is correct past tense.)

× I think a text is very spacious and it's tranquil atmosphere and fresh air there can let me recharge myself.

✓ I think the park is very spacious, and its tranquil atmosphere and fresh air there can let me recharge.

'a text' is incorrect word choice; likely 'the park'. Use definite article 'the park'. 'Spacious' not 'spacious' vs 'spacious' ok. 'It's tranquil atmosphere' should be 'its' (possessive) not 'it's' (contraction). 'Let me recharge myself' is wordy; 'let me recharge' is preferable. Also punctuation needed to join clauses. Suggestion: use 'the park', 'its tranquil atmosphere', and 'let me recharge'.

× Then I can alive after a busy week.

✓ Then I can feel alive after a busy week.

'Alive' is an adjective; you cannot say 'can alive'. Use a verb such as 'feel' with the adjective: 'feel alive'. This matches meaning and grammatical structure. Suggestion: use 'feel alive'.