Singing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is clear and relevant, but you can improve by using more varied vocabulary and linking words to make your response more natural and coherent. Try to avoid repeating similar ideas and add a bit more detail to enrich your answer.

Exemplo: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it has been a passion of mine since childhood. Moreover, my interest deepened during my bachelor's degree as it became a great way to unwind and express my feelings effectively.

Sugestão: Your answer is quite unclear and lacks coherence. Try to organise your ideas logically and use linking words to connect your points. Also, avoid asking the examiner questions and focus on giving a complete and relevant answer within 5 sentences.

Exemplo: I have not taken any professional singing courses, but I have learned a lot by watching tutorials on YouTube and using various singing apps available on the App Store and Play Store. Although I haven't attended a music academy, these resources have helped me improve my vocal skills.

Sugestão: Your answer is unclear and does not directly address the question. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence and support it with relevant details. Keep your sentences simple and coherent to improve clarity.

Exemplo: I would like to sing for my family and close friends because they have always supported me. Singing for them brings me joy and helps me share my feelings with people I care about.

Sugestão: Your answer is too brief and lacks specific supporting details. Try to expand your response by explaining why singing brings happiness and use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

Exemplo: Definitely, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it allows them to express their emotions and relieve stress. Additionally, singing together can create a sense of community and joy among people.

× I haven't got any kind of professional course on singing, but I learned from many YouTube channel.

✓ I haven't taken any kind of professional course on singing, but I have learned from many YouTube channels.

The sentence mixes present perfect ('haven't got') with simple past ('learned') incorrectly. 'Haven't got' is better replaced with 'haven't taken' to express lack of experience. Also, 'YouTube channel' should be plural 'YouTube channels' to match 'many'. Use present perfect 'have learned' to indicate experience up to now.

× I learned it from any software that can be found in App Store or Play store.

✓ I learned it from various software that can be found in the App Store or Play Store.

The phrase 'any software' is incorrect here; 'various software' or 'some software' fits better. Also, 'in App Store or Play store' should be 'in the App Store or Play Store' because these are specific places requiring the definite article.

× Do you really help me improve my vocal?

✓ Can you really help me improve my vocals?

The original sentence is a question but lacks proper modal verb usage and word order. 'Do you really help me' is awkward; 'Can you really help me' is more appropriate. Also, 'vocal' should be plural 'vocals' when referring to singing ability.

× So I never went to any music Academy.

✓ So I have never gone to any music academy.

The sentence uses simple past 'never went' but present perfect 'have never gone' is better to express experience up to now. Also, 'music Academy' should be lowercase 'music academy' unless it's a proper noun.

× So this phone is very crazy part how I got into music and singing things are ones I really like.

✓ So this part is very crazy about how I got into music and singing, which are things I really like.

The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical. 'This phone is very crazy part' is incorrect; it should be 'this part is very crazy'. Also, 'singing things are ones I really like' is unclear; rephrased to 'singing, which are things I really like' for clarity.

× Once I diploma crossed on someone and he was really into music and stuff.

✓ Once I completed my diploma, I met someone who was really into music and stuff.

'Diploma crossed on someone' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'completed my diploma'. Also, 'crossed on someone' is not proper English; 'met someone' is appropriate. The sentence is corrected to past tense for clarity.

× So from that moment I don't eat this automatically.

✓ So from that moment, I automatically developed an interest in this.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'I don't eat this automatically' makes no sense. It is corrected to express that from that moment, the interest developed automatically.

× No became my hobby.

✓ It became my hobby.

'No' is incorrectly used here; the correct pronoun is 'It' referring to singing or music. The sentence is corrected accordingly.

× Definitely because singing helps us to express our emotions are.

✓ Definitely, because singing helps us to express our emotions.

The word 'are' at the end is unnecessary and incorrect. The sentence should end after 'emotions'. Also, a comma after 'Definitely' improves clarity.