Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be slightly more concise and correct small grammar/fluency issues. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and use one or two supporting details with linking words. Also correct verb forms and articles.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I enjoy walking because it helps me relax and clear my head. For example, I often walk around my quiet subdivision, where there are few people, so it feels peaceful and safe.

Sugestão: Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and correct tense or vocabulary errors (e.g., "shaped my childhood"). Use linking words to connect ideas and give one or two specific memories.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. As a child I often went out with my brother, usually in the afternoons. For example, we would ride our bikes to the beach, play with friends and have picnics, and those fun outings really shaped my childhood.

Sugestão: Good content and specific reasons. Make the response more natural by reducing repetition and using linking words (e.g., "because", "for example", "moreover"). Combine similar ideas into one fluent sentence and use varied vocabulary.

Exemplo: People like walking in parks because the environment is calm and safe; for example, you can enjoy trees, birds and open paths. Moreover, walking there feels refreshing and helps reduce stress.

Sugestão: Be more fluent and avoid filler words like "uh". Start with a direct statement, then give specific reasons and link them. Correct small phrasing issues (e.g., "imagining the past events related to Jose Rizal").

Exemplo: I would love to take a long walk in Intramuros, a historic part of our city. I would walk slowly along the old streets and imagine past events, especially those connected to our national hero Jose Rizal, which would make the walk meaningful.

Sugestão: Improve sentence flow and grammar: use past tense consistently and plural forms when needed (e.g., "a watch" -> "a watch" or "watches"). Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give brief supporting details and a linking word to conclude.

Exemplo: Recently I went for a walk inside the SM department store with my husband and son. We shopped for my son's necessities, like sunglasses and a watch, and it was pleasant because the mall was air-conditioned.

× Yes I in fact I do.

✓ Yes, in fact I do.

The sentence has redundant subject phrase 'I' repeated. Also needs a comma after 'Yes' for natural pacing. Remove the extra 'I' to correct sentence structure and maintain present tense form. Suggestion: Say 'Yes, in fact I do.' to be concise and grammatically correct.

× It is one of the things that makes me relaxed and clear my head.

✓ It is one of the things that makes me feel relaxed and clear my head.

After 'makes me' a verb or verb phrase is required. 'Relaxed' alone is an adjective and collocates with 'feel' in this context. Adding 'feel' produces the correct causative meaning: something makes me feel a certain way. Suggestion: Use 'makes me feel relaxed' when describing an emotional or physical state caused by something.

× I live in a subdivision where there aren't many people around so it is peaceful for walking.

✓ I live in a subdivision where there aren't many people around, so it is peaceful to walk.

The phrase 'peaceful for walking' is awkward; the correct idiom is 'peaceful to walk' or 'peaceful for walking in'. Also a comma before 'so' improves sentence flow. Use 'to walk' to express suitability for walking. Suggestion: Prefer 'peaceful to walk' or 'peaceful for walking' with proper preposition placement; include comma before coordinating conjunction 'so'.

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ When you were a child, did you often go outside to have a walk?

Question is grammatically acceptable, but moving the time phrase to the front improves natural word order and emphasis in past tense questions. No tense change necessary; keep past simple for past habits. Suggestion: Place temporal adverbials at the beginning for clearer spoken questions: 'When you were a child, did you often...?'.

× Yes, I did. As a child I often went outside with my brother, especially in the afternoons.

✓ Yes, I did. As a child, I often went outside with my brother, especially in the afternoons.

Missing comma after the introductory phrase 'As a child'. The tense and verb are correct (past simple) for childhood habits. Suggestion: Insert comma after introductory adverbial phrases.

× I remember we would often ride our our bikes, go to the beach and eat with our friends.

✓ I remember we would often ride our bikes, go to the beach, and eat with our friends.

The word 'our' is duplicated by mistake. Also include a comma before the final item in the list (Oxford comma) for clarity. The verbs are parallel and correctly in past habitual form 'would'. Suggestion: Remove duplicated word and maintain parallel structure in lists.

