Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct minor grammar (e.g., “heel” → “heels” or “heels/heels dance” unclear). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Mention why you enjoy it or a recent achievement to add substance. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: I enjoy dancing and have been taking classes since I was 14, so I’ve been dancing for almost two years. I study hip hop, jazz and heels, and I’m strongest in hip hop. Because hip hop lets me express energy and rhythm, I practice three times a week and recently performed in a local showcase.

Sugestão: Use past tense consistently and be specific about timing and feelings. Begin with a direct past-tense topic sentence, then add one specific detail and a linking word to explain. Avoid repeating obvious phrases like “those were all my hobbies.”

Exemplo: Yes, I did. When I was young and living in the United States, I took gymnastics, figure skating and soccer classes after school. As a result, I became quite coordinated and enjoyed the variety of activities, especially figure skating because it felt graceful.

Sugestão: Correct grammar (e.g., say “Yes, I’ve been running since childhood” and avoid redundant phrases like “elementary school student”). Provide clearer timeline and link past to present with a linking word. Mention frequency or accomplishment to make it more specific and natural.

Exemplo: Yes, I’ve been running since childhood. In elementary school I was one of the fastest in my class and often led races, and now I’m a running team leader at my high school, so I train with teammates three times a week.

Sugestão: Make sentences more natural and grammatically correct (e.g., “we all enjoy hiking and mountain climbing”). Use linking words to explain routine and add a specific example or reason why you like it. Replace awkward phrases like “look up for a highest mountain” with “look for the highest peak” and use realistic time expressions.

Exemplo: Yes, my family and I all enjoy hiking and climbing mountains. Whenever we travel, we usually look for the highest nearby peak and often hike for around six hours, and sometimes we have lunch at the summit to enjoy the view.

× Yes, I have a hobby and it is to dance.

✓ Yes, I have a hobby: dancing.

Use of verb + -ing (gerund) is preferred after 'hobby' to refer to the activity. 'To dance' is an infinitive; 'dancing' is more natural when naming a hobby. Suggestion: use 'dancing' after 'hobby' or say 'My hobby is dance.'

× I have been taking dance classes since I was 14 years old, so it has been almost two years since I started.

✓ I have been taking dance classes since I was 14 years old, so it has been almost two years.

The speaker already used present perfect continuous 'have been taking' with 'since' to indicate duration; repeating 'since I started' is redundant. The final clause 'it has been almost two years' correctly expresses duration. Suggestion: drop redundant phrase or say 'I started two years ago.'

× Specifically, I take hip hop, jazz and heel genres, but I'm good at hip hop.

✓ Specifically, I take hip-hop, jazz and heels classes, but I'm best at hip-hop.

'Heel' as a genre is incorrect; 'heels' classes (dancing in heels) or 'hip-hop' should be hyphenated and pluralized when listing classes. Also 'good at' is acceptable but 'best at' is clearer when comparing. Suggestion: use correct dance names and plural form for classes.

× Yes, I have. When I was young, I lived in the United States and took classes for gymnastic, figure skating, and soccer, so those were all my hobbies.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was young, I lived in the United States and took classes in gymnastics, figure skating, and soccer, so those were all my hobbies.

Answering a past-question should use 'I did' rather than 'I have.' 'Gymnastic' should be the noun 'gymnastics.' Use 'took classes in' rather than 'for.' Suggestion: match past tense answer and correct noun forms.

× I took classes after school every single day.

✓ I took classes after school every day.

Grammatically correct, but 'every single day' is wordy; 'every day' is more natural. No tense change needed. Suggestion: simplify to 'every day.'

× Yes, it is to run.

✓ Yes, it is running.

As with hobbies, use gerund 'running' not infinitive 'to run.' Also 'Yes, it is running' sounds awkward; better: 'Yes, running' or 'Yes, my hobby is running.' Suggestion: use 'My hobby is running.'

× When I was in elementary school student, I was one of the fastest runners in my class and I was always chosen as a leader of running and now I'm a leader as well in high school.

✓ When I was an elementary school student, I was one of the fastest runners in my class and I was always chosen to lead races; now I'm a team leader in high school.

'Elementary school student' needs an article and correct word order. 'Chosen as a leader of running' is awkward; say 'chosen to lead races' or 'chosen as captain.' 'Now I'm a leader as well in high school' is better as 'now I'm a team leader in high school.' Suggestion: fix article placement, use more natural verbs ('chosen to lead'), and concise phrasing.

× Yes, we have the same hobby and it is to climb a mountain.

✓ Yes, we have the same hobby: mountain climbing.

'Hobby' singular is OK but 'to climb a mountain' sounds like a one-time action. Use gerund 'mountain climbing' to describe the hobby generally. Suggestion: use 'mountain climbing' or 'climbing mountains.'

× When we travel somewhere, we always look up for a highest mountain and we always climb mountains for six hours by walk and sometimes we eat lunch on the top.

✓ When we travel somewhere, we always look for the highest mountain and we always climb for six hours on foot, and sometimes we eat lunch at the top.

'Look up for' is incorrect; use 'look for.' 'A highest mountain' should be 'the highest mountain' when comparing; article correction needed. 'Climb mountains for six hours by walk' is unidiomatic; use 'climb for six hours on foot' or 'hike for six hours.' 'Eat lunch on the top' should be 'eat lunch at the top.' Suggestion: correct prepositions and articles and use natural phrases like 'on foot' and 'at the top.'