Shoes— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise, start with a clear topic sentence, and avoid repetition. Mention frequency with a specific time phrase and add one supporting reason. Use linking words to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, but I don't do it very often at the moment because I’m not working. If I had a steady income, I would probably shop for shoes once or twice a month because I like updating my wardrobe.

Sugestão: Open with a direct answer, then give a concise specific reason and an example. Fix minor grammar and avoid repetition (e.g., 'refund' vs 'return'). Use a linking word to connect sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I have — in fact, I buy most of my shoes online because returns are easy. For example, once a pair didn’t fit and I received a full refund within a week, so online shopping feels more convenient.

Sugestão: Start with a clear estimate or range, then give two concise reasons. Avoid repeating earlier points; instead, give specific figures and link ideas logically.

Exemplo: I usually spend very little on shoes — perhaps $20–$40 per pair — because I’m currently unemployed and I try to be frugal. Therefore, I tend to choose budget-friendly brands rather than designer labels.

Sugestão: Give a direct preference and then explain with a specific example of occasions when you choose each type. Use linking words to contrast (e.g., 'although', 'however', 'on the other hand').

Exemplo: I prefer fashionable shoes for special occasions because they look better, although I choose comfortable shoes for long walks or work. For example, I’ll wear heels to a party but trainers when I have to be on my feet all day.

× Yes, just like a lot of girls, I like to buy shoes, but I can't buy them quite often because I'm not working right now.

✓ Yes, like many girls, I like to buy shoes, but I can't buy them very often because I'm not working right now.

The original sentence used 'just like a lot of girls' which is colloquial but not ungrammatical; main issue addressed is word choice and adverb placement: 'quite often' is acceptable but 'very often' sounds more natural here. Suggest using 'many' instead of 'a lot of' for a more natural register and place adverb 'very often' after 'them'. Keep present progressive 'am not working' since it describes current state.

× But if I start to work again, I would love to buy shoes often.

✓ But if I start working again, I will love being able to buy shoes more often.

The sentence mixes conditional forms. With 'if I start working again' (first conditional), the result clause should use 'will' + verb, not 'would'. Also 'start to work' is acceptable but 'start working' is more natural. 'Buy shoes often' is fine but 'being able to buy shoes more often' clarifies intent. Recommendation: use consistent first conditional for realistic future situations: 'If + present simple, will + base verb'.

× Yes, of course. I bought most of my shoes online actually because it's easier to refund if some if something's wrong with it and I don't notice it right away.

✓ Yes, of course. I have bought most of my shoes online, actually, because it's easier to get a refund if something is wrong with them and I don't notice it right away.

When referring to past experiences with present relevance, present perfect ('have bought') is preferable to simple past. 'It's easier to refund' is incorrect: 'refund' is a verb but the sentence needs a noun phrase 'get a refund' or passive 'be refunded'. Also 'if some if something's' has a typo and pronoun agreement: 'it' should be 'them' to match 'shoes' (plural). Suggestions: use present perfect for experience, 'get a refund' or 'be refunded', fix typo and use plural pronoun.

× I don't think I spend much money on shoes because as I said, I'm not working so I'm trying to be more responsible with money and I don't often buy shoes and when I buy them I prefer cheaper ones.

✓ I don't think I spend much money on shoes because, as I said, I'm not working, so I'm trying to be more responsible with my money. I don't often buy shoes, and when I do I prefer cheaper ones.

Long run-on sentence with tense and pronoun clarity issues. Keep present simple 'I don't think I spend' and present continuous 'I'm trying' are fine but need clearer punctuation and 'my money' is preferred. Add comma and split into two sentences for clarity. Use 'when I do' instead of repeating 'buy them' to avoid repetition.

× I prefer fashionable shoes, but it's not healthy to wear them all the time.

✓ I prefer fashionable shoes, but it's not healthy to wear them all the time.

Sentence is grammatically correct. No correction needed. Keep adjective 'fashionable' and adverbial phrase 'all the time' as is.

× So sometimes I wear fashionable shoes, sometimes I wear comfortable shoes.

✓ So sometimes I wear fashionable shoes, and sometimes I wear comfortable ones.

Original is understandable but repetitive. Improve style and cohesion by adding 'and' and replacing the second noun with 'ones' to avoid repetition. This is a stylistic improvement rather than a strict grammatical correction.