Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is clear, relevant and mostly natural. To improve, make your response slightly more concise and add a brief reason or example showing how practicing daily or playing multiple instruments benefits you. Use a linking word to connect ideas smoothly (for example, “also” → “in addition” or “besides”).

Exemplo: I enjoy playing the flute; I’ve been learning it for about two years at school and practice almost every day. In addition, I play the piano, which helps me understand music theory better and improves my coordination when learning new pieces.

Sugestão: Good structure and specific details. To improve, tighten the language to avoid redundancy (e.g., “random stories” and “inventing” overlap) and add a short linking phrase to show cause and effect (for example, “because” or “which meant”).

Exemplo: As a child, I loved playing with my stuffed animals because arranging them and inventing stories felt relaxing and boosted my creativity. As a result, I kept a large collection at home, and those toys still bring back fond memories.

Sugestão: The answer responds directly and gives reasons, but there are grammar and coherence issues and a minor vocabulary error. Use correct tense consistency (e.g., "I took" → "I have taken" or keep past), avoid informal phrasing like "more easy" (use "easier"), and use a linking word such as "however" or "so" correctly. Also shorten to within 4–5 sentences and be specific about why the flute is easier.

Exemplo: I’ve loved playing the piano since I was six and took lessons throughout my childhood. However, I don’t have much time to practice now because of schoolwork, so I’ve started learning the flute instead. I find the flute easier to pick up for simple melodies, which lets me keep playing music despite my busy schedule.

Sugestão: This answer is natural and coherent. To improve, make the connection between past and present clearer (for example, whether the sister still shares the hobby), and vary vocabulary slightly (use "pastime" only once). Add a linking word like "so" or "therefore" to join ideas smoothly.

Exemplo: Yes. When we were children, my younger sister and I both enjoyed playing with stuffed animals, and we often made up stories and role-played. That shared pastime helped us bond and created many happy memories.

× I enjoy playing the flute.

✓ I enjoy playing the flute.

No change needed; sentence is correct present simple for habitual activity.

× I've been learning the instrument for about two years at school and I practice it almost every day.

✓ I've been learning the instrument at school for about two years, and I practice it almost every day.

The original meaning is fine but natural English prefers placing the time/location phrase 'at school' directly after 'learning the instrument' or after 'for about two years' for clarity. Reordering improves flow: 'at school' follows 'learning the instrument' and the comma joins the two independent clauses. Suggestion: Place modifiers close to the verb they modify to avoid ambiguity.

× And I also like playing other instruments such as the piano, which gives me a broader musical background.

✓ I also like playing other instruments such as the piano, which gives me a broader musical background.

Beginning a sentence with 'And' is informal but not ungrammatical; removing it tightens formal spoken/written style. The sentence is otherwise correct. Suggestion: Avoid starting sentences with coordinating conjunctions in formal responses.

× When I was a child, one of my favorite hobbies was playing with my stuffed animals.

✓ When I was a child, one of my favorite hobbies was playing with my stuffed animals.

Sentence is grammatically correct in past tense; no change needed.

× I found arranging them and inventing random stories for them very relaxing and it helped me be creative.

✓ I found arranging them and inventing random stories for them very relaxing, and it helped me to be creative.

Adding 'to' before 'be creative' is more idiomatic after 'helped' in this context: 'helped me to be creative.' Alternatively 'helped me be creative' is acceptable in informal usage. Suggestion: Use 'helped me to' for clearer, slightly more formal tone.

× So I kept a large collection at home, which still brings back fond memories.

✓ So I kept a large collection at home, which still brings back fond memories.

Grammatically correct; 'which' clearly refers to the collection. No correction needed.

× Since I was 6 I have loved playing the piano and took lessons throughout my childhood.

✓ Since I was six I have loved playing the piano and took lessons throughout my childhood.

Mixing 'Since I was six I have loved' (present perfect) with 'took lessons throughout my childhood' (simple past) can be acceptable because lessons occurred in the past while the love continues. Change numeric '6' to word 'six' for formality. Suggestion: If you want perfect consistency, say 'and have taken lessons throughout my childhood' to emphasize continuity.

× I still enjoy playing, but nowadays I don't have much time to practice because I'm busy with schoolwork.

✓ I still enjoy playing, but nowadays I don't have much time to practice because I'm busy with schoolwork.

Sentence is correct; tense usage appropriately contrasts ongoing enjoyment with current lack of time.

× So instead I'm trying to learn how to play the flute because I believe it's more easy.

✓ So instead I'm trying to learn how to play the flute because I believe it's easier.

'More easy' is nonstandard comparative; the correct comparative form is 'easier.' Suggestion: Use 'easier' rather than 'more easy.'

× Yes, I used to love playing with stuffed animals and my younger sister enjoys the same pastime.

✓ Yes, I used to love playing with stuffed animals, and my younger sister enjoys the same pastime.

Add a comma before the conjunction joining two independent clauses. The verbs 'used to love' (past habit) and 'enjoys' (present habit of sister) are correct. No tense change needed.

× It's a very comforting and relaxing activity, so we would often make up little stories and role play with them when we were kids.

✓ It was a very comforting and relaxing activity, so we often made up little stories and role-played with them when we were kids.

Because the speaker refers to childhood, past tense 'was' and 'made up/role-played' are more appropriate than 'it's' and 'would often make.' Using 'would' is possible for habitual past but pairing it with present 'it's' is inconsistent. Also 'role-played' is the past form. Suggestion: Keep past tense consistently when describing past habitual actions.