Rules— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct and clear: start with a concise topic sentence, avoid fillers and unclear phrases, use correct grammar (e.g., past tense, countable nouns), and provide one specific example with a linking phrase. Keep answer within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes. My high school had many rules, some of which targeted appearance. For example, students were not allowed to have long hair, so we had to cut it regularly. This rule affected many international students and felt unfair to some of us.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear opinion, use linking words to explain reasons, and give a specific example. Reduce repetition and correct verb forms (e.g., 'play basketball', 'does not allow'). Keep to 2–3 sentences for clarity.

Exemplo: No, I don't think more rules would help. More rules can reduce students' motivation; for instance, if the school bans playing basketball at break time, students lose a way to relax and build teamwork.

Sugestão: Answer directly with a topic sentence, use correct terms (e.g., 'first year', 'class teacher'), and give a brief specific example of how the teacher helped. Use linking words like 'for example' and avoid pronoun confusion.

Exemplo: Yes, in my first year of high school I had a very dedicated class teacher. For example, she always stayed after class to explain difficult subjects and gave advice about personal problems, which helped me improve my grades.

Sugestão: Give a clear, grammatically correct opinion sentence, then support with a specific reason and linking word ('because', 'for example'). Avoid vague phrasing and keep to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer fewer rules at school because too many restrictions reduce students' motivation. For example, strict compulsory rules often stop students from joining clubs or pursuing hobbies that help them learn.

Sugestão: State clearly that you had a strict teacher, use correct vocabulary ('low marks', 'criticised', 'made me revise'), and give a concise example of their strictness and its effect on you. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

Exemplo: Yes, my high school biology teacher was quite strict. Because I got low marks in biology, she often criticised my work and made me revise tests thoroughly, which eventually helped me understand the subject better.

Sugestão: Start with a clear, direct answer to the specific question (refer to rule-free school), then explain why with concise reasons and one concrete detail. Avoid irrelevant points about employment rate and focus on teaching in that environment. Use correct grammar and limit to 3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to teach in a rule-free school because it would allow students more freedom to explore creative learning. For example, I could design project-based lessons where students choose topics, which would encourage engagement and independent thinking.

× Sure, absolutely.

✓ Sure, absolutely.

No grammatical error relevant to the provided list; this is a short conversational response. No change needed.

× There were lots of the rules to control the Asian students, especially the China is umm, So umm, when I was demolished in your high school, there was a role that do not allow the students to, you know, to maintain the long hair.

✓ There were lots of rules to control Asian students, especially Chinese students. When I was in high school, there was a rule that did not allow students to keep long hair.

Multiple issues: article misuse ('the rules' -> 'rules') and incorrect nationality form ('the China' -> 'Chinese students'), wrong verb choice ('demolished' -> 'in'), word form ('role' -> 'rule'), tense and auxiliary in negative past ('do not allow' -> 'did not allow'), and verb choice 'maintain' -> 'keep'. The sentence should use past tense 'did not allow' because describing a past rule. Suggest breaking into two sentences and using correct nouns and past tense verbs.

× So we have to umm, cut our hair regularly.

✓ So we had to cut our hair regularly.

Context refers to past obligation, so use past tense 'had to' rather than present 'have to'. Maintain base verb 'cut'. Replace present-tense modal with past-tense equivalent.

× Umm, actually, I don't think so.

✓ Umm, actually, I don't think so.

This sentence is grammatically correct for expressing present opinion; no change required.

× So, umm a rule is the way to control our students could make a less motivation to do our you know, to do our own things like if I want to playing basketball, but the school do not allow allowed students to playing basketball umm at sometimes.

✓ A rule that controls students can reduce their motivation to do things they enjoy. For example, if I want to play basketball but the school does not allow students to play sometimes, that is not good.

Errors include article use ('a rule is the way' is awkward), verb forms ('could make a less motivation' -> 'can reduce their motivation'), gerund/infinitive misuse ('want to playing' -> 'want to play'), modal/auxiliary tense ('do not allow allowed' -> 'does not allow'), and adverb placement ('at sometimes' -> 'sometimes'). Also subject-verb agreement ('school does' not 'do'). Restructure into clearer sentences and use 'play' (base form after 'want to') and 'does not allow' for present habitual policy.

× So that is couldn't be the good things.

