Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting points with linking words. Avoid unclear phrases like "my hobby is safe" and irrelevant or inaccurate claims (e.g., sleeping to lose weight) unless you briefly explain them. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., "pastime" or "relax") and keep to 2–4 sentences.

Exemplo: I enjoy sleeping in my free time because it helps me relax and recharge. For example, after a long day of studying I usually nap for an hour, which improves my concentration later. Also, I find that getting enough sleep helps me maintain a healthier lifestyle overall.

Sugestão: Answer directly and clearly with correct grammar and specific details. Start with a topic sentence: name the hobby, then add concise supporting details (what you made, how often, why). Avoid hesitations and unclear fragments. Use linking words such as "for example" or "so" to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes. When I was a child I loved drawing and making paper crafts. For example, I often drew animals and made little paper scenes on weekends, which helped me develop patience and creativity.

Sugestão: Be concise and grammatically correct. Begin with a clear topic sentence saying yes or no, then explain briefly why you kept the hobby and give a specific example. Replace vague phrases like "take a look something new in" with clearer expressions (e.g., "discover new products"). Limit to 2–3 sentences and use linking words such as "because" or "so".

Exemplo: Yes, I have continued shopping since childhood because I enjoy browsing new items and spending time with my mother. For instance, we often visit local markets on weekends to discover new clothes and home goods, which helps me relax and find inspiration.

Sugestão: Give a direct response and specific comparisons. Start with a clear statement about who shares your hobbies, then give brief examples and use linking words (e.g., "however", "but"). Avoid vague or contradictory sentences and correct grammar (e.g., "we don't" instead of "we just doesn't"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: I share a hobby with my mother — we both enjoy shopping — but my father and brother have different interests. For example, my father prefers reading and my brother enjoys football, so we usually talk about family life rather than hobbies when we're together.

× Actually, my hobby is safe.

✓ Actually, my hobby is sleeping.

The original sentence uses 'safe' which is incorrect word choice; the speaker means the hobby itself (a noun) should be 'sleeping'. Use the gerund 'sleeping' to name an activity as a hobby (present tense nominal form). Replace the adjective 'safe' with the gerund form of the verb to correctly identify the hobby.

× When I feel bored or when I have free time, I will sleep because sleep is not only good for my health but also can store my energy.

✓ When I feel bored or when I have free time, I sleep because sleeping is not only good for my health but also helps me restore my energy.

The use of 'will' is unnecessary for habitual actions; use simple present 'sleep'. 'Sleep' as a noun is better expressed as 'sleeping' (gerund) when describing a general activity, and 'can store my energy' is awkward: use 'helps me restore my energy' to convey meaning. This fixes tense and verb form issues.

× Therefore, I really like to sleep and when I need to lose weight, I will sleep too.

✓ Therefore, I really like sleeping, and when I need to lose weight, I also sleep.

Prefer the gerund 'sleeping' after 'like'. For habitual actions, use simple present 'sleep' instead of 'will sleep'. Also move 'also' to natural position 'also sleep'. This corrects verb form and tense consistency.

× One of my hobby when I was a child is drawing.

✓ One of my hobbies when I was a child was drawing.

Singular/plural and tense errors: 'One of my hobby' should be 'One of my hobbies' (plural 'hobbies' after 'one of'). The clause refers to the past, so use past tense 'was' rather than present 'is'.

× I really like to drawing or do some handmade like some may like some cute, uh cute scenes made by paper but a map mad at.

✓ I really liked drawing or doing handmade crafts, like making cute paper scenes or small paper models.

After 'like', use either 'to draw' or the gerund 'drawing'; mixing 'to drawing' is incorrect. For activities, prefer gerunds 'drawing' and 'doing'. The sentence also has unclear vocabulary; replace with 'handmade crafts', 'making cute paper scenes' and 'paper models' for clarity. Use past tense 'liked' to match 'when I was a child'.

× Uh, I have a hobby when I was a child is, uh, shopping.

✓ When I was a child, a hobby I had was shopping.

Tense mismatch and sentence structure: 'I have a hobby when I was a child is' mixes present 'have' and past 'was'. Use past tense 'had' and restructure the sentence: 'When I was a child, a hobby I had was shopping.' This fixes tense and sentence structure.

× I really enjoy go shopping with my mother or my friend because during the shopping I can release the stress.

✓ I really enjoy going shopping with my mother or my friends because while shopping I can relieve stress.

After 'enjoy', use the gerund 'going' not the base verb 'go'. 'My friend' should be plural 'my friends' if general, or keep singular consistently. 'During the shopping' is awkward; 'while shopping' is natural. Use 'relieve stress' instead of 'release the stress'.

× Not only that, I can, uh, take a look something, uh, new in.

✓ Also, I can look at new things while shopping.

The original is fragmented and ungrammatical: 'take a look something, new in' is incorrect. Use 'look at new things' which is concise and grammatically correct. Position 'while shopping' to clarify when.

× Actually I'm not sure maybe I have the same hobby with my mother is shopping but my father we don't have the same hobby.

✓ Actually I'm not sure. Maybe I have the same hobby as my mother; she likes shopping, but my father does not share the same hobby.

Use 'same hobby as' not 'with'. The clause 'my mother is shopping' is awkward—say 'she likes shopping'. For negatives, use 'does not' with third-person singular 'father'. Also split into clearer sentences and correct pronoun reference.

× So usually when we stick together we just doesn't share anything to each other, we just share our life.

✓ So usually when we are together, we don't share hobbies; we just share our lives.

'Stick together' is informal; 'are together' is clearer. Subject-verb agreement: 'we just doesn't' should be 'we don't'. 'Share anything to each other' is incorrect preposition and phrasing; use 'share hobbies' or 'share things with each other'. 'Share our life' should be plural 'our lives'.

× But we don't have the same hobby with my father and also my brother is.

✓ But I don't have the same hobby as my father, and my brother doesn't either.

Use 'same hobby as' for comparisons. The original ends with 'my brother is' which is incomplete. Use 'my brother doesn't either' to indicate he also does not share the hobby. Ensure subject-verb agreement 'doesn't' for third-person singular.