Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct small grammar mistakes; use one clear topic sentence then 1–2 supporting details with linking words. Avoid repetition ("gives me" twice) and minor subject-verb agreement errors ("help" → "helps"). Also vary vocabulary (e.g., "relaxing" or "therapeutic") and limit to 3–4 sentences to sound natural.

Exemplo: I enjoy several hobbies, but painting is my favourite. Whenever I have free time, I take out my sketchbook and draw on my balcony because the fresh air and view make painting feel relaxing and help me express my imagination.

Sugestão: Reduce hesitation and correct grammar: use past tense consistently and avoid fillers. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific examples linked with connectors (e.g., "for example", "sometimes"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I had many hobbies as a child because children enjoy exploring different activities. For example, I sometimes painted and at other times I practised weaving with wool.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence and fewer hesitations. Use more precise vocabulary ("scribble" is fine but explain growth with specific details) and add a linking word to show contrast (e.g., "whereas" or "but"). Keep answer within 3–4 sentences and show concrete improvement (techniques, mediums, practice routine).

Exemplo: Yes, I have painted since childhood. While I used to scribble simple shapes as a child, now I can paint facial expressions and landscapes using watercolours and acrylics, and daily practice has helped me improve significantly.

Sugestão: Avoid overstatements and colloquial phrases like "the same gene is inherited in me"; be concise and natural. Provide a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details about how your father's influence affected you (less about genetics, more about learning or inspiration). Use linking words and reduce repetition.

Exemplo: Yes, my father is also a painter, so I grew up watching him paint expressive faces and landscapes. Because of his guidance and my regular practice, I developed similar interests and skills in painting.

× Yes, I have multiple hobbies but the most I like is doing painting.

✓ Yes, I have several hobbies, but the one I like most is painting.

The phrase 'the most I like' is awkward and ungrammatical. Use 'the one I like most' to identify a single favorite. 'Doing painting' is incorrect; use the noun 'painting' or the gerund 'painting' without 'doing'. Also replace 'multiple' with 'several' for naturalness.

× Whenever I am free, I always take a sketchbook out of my bag and start drawing something.

✓ Whenever I am free, I always take a sketchbook out of my bag and start drawing.

The sentence is grammatically acceptable, but 'start drawing something' is wordy; 'start drawing' is more natural. This focuses the verb + -ing form correctly.

× I like to paint while in my balcony because it gives me very gives me a sense of peace and calmness and help me to express my imagination.

✓ I like to paint on my balcony because it gives me a sense of peace and calm and helps me to express my imagination.

Use the preposition 'on' with 'balcony' (not 'in'). Remove the duplicate phrase 'very gives me' and use parallel verbs: 'gives' and 'helps' must agree with singular subject 'it', so use 'helps' not 'help'. 'Calmness' is correct but 'calm' is more natural here.

× I sometimes start painting and the other time I I'll start weaving out of the wool.

✓ I sometimes started painting and other times I would start weaving with wool.

Tense and agreement issues: in a past-narrative context use past forms. 'The other time' is awkward; 'other times' is idiomatic. 'I'll' (I will) is wrong for past description. Use 'would start' or 'I started' to indicate habitual past. Also 'weaving out of the wool' is unnatural; use 'weaving with wool'.

× As a child I had multiple hobbies because uh, child, uh, children's are more towards exploring different items.

✓ As a child I had many hobbies because children are more inclined to explore different things.

The original sentence is disfluent and ungrammatical: 'child, uh, children's' is redundant and incorrect. Use 'children' (plural) as the subject and 'are more inclined to' for natural collocation. 'Different items' is less natural than 'different things'.

× Yes, painting is the hobby that I have since childhood.

✓ Yes, painting is the hobby I have had since childhood.

Use the present perfect 'have had' to show a continuous state from past to present ('since childhood'). The simple present 'have' with 'since' is incorrect here.

× I love painting and when I was a child I used to scribble, uh, irregular figures.

✓ I love painting, and when I was a child I used to scribble irregular figures.

Minor punctuation and filler removal: the original contains 'uh' and a comma splice. Removing hesitations and adding a comma before 'and' improves clarity. The verb 'used to scribble' is correct for past habit.

× But now as a grown up I can draw umm, facial expressions and landscapes and use different color mediums.

✓ But now, as a grown-up, I can draw facial expressions and landscapes and use different coloring mediums.

Remove filler 'umm'. 'Grown up' should be hyphenated 'grown-up' when used as a noun or adjective. 'Color mediums' is awkward; 'coloring mediums' or 'mediums' (art media) is clearer.

× So I have improved a lot by practicing.

✓ So I have improved a lot through practice.

Original is understandable but 'by practicing' is less formal; 'through practice' is a clearer noun phrase describing how improvement occurred. Present perfect 'have improved' is correct.

× Yes, my painting hobby matches with my father.

✓ Yes, my interest in painting matches my father's.

'Painting hobby matches with my father' is unnatural. Use possessive 'my father's' or 'my father's interest in painting' and omit 'with' after 'matches'. Also 'hobby' can be rephrased as 'interest' for naturalness.

× My father was a very great painter.

✓ My father was a very good painter.

'Very great' is non-idiomatic in English; use 'very good' or 'a great painter' (without 'very'). Both preserve meaning; choose one for natural phrasing.

× When he was young, he used to paint facial expressions and landscapes.

✓ When he was young, he used to paint portraits and landscapes.

The sentence is mostly correct, but 'paint facial expressions' is odd—people 'paint portraits' or 'paint faces showing expressions'. 'Portraits' is a clearer, idiomatic noun for subjects depicting faces.

× And the same gene is inherited in me.

✓ And I inherited the same talent.

'The same gene is inherited in me' is awkward and scientifically specific. Use natural phrasing 'I inherited the same talent' or 'the same gift runs in my family'.

× And I am also naturally good at painting.

✓ I am also naturally good at painting.

Remove leading 'And' at sentence start for formality; grammatically the sentence is fine. 'Naturally good' is correct.

× It comes effortlessly to me.

✓ It comes effortlessly to me.

This sentence is correct as written. Present-tense stative verb 'comes' and adverb 'effortlessly' are appropriate; no correction needed.