Reading— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and grammatically accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you like reading, avoid filler words (uh), and correct grammar (e.g., "I'm tired of people constantly updating information on the internet, so reading is my cup of tea"). Provide one brief reason or example to support your opinion.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy reading. I'm often tired of the constant updates on social media, so I prefer reading books because they allow me to focus and relax for longer periods.

Sugestão: Give a direct preference first, then support with a clear, specific reason. Avoid vague statements and incorrect grammar. Mention one concrete benefit of screens (e.g., portability, adjustable text) and acknowledge a limitation if relevant.

Exemplo: I prefer reading on a screen. Digital reading is more portable and allows me to adjust font size and carry many books, and it also reduces paper waste compared with printed books.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear topic sentence answering when you read carefully. Use clearer vocabulary (e.g., "focus" instead of "scheming") and give a concise example for each case. Use linking words to contrast (e.g., "however", "whereas").

Exemplo: I read carefully when the material is important, for example for academic study or official news, because accuracy matters. However, I skim light content such as blogs or social media posts when I just want entertainment.

Sugestão: Answer directly and avoid hesitations. Use correct sentence structure and complete the thought. State the general rule and give two clear examples using linking words ("for example", "on the other hand").

Exemplo: It depends on the purpose. For important texts like academic papers or official news I read in detail to understand everything; on the other hand, for entertainment articles I usually scan to get the main idea quickly.

× Actually, I am the tired of people that uh, usually updating new information on the Internet, so I think that readings is my cup of tea.

✓ Actually, I am tired of people who usually update new information on the Internet, so I think reading is my cup of tea.

Error: unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'tired' and incorrect plural noun 'readings'; also 'that' used for people should be 'who', and verb form 'updating' should be 'update' to match the simple present. Suggestions: Remove 'the' ('I am tired'), use 'who' for people, use simple present 'update' for habitual actions, and use the uncountable noun 'reading' for the activity.

× Because of the development of technology, I think that people don't usually use paper anymore because of their harm to the environment. So I think we are better reading on the screen.

✓ Because of the development of technology, I think people don't usually use paper anymore because it harms the environment. So I think we are better off reading on a screen.

Error: 'their harm' incorrectly refers to people; use 'it harms' to refer to paper (singular) or 'its harm'. Also 'better reading on the screen' is awkward; use 'better off reading on a screen' and 'a screen' is more natural than 'the screen'. Suggestions: Ensure pronouns agree with their antecedents and use 'better off' to express preference, and use appropriate articles with countable nouns.

× I will put my concentration on some content that are important and necessary in life, such as academic education or news, and I'm just scheming about the content that is just for entertainment on top.

✓ I will concentrate on content that is important and necessary in life, such as academic material or news, and I'm just skimming content that is just for entertainment.

Error: 'content that are' has plural verb 'are' but 'content' is treated as singular/uncountable here so use 'is'. 'Put my concentration on' is unnatural; use 'concentrate on'. 'Scheming' is incorrect word choice; likely 'skimming' (quickly reading). 'Academic education' is awkward; use 'academic material'. Suggestions: Ensure subject-verb agreement, choose correct collocations ('concentrate on', 'skimming'), and replace awkward phrases.

× It is depend based on the, the importance of the information I have to read, uh, for the problem about academics, education and news our greeted carefully and for the, uh, information that is entertained, uh, I will.

✓ It depends on the importance of the information I have to read; for academic problems and news I read carefully, and for information that is just for entertainment I scan it.

Errors: 'It is depend' should be 'It depends' (verb agreement), 'our greeted carefully' is incorrect and unclear — likely intended 'are read carefully' or 'I read carefully'. 'Information that is entertained' is wrong; use 'information that is just for entertainment'. Also sentence fragments and missing main verb at end. Suggestions: Use correct verb forms ('depends'), ensure subjects and verbs agree, use clear verbs for reading actions ('read carefully', 'scan').