Rules— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 답변이 명확하지 않고 문법적 오류가 많으며, 내용이 중복되고 혼란스럽습니다. 질문에 직접적으로 답하고, 문장을 간결하고 자연스럽게 구성하는 연습이 필요합니다. 예를 들어, 과거와 현재 상황을 구분하여 설명하고, 구체적인 규칙을 명확히 언급하는 것이 좋습니다.

Exemplo: When I was in high school, there were many rules, such as not being allowed to eat noodles or drink sodas in class. However, now that I am a university freshman, there are fewer rules, and students can use smartphones freely.

Sugestão: 의견을 표현할 때 문법과 어휘 사용에 주의해야 하며, 이유를 명확하고 구체적으로 제시하는 것이 중요합니다. 또한, 'rule'과 'ruler'의 혼동을 피하고, 연결어를 사용해 논리적인 흐름을 만들어야 합니다.

Exemplo: I don't think having more rules benefits students because strict rules can limit their freedom and creativity. Therefore, too many rules might actually disadvantage students rather than help them.

Sugestão: 답변이 반복적이고 문법적으로 부정확합니다. 교사의 장점을 구체적으로 설명하고, 문장을 명확하고 자연스럽게 구성하는 연습이 필요합니다. 또한, 연결어를 사용하여 문장 간의 흐름을 개선하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, my high school teacher Mr. Hall is an excellent educator. He always puts a lot of effort into helping students understand the material better, and he is very dedicated to his work.

× Umm when I was took a high school I have a loose but right now I'm a university student but I'm freshman so I didn't start.

✓ Umm when I was in high school I had a loose schedule but right now I'm a university student and I'm a freshman so I haven't started yet.

The phrase 'was took' is incorrect because 'was' is an auxiliary verb for past continuous or passive voice, but 'took' is the simple past form of 'take'. The correct form is 'was in high school' to indicate the time period. Also, 'I have a loose' is incomplete; it should be 'I had a loose schedule' to express past possession. The sentence also needs proper conjunctions and articles for clarity.

× But if I told the high schoolers then they have a lot of the rules, especially they can eat noodles or sodas or they can I can use the smartphone.

✓ But if I talk about high schoolers, they have a lot of rules, especially they can eat noodles or drink sodas, and they can use smartphones.

The sentence has pronoun confusion and awkward phrasing. 'If I told the high schoolers' is incorrect; it should be 'if I talk about high schoolers' or 'when I was a high schooler'. Also, 'they can I can use the smartphone' mixes pronouns incorrectly. The correction clarifies the subject and verb agreement and removes redundant pronouns.

× Actually I think the ruler is not a benefit to students because if they has a ruler then I think the ruler disrupted students for free.

✓ Actually, I think the rules are not beneficial to students because if they have rules, then I think the rules disrupt students' freedom.

'Ruler' is a wrong word here; it should be 'rules'. Also, 'if they has' is incorrect subject-verb agreement; it should be 'if they have'. The modal verb 'can' or 'may' is not used here, but the sentence structure and word choice are incorrect. The correction fixes plural forms and verb agreement.

× So I think it's not a benefit or just it's more disadvantaging for the students.

✓ So I think it's not beneficial or it's more disadvantageous for the students.

The phrase 'more disadvantaging' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'disadvantageous'. Also, 'it's not a benefit' should be 'it's not beneficial' to use the adjective form. The pronoun 'it' is used correctly here.

× Yes. Then my high school teacher's name is Mr. Hall.

✓ Yes. My high school teacher's name was Mr. Hall.

The word 'Then' is unnecessary and confusing here. Also, since the student is referring to a past teacher, the past tense 'was' is more appropriate than 'is'. The pronoun usage is correct otherwise.

× He's really good, really good at really good teachers and he working for students, so he always effort how can be more teach well and teach well.

✓ He's really good, one of the really good teachers, and he works for the students, so he always makes an effort to teach better and teach well.

The sentence has awkward repetition and incorrect verb forms. 'He working' should be 'he works'. 'He always effort' is incorrect; it should be 'he always makes an effort'. The phrase 'how can be more teach well' is ungrammatical and is corrected to 'to teach better'. The adjective and adverb usage is corrected for clarity.

× So I think it's very nice teachers.

✓ So I think he's a very nice teacher.

The sentence incorrectly uses plural 'teachers' when referring to one person. Also, 'it's' is incorrect; it should be 'he's'. The adjective 'nice' is correctly used but needs to agree with the singular noun 'teacher'.