× We like traveling and going to the beach.

✓ We liked traveling and going to the beach.

This sentence refers to past memories, so past tense 'liked' fits the surrounding past context. Using present 'like' creates a tense inconsistency with previous sentences about childhood. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent with the narrative—use past tense when describing past habits.

× These memories shaped my child.

✓ These memories shaped my childhood.

The noun 'child' refers to a young person; the intended meaning is 'childhood', the period of being a child. Use the correct noun to express that memories influenced that period. Suggestion: Use 'childhood' when referring to the period of being a child.

× I think people like walking in parks because it is an appropriate place for walking and as you walk in a park, you can observe the surroundings such as the trees, the people around, the animals and the nature.

✓ I think people like walking in parks because they are appropriate places for walking, and as you walk in a park you can observe the surroundings such as trees, people, animals, and nature.

Several issues: 'it is an appropriate place' should agree in number with 'parks' (they/places). Repetition of 'the' before general nouns is unnecessary; use plural or uncountable forms without 'the' when speaking generally. Remove comma before 'you' in the subordinate clause and add commas for list separation. Suggestion: Match number between subject and pronoun, avoid unnecessary definite articles in general statements, and keep parallel structure.

× If I had the chance, I think I would choose to take a long walk in the Intramuros.

✓ If I had the chance, I think I would choose to take a long walk in Intramuros.

'Intramuros' is a proper place name; adding 'the' is usually not necessary unless the official name includes it. Omitting 'the' sounds more natural in English for many place names. Suggestion: Use 'in Intramuros' unless referring to a specific area called 'the Intramuros' in local usage.

× I think I would enjoy walking there slowly and taking, uh, imagining the past that happened, particularly in the life of our national hero, Jose Rizal.

✓ I think I would enjoy walking there slowly and imagining the past, particularly the life of our national hero, Jose Rizal.

The phrase 'taking, uh, imagining the past that happened' is awkward and redundant. Use 'imagining the past' or 'imagining what happened in the past'. Also 'particularly in the life of' is wordy; 'particularly the life of' is clearer. Use gerund 'imagining' parallel to 'walking'. Suggestion: Keep parallel gerunds and remove filler words; say 'walking... and imagining the past' or 'walking... and imagining what happened'.

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where have you gone for a walk lately?

When asking about recent experiences with 'lately', present perfect is usually preferred in English (have you gone) rather than simple past 'did you go'. Use present perfect to connect past events to the present. Suggestion: Use 'have you gone' with 'lately' or 'recently'.

× Lately I went for a walk inside the SM department store where I went with my husband and son.

✓ Lately I went for a walk inside the SM department store with my husband and son.

The phrase 'where I went with my husband and son' is redundant because the location clause repeats the verb 'went'. Also, when using 'lately' with past simple it's acceptable but present perfect is more natural. Keeping past simple, remove redundancy and place companions after the location. Suggestion: Say 'Lately I went for a walk inside the SM department store with my husband and son' or 'Lately I have gone for a walk inside the SM department store with my husband and son'.

× We shopped for my son's necessities such as sunglasses and watch.

✓ We shopped for my son's necessities such as sunglasses and a watch.

Countable noun 'watch' requires an article 'a' in this context. Also 'necessities' is fine but ensure each countable item has correct article or plural form. Suggestion: Use 'a watch' for singular countable nouns and include articles accordingly.

× It was a nice walk because it was inside an air conditioned mall.

✓ It was a nice walk because it was inside an air-conditioned mall.

Compound adjective 'air-conditioned' should be hyphenated when used before a noun. The sentence is otherwise acceptable. Consider using 'enclosed' or 'air-conditioned' as descriptive adjectives. Suggestion: Hyphenate compound adjectives before nouns: 'air-conditioned mall'.