Shoes— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and avoid filler words (uh, umm). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details (frequency, reason). Use linking words to improve coherence. Stay within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Not really. I rarely buy shoes myself because my mother usually does the shopping for me, so I don't pay much attention to styles or brands. As a result, I don't browse for shoes online either.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence, then one specific reason with linking words (because/so). Remove hesitations and fix grammar (e.g., 'I would rather go to a store' not 'going'). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: No, I have never bought shoes online. I prefer to shop in a store because I need to try shoes on for the right fit, and buying online feels risky in terms of size and comfort.

Sugestão: Begin with a direct answer (state approximate amount or frequency), then add a brief reason. Avoid repetition and fillers. Use linking words (so/therefore) and correct minor grammar (e.g., 'a new pair' not 'a new ones').

Exemplo: I spend very little on shoes, perhaps around $20–30 a year. Because I don't care much about shoes, I usually replace them only once a year when they become too worn.

Sugestão: Answer directly, then give a clear reason using linking words. Remove repetitions and filler words, and correct grammar (e.g., 'comfortable shoes help me when I walk and jog'). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer comfortable shoes most of the time because they support my walking and morning jogging. However, I do own a few fashionable pairs for special occasions.

× I don't usually buy shoes by myself.

✓ I don't usually buy shoes myself.

The preposition 'by' is unnecessary with 'myself' here. Native usage omits 'by' when using reflexive pronouns for emphasis; say 'buy shoes myself.' Remove 'by' to sound natural.

× my shoes are often bought by my mom.

✓ My shoes are often bought by my mom.

Capitalization at sentence start fixes style but grammar is correct. No pronoun change needed; sentence is passive with correct agent 'by my mom.'

× She would do all the shopping for me.

✓ She always does all the shopping for me.

The original 'would do' can be used for habitual past or polite conditional. In present habitual context, use simple present 'does.' Use 'always' or 'usually' to indicate frequency.

× So I don't really pay attention much in the shoes or even the brands of the shoes.

✓ So I don't really pay much attention to shoes or to the brands.

The correct preposition with 'pay attention' is 'to.' Also streamline repetition: use 'to shoes or to the brands.' Place 'much' before 'attention.'

× I am not interested in surfing the shoes online.

✓ I am not interested in looking for shoes online.

'Surfing the shoes' is unnatural. Use 'looking for shoes online' or 'shopping for shoes online.' 'Interested in' should be followed by a gerund; 'looking for' fits meaning.

× I've never bought shoes online and I don't have the intention to.

✓ I've never bought shoes online and I don't intend to.

Use 'intend to' or 'have the intention of' + gerund. 'I don't have the intention to' is non-idiomatic. Use simple present 'I don't intend to' for present intention.

× I think that buying uh clothes in general and specifically shoes online are umm.

✓ I think that buying clothes in general, and shoes specifically, online is

Subject 'buying clothes and shoes' is singular gerund phrase, so verb should be singular 'is.' Also sentence was unfinished; need to complete thought (e.g. 'is risky'). Reorder for clarity: 'buying clothes in general, and shoes specifically, online is risky.'

× It's quite risky and I would rather going to an actual store to just buy it because I need to do some umm fittings.

✓ It's quite risky and I would rather go to an actual store to buy them because I need to do some fittings.

After 'would rather' use the base form 'go' not 'going.' Also 'buy it' mismatches plural 'shoes' — use 'buy them.' 'Fittings' is fine; remove filler words.

× I barely even change my shoes either.

✓ I hardly ever change my shoes either.

'Barely even change' is awkward; 'hardly ever' is more natural. 'Change my shoes' is fine; no quantifier change needed beyond idiom.

× I only buy a new ones after a year when I feel like my shoes are quite umm, old already.

✓ I only buy a new pair after a year when I feel like my shoes are quite old already.

Mixing singular 'a' with plural 'ones' is incorrect. Use 'a new pair' or 'new ones' (without 'a'). 'Pair' fits shoes.

× I in general I don't like spending my money on shoes.

✓ In general, I don't like spending my money on shoes.

Remove the duplicated subject 'I.' Start with 'In general' as an introductory phrase followed by comma.

× I would like to have both in my shoes collection, but umm, I would rather wear comfortable shoes most of the time because I I feel like I would comfortable shoes help me with my walking and jogging every morning.

✓ I would like to have both in my shoe collection, but I would rather wear comfortable shoes most of the time because I feel they help me when I walk and jog every morning.

Use singular 'shoe collection' or 'shoe collection' (not 'shoes collection'). Remove duplicate 'I.' 'I would comfortable shoes' is ungrammatical; replace with 'I feel they help me' or 'comfortable shoes help me.' Use 'when I walk and jog' for clarity and correct verb forms.