Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar; start with a clear topic sentence, use one or two supporting details with correct verb forms and avoid filler words. Mention specifics (times, duration) and connect ideas with linking words.

Exemplo: Yes, I walk a lot. I usually take two 30-minute walks, one in the morning and one in the evening, because walking keeps me healthy and helps me reach my goal of 10,000 steps a day.

Sugestão: Use correct tense and concise support. Begin with a past-tense topic sentence, then give one or two specific details about who you went with or what you saw, using linking words to make it coherent.

Exemplo: Yes, I often went for walks with my friends when I was a child. We explored nearby fields and parks, and sometimes we discovered small streams or hidden paths that felt like little adventures.

Sugestão: Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Give a clear main reason and two specific supporting reasons with linking words. Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., 'refreshing', 'designated paths').

Exemplo: People like walking in parks because the environment is peaceful and safe. For example, parks have designated paths for walking and green spaces that feel refreshing, and they also provide chances to meet and talk with other walkers.

Sugestão: Use conditional and future forms correctly and be specific but concise. State the location clearly, give one or two reasons why, and remove hesitations. Include distance or difficulty as supporting detail.

Exemplo: If I had the chance, I would walk to Hempsteadwara at the top of the mountain. It is a challenging nine-kilometer trail, and I would enjoy the scenery and the sense of achievement when I reach the summit.

Sugestão: Use simple past consistently and be more specific about what you did. Start with a clear past-tense sentence, then add one or two concrete details (what you saw, who you met, what exercise you did), and avoid vague phrases.

Exemplo: Recently I walked in the village garden in the evening. There were many people there; I chatted with some neighbours and did a short set of stretching exercises and brisk walking for about 30 minutes.

× Yes, I walk a lot daily.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot every day.

Use 'every day' as two words for frequency; 'daily' is acceptable but 'every day' is more natural here. This fixes adverb choice (present tense frequency adverb).

× Usually I try to walk everyday because it keeps me healthy and fit.

✓ Usually I try to walk every day because it keeps me healthy and fit.

'Every day' should be two words; 'everyday' as one word is an adjective meaning 'common'. Use present simple 'try to walk' for habitual action which is correct; only the adverb form was wrong.

× Even I usually take a 30 minute walks in the evening and in the morning which also boost me and even I uh take 10,000 steps in a.

✓ I usually take a 30-minute walk in the morning and in the evening, which also boosts me, and I also take 10,000 steps a day.

Use singular 'walk' with the compound adjective '30-minute' before it. Hyphenate as a modifier; plural 'walks' is inconsistent with 'a 30-minute'. 'Boost' must be 'boosts' to agree with singular subject 'which' referring to the walk (subject-verb agreement). 'Even I uh' is unnecessary; use 'I also'. Finished with 'a day' to make the time expression complete.

× Yes, when I was a child I often go outside for a walk with my friends and we enjoy a lot while walking and even we explore new places while walking.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I often went outside for a walk with my friends; we enjoyed ourselves a lot while walking and we explored new places.

The time frame 'when I was a child' requires past tense verbs: 'went', 'enjoyed', 'explored'. Use 'enjoyed ourselves' for correct reflexive pronoun and natural phrasing. Combine clauses to improve sentence structure.

× People prefer to walk in parks because it is a place where they can freely walk because in park a track is made for walking and even I will leave it.

✓ People prefer to walk in parks because they can walk freely there; parks often have tracks for walking, and I would choose them.

Replace incorrect phrase 'in park a track is made' with natural phrasing 'parks often have tracks'. 'Freely walk because in park' is awkward; use 'walk freely there'. 'I will leave it' is unclear; 'I would choose them' fits the conditional sense. Prepositions and article use were corrected ('in parks', 'there').

× Walking on grass is best because it aids them fresh and even they interact with others.

✓ Walking on grass is best because it refreshes them, and they can interact with others.

'Aids them fresh' is incorrect collocation; use 'refreshes them' or 'helps them feel refreshed'. Use modal 'can' to indicate possibility for interaction. Adjusted verb forms for clarity.

× So when I will get a chance to take a long walk, I will go to a Hempsteadwara, uh, which is on the top of the mountain, which, uh, require 9 kilometer walk to reach there.

✓ If I get a chance to take a long walk, I will go to Hempsteadwara, which is on the top of a mountain and requires a 9-kilometer walk to reach.

In conditional sentences of real possibility, use present simple in the 'if' clause ('If I get') not 'when I will get'. 'Require' must be 'requires' to agree with singular subject 'which' (subject-verb agreement). Use 'a mountain' and 'a 9-kilometer walk' with hyphenated compound adjective. Removed filler words for clarity.

× So once I remember I went for a walk lately in the evening in the nearby garden of our village where a lot of people was there and I interacted with everyone and have done some exercise.

✓ I remember that I went for a walk recently in the evening in the nearby village garden, where a lot of people were, and I interacted with everyone and did some exercise.

'Lately' with past simple is awkward; use 'recently'. 'A lot of people was' is wrong: use plural verb 'were'. 'Have done' mixes tenses; use past simple 'did' to match 'went' and the completed action. Reorder phrases for natural English.