✓ So that could not be a good thing.

Incorrect modal construction 'is couldn't be' and pluralization. Use 'could not be' or 'is not' and 'a good thing' (singular) for countable noun. Keep modal to express possibility.

× Umm, yes, that was my, you know, first years in my high school and she's, she was my, you know, headmaster class headmaster teacher.

✓ Umm, yes, that was during my first years of high school and she was my class headmaster/teacher.

Use 'during my first years of high school' for time expression; 'she's, she was' is inconsistent—use past 'she was'. 'Headmaster' and 'class headmaster teacher' is redundant; choose 'class teacher' or 'headmaster' depending on role. Maintain past tense.

× Umm, she was very kind and very helpful when I, whatever I have any questions, umm, both the Academy or the academic or the, you know, daily life questions I could ask him and always get the answer.

✓ She was very kind and helpful. Whenever I had any questions, whether academic or about daily life, I could ask her and always get an answer.

Pronoun errors: 'whenever' fits better than 'whatever'. Tense consistency: use past 'had' not present 'have'. Gender/number pronoun wrong: 'ask him' -> 'ask her'. Article and noun choices: 'the Academy' -> 'academic' or 'about academics'. Use singular 'an answer'. Reorder for clarity.

× That definitely fewer rules in my school yeah.

✓ I definitely prefer fewer rules in my school.

Original missing verb and unclear structure. Use 'prefer' to state preference and 'fewer rules' as object. Maintain present tense for general preference.

× So compared to the lots of the university high school always have some know some compulsory rules that we have to follow.

✓ Compared to many universities and high schools, which always have some compulsory rules we have to follow.

'the lots of the university high school' is confused: use 'many universities and high schools'. Remove unnecessary articles; use present tense 'have' for general statements. 'know' is filler and removed.

× So this rule could uh, make the students not motivate to the study nor the umm, some daily life interest.

✓ These rules can reduce students' motivation to study or pursue other daily interests.

Problems: singular/plural mismatch ('this rule' vs intended plural), awkward phrase 'not motivate to the study' -> 'reduce motivation to study', noun form 'interest' pluralized, possessive 'students' motivation'. Use 'can' for general statements.

× Well, I think so.

✓ Well, I think so.

This present-tense opinion sentence is acceptable; no correction needed.

× She was my biology teacher in high school and I'm not very good at learning the science, so which means I always get the low rank in the biology test.

✓ She was my biology teacher in high school and I'm not very good at science, so I always got low ranks in biology tests.

'learning the science' -> 'science' is more natural; tense consistency: use past 'got' for repeated past results or 'I usually get low marks' for general. 'Low rank' -> 'low ranks' or 'low marks' and plural 'tests'.

× So she she was always criticizing me and you know, always led me to umm, to revise my test or diseases.

✓ She was always criticizing me and would always make me revise my tests or assignments.

Duplicate 'she' removed. 'Led me to revise' is awkward; 'make me revise' or 'had me revise' fits. 'Diseases' is wrong word; likely 'discuss' or 'assignments/tests'. Use past habitual 'would' or 'was always' consistently.

× Yeah, I think so.

✓ Yeah, I think so.

No correction needed; expressing willingness is fine.

× So I want to pay the, you know, English teacher.

✓ So I want to be an English teacher.

'Pay the English teacher' is incorrect. Use 'be an English teacher' for desired profession and include indefinite article 'an' before occupation.

× That is the great career that I want to be in the future because that is has has the great employment rate.

✓ That would be a great career for my future because it has a high employment rate.

Remove repetition 'has has', use conditional 'would be' for hypothetical future, use 'a great career' and 'it has a high employment rate'. Maintain subject-verb agreement.

× So which means I could if I learned great in English, I could be the English teacher after I graduate from my college.

✓ So that means if I learn English well, I could be an English teacher after I graduate from college.

Tense consistency and word order: use present simple 'learn' in the 'if' clause for future possibility, 'learned great' -> 'learn English well', article 'an English teacher', and 'graduate from college' without 'my' is more natural.

× So that is great way and I can earn lots of money.

✓ So that is a great way to do that and I could earn a good salary.

Missing article 'a' before 'great way'. 'Earn lots of money' is colloquial; use 'earn a good salary' for clarity. Use conditional 'could' to match earlier possibility.