Library— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy such as "more, more vast" and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and correct grammar errors like "libraries are quite place" should be "libraries are quiet places".

Exemplo: Yes, I often go to the library because it is a quiet place ideal for studying and researching various subjects. Moreover, it offers a wide range of books, so if I get bored with one, I can easily switch to another to broaden my understanding.

Sugestão: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and incomplete. Try to organise your ideas clearly with correct grammar and avoid repeating phrases. Use linking words to connect your actions logically and complete your sentences fully.

Exemplo: When I go to the library, I am first attracted by the smell of books, which I find fascinating. Then, I usually browse through different aisles to find interesting books. After selecting one, I find a quiet spot to read and enjoy it.

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant but lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Avoid unnecessary phrases like "Don't ask me that question literally". Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to improve coherence.

Exemplo: Yes, I used to go to the library when I was a child. There was a library in my school that we visited during our library periods. We were taught important rules, such as keeping quiet to maintain a good study environment.

Sugestão: Your answer is somewhat vague and contains grammatical mistakes. Avoid phrases like "you know" and be more specific. Provide a clear opinion supported by reasons or examples, and use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

Exemplo: Although I am not Chinese, I believe that many Chinese children often visit libraries because their education system emphasises learning and intellectual development. For example, they participate in activities that enhance their knowledge and skills, which likely encourages library use.

× Yeah, I would like to go to the library 'cause I think that libraries are quite place to study or research about your subjects and it gives you more kinds of book in just one place.

✓ Yeah, I would like to go to the library 'cause I think that libraries are quite places to study or research your subjects and they give you more kinds of books in just one place.

The word 'place' should be plural 'places' to agree with the plural subject 'libraries'. Also, 'it gives' should be 'they give' to agree with the plural subject 'libraries'. 'Kinds of book' should be 'kinds of books' because 'kinds' implies plural 'books'. Additionally, 'research about your subjects' is better as 'research your subjects' because 'research' is a transitive verb and does not require 'about'.

× So if you get bored from one book, so you can choose another book to just make your case study more, more vast.

✓ So if you get bored with one book, you can choose another book to make your case study broader.

The phrase 'bored from' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'bored with'. The repetition of 'so' is unnecessary. 'More, more vast' is awkward; 'broader' is a better adjective to describe expanding a case study.

× So first interesting thing is that when I goes to the library, I the smell of books attract me so much.

✓ So the first interesting thing is that when I go to the library, the smell of books attracts me so much.

The verb 'goes' is incorrect for the first person singular subject 'I'; it should be 'go'. Also, 'I the smell' is missing a verb; it should be 'the smell of books attracts me'. The verb 'attract' must be in third person singular form 'attracts' to agree with the singular subject 'smell'.

× So I like to roam around the aisles and when and and then I look for different aisles and then I choose my book and I try to smell different books.

✓ So I like to roam around the aisles, then I look for different ones, choose my book, and try to smell different books.

The sentence is repetitive and contains filler words like 'and and and then'. It should be streamlined for clarity and conciseness. Also, 'different aisles' is repeated unnecessarily; 'different ones' suffices.

× Don't ask me that question literally I used to go library when I was a kid.

✓ Don't ask me that question literally; I used to go to the library when I was a kid.

The phrase 'go library' is missing the preposition 'to'. Also, a semicolon or period is needed to separate the two independent clauses for correct sentence structure.

× So there is one library in my school which we often used to visit library in our library period.

✓ So there is one library in my school which we often used to visit during our library period.

The phrase 'used to visit library in our library period' is incorrect. The preposition 'during' is needed to indicate the time when the visits occurred.

× So then what happened when I go to the library?

✓ So then what happened when I went to the library?

The question refers to a past event, so the verb should be in the past tense 'went' instead of the present tense 'go'.

× You need to keep quiet but at time.

✓ You need to keep quiet, but at times,

The phrase 'at time' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'at times' meaning occasionally. Also, a comma is needed before 'but' to separate clauses.

× I'm not Chinese, but I have seen certain videos on Internet in which they shows a best level of education in Chinese school, where kids used to learn different technical and games about knowledge and you know about IQ.

✓ I'm not Chinese, but I have seen certain videos on the Internet in which they show the best level of education in Chinese schools, where kids learn different technical skills and games about knowledge and IQ.

'Shows' should be 'show' to agree with plural subject 'they'. 'A best level' should be 'the best level' as it is a specific superlative. 'Chinese school' should be plural 'Chinese schools' to generalize. 'Used to learn' implies past habit, but the context suggests present, so 'learn' is better. 'Technical and games' is unclear; 'technical skills and games' is clearer.

× So obviously they will go to the library. They might go to the library 'cause they are quite, quite advanced in education, I must say.

✓ So obviously they go to the library. They might go to the library because they are quite advanced in education, I must say.

'Will go' implies future certainty, but the context is about habitual action, so 'go' is better. 'Might go' is acceptable but could be 'probably go' for stronger likelihood. 'Cause' should be 'because' for formal speech.