Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 supporting details. Correct verb forms (e.g., "I completed a two-year diploma") and avoid unnecessary words such as "just" or filler words.

Exemplo: I am currently working as a kitchen manager in a local breakfast and pancake house. I completed a two-year diploma in general business before this job, which helped me develop basic management skills.

Sugestão: Answer directly and fix grammar and vocabulary. Use linking words for clarity (e.g., "It’s located in..."). Replace fillers and incorrect words ("stuff" -> "staff"). Use correct tense: "I've been working there for two years."

Exemplo: I work as a kitchen manager at a popular breakfast and lunch restaurant in Saint Thomas. I've been working there for two years, and the staff are friendly, which makes it a pleasant workplace.

Sugestão: Start with a direct answer ("Yes, it's a good place to work") then give reasons using linking words ("because", "for example"). Correct minor grammar: "I've been working there for two years" and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: Yes, it is a good place to work because the staff are very supportive. For example, if I have a problem at work I can speak openly with my managers and colleagues, which reduces stress.

Sugestão: Answer directly whether you like it, then give specific reasons. Use clear sentences and correct articles: "an environment". Use linking words to structure points ("firstly", "because"). Avoid vague phrasing.

Exemplo: Yes, I like the place where I work because it has a friendly atmosphere. Firstly, the environment is calm, so I can do my job without stress, and secondly the team cooperates well.

Sugestão: Give a clear, specific plan and use concise language. Correct grammar: "After completing my diploma in general business, my goal is..." Explain reasons briefly and avoid vague claims like "field jobs play a significant role" without examples.

Exemplo: After completing my diploma in general business, my main goal is to start my own small restaurant. Alternatively, I would consider a job in the hospitality field to gain practical experience and learn how to run a business successfully.

× Well presently I'm working as a kitchen manager in a step breakfast and pancake house.

✓ Well, presently I am working as a kitchen manager in a breakfast and pancake house.

The sentence uses contracted present continuous correctly, but contains the incorrect word 'step' which is likely a