Library— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains some awkward phrasing, which affects naturalness and clarity. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, keep your answer concise and relevant.

Exemplo: I used to visit the library often when I was at school and university because it provided easy access to many resources. However, these days, I rarely go because it's less convenient and I can find information online.

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant but contains many fillers like 'umm' which reduce fluency. Try to avoid fillers and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, be more specific about what you do in the library now.

Exemplo: When I was younger, I usually read novels, award-winning books, and comics at the library. Nowadays, I go there mainly to enjoy the quiet atmosphere, which helps me concentrate on my assignments.

Sugestão: Your answer is good but could be improved by using clearer sentence structures and linking words. Also, avoid redundancy and be more concise while providing specific details.

Exemplo: When I was a kid, my parents often took me and my sibling to the library to encourage good reading habits. We enjoyed reading light novels, award-winning comics, and sometimes just spent quiet time there together.

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant but a bit wordy and slightly unclear. Try to use simpler, more direct sentences and include linking words to improve coherence. Also, provide specific examples or reasons to support your opinion.

Exemplo: I think Chinese children today go to the library less often because there is less focus on reading. Instead, they prefer other leisure activities like playing video games or using their phones.

× This is still toward the ease of access.

✓ This is still due to the ease of access.

The phrase 'toward the ease of access' is incorrect because 'toward' is not the appropriate preposition to indicate cause or reason. The correct preposition here is 'due to' which expresses the reason for something.

× I found the library to offer so much solely tools and focus, as well as access to the abundance of information.

✓ I found the library to offer so many tools and focus, as well as access to an abundance of information.

The word 'tools' is countable and plural, so it should be preceded by 'many' instead of 'much'. Also, 'the abundance of information' should be 'an abundance of information' because 'abundance' is a singular countable noun here and requires an article 'an'.

× However, these days it's difficult to access.

✓ However, these days it's difficult to access the library.

The sentence is incomplete because the object of 'access' is missing. 'Access' is a transitive verb and requires an object, so 'the library' should be added to clarify what is difficult to access.

× When I was younger, umm I would normally read novel, umm, award-winning books as well as comics at the library.

✓ When I was younger, umm I would normally read novels, umm, award-winning books as well as comics at the library.

The word 'novel' is countable and plural here because it refers to multiple books, so it should be 'novels' instead of 'novel'.

× But these days, now that I'm older, I usually umm would go there to appreciate the quiet ambience where I find the ease of concentration umm, and there I would focus on my assignment.

✓ But these days, now that I'm older, I usually go there to appreciate the quiet ambience where I find it easy to concentrate, umm, and there I focus on my assignment.

The phrase 'usually would go' is redundant because 'usually' already indicates habitual action, so 'would' is unnecessary. Also, 'find the ease of concentration' is awkward; the correct expression is 'find it easy to concentrate'. Additionally, 'would focus' is better as 'focus' to maintain present habitual tense.

× When younger, my parents would frequently take me and my sibling to the library because they wanted to encourage us to instill the reading habits when we were kids.

✓ When younger, my parents would frequently take me and my siblings to the library because they wanted to encourage us to instil reading habits when we were kids.

The word 'sibling' should be plural 'siblings' if referring to more than one brother or sister. Also, 'instill the reading habits' is incorrect; 'instil reading habits' is the correct phrase without 'the'.

× And there we would go and enjoy light novels, award-winning comics or books, or even just spend time in solitude together.

✓ And there we would go and enjoy light novels, award-winning comics or books, or even just spend time together in solitude.

The phrase 'in solitude together' is awkward because 'solitude' implies being alone. The correct phrase is 'spend time together in solitude' to indicate being together but in a quiet or reflective manner.

× I find that today's young adults as well as the younger generation face less emphasis on going to the library as well as the interest in reading, and so these days I would say children would enjoy other leisure activities more.

✓ I find that today's young adults as well as the younger generation face less emphasis on going to the library as well as less interest in reading, and so these days I would say children enjoy other leisure activities more.

The phrase 'face less emphasis on going to the library as well as the interest in reading' is incorrect because 'less' should modify both 'emphasis' and 'interest'. Also, 'would enjoy' is better as 'enjoy' to express a general truth or current trend.