Singing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Câu trả lời của bạn cần tự nhiên hơn và tránh các câu ngắt quãng không hoàn chỉnh. Bạn nên sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và liên kết các ý bằng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Ví dụ, thay vì nói "Reduce stress. And writing up my mood.", bạn có thể nói "It helps me reduce stress and improve my mood."

Exemplo: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me reduce stress and improve my mood. I usually prefer to sing in a quiet place like my home where I feel comfortable and relaxed.

Sugestão: Bạn nên sử dụng cấu trúc câu rõ ràng hơn và tránh lặp từ không cần thiết. Ngoài ra, hãy thêm từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Ví dụ, thay vì nói "I feel like singing it just one of my hobbies", bạn có thể nói "I feel that singing is just one of my hobbies."

Exemplo: Well, I have never seriously taken a singing class because I feel that singing is just one of my hobbies. I prefer to sing for fun and I don't intend to pursue a career in music.

Sugestão: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều câu ngắt quãng và không hoàn chỉnh. Bạn nên nối các câu lại với nhau để câu trả lời tự nhiên và mạch lạc hơn. Ví dụ, thay vì nói "Because I'm too shy to like, express myself.", bạn có thể nói "because I'm too shy to express myself."

Exemplo: Actually, I don't enjoy singing in front of other people because I'm too shy to express myself. Therefore, I tend to sing in quiet places such as my home.

Sugestão: Bạn nên tránh những phần không rõ nghĩa hoặc không liên quan như "Ann Lee, Pure Spirit." và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, liên kết các ý bằng từ nối. Ví dụ, thay vì nói "Like singing can brighten up a mood.", bạn có thể nói "For example, singing can brighten up one's mood."

Exemplo: Yes, definitely. I think that singing is a tool to express emotions and helps people relax, relieve stress, and feel better. For example, singing can brighten up one's mood and bring happiness.

× Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me like. Reduce stress. And writing up my mood.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me reduce stress and lift up my mood.

The original sentence is fragmented and incorrectly structured. 'It helps me like. Reduce stress.' is not a complete sentence and 'writing up my mood' is incorrect. The corrected sentence combines the ideas into a proper sentence with correct verb forms and conjunctions.

× But I prefer to sing in a place where no one's at, like home, or in a quiet place that I can feel comfortable.

✓ But I prefer to sing in a place where no one's there, like home, or in a quiet place where I can feel comfortable.

The phrase 'where no one's at' is informal and incorrect in this context. 'Where no one's there' is more appropriate. Also, 'that I can feel comfortable' should be 'where I can feel comfortable' because 'where' refers to a place.

× Well I have never seriously taken a singing class because I feel like singing it just one of my hobbies and I should sing for fun and I don't intend to resume a career in music.

✓ Well, I have never seriously taken a singing class because I feel like singing is just one of my hobbies, and I should sing for fun, and I don't intend to pursue a career in music.

The phrase 'feel like singing it just one of my hobbies' is incorrect; 'singing is just one of my hobbies' is correct. Also, 'resume a career' is incorrect; 'pursue a career' is the proper collocation. Commas are added for clarity.

× Actually, I don't enjoy singing in front of other people. Because I'm too shy to like, express myself.

✓ Actually, I don't enjoy singing in front of other people because I'm too shy to express myself.

Starting a sentence with 'Because' creates a sentence fragment. The two sentences should be combined to form a complete sentence.

× And yeah, I. Tend to sing. In a quiet place such as my home too.

✓ And yeah, I tend to sing in a quiet place such as my home too.

The original sentence is fragmented with unnecessary periods. It should be combined into one coherent sentence.

× I think that singing is a type of tool that can express your emotion and helps you to relax, relieve stress and feel better.

✓ I think that singing is a type of tool that can express your emotions and help you to relax, relieve stress, and feel better.

The word 'emotion' should be plural 'emotions' because it refers to various feelings. Also, 'helps' should be 'help' to agree with the plural subject 'tool that can express your emotions' (considered as singular, but the verb 'help' is parallel to 'express'). The list is corrected with commas for clarity.

× Like singing can brighten up a mood. Ann Lee, Pure Spirit.

✓ For example, singing can brighten up a mood.

The phrase 'Like singing can brighten up a mood.' is a fragment and unclear. 'Ann Lee, Pure Spirit.' is unrelated and unclear in this context. The corrected sentence provides a clear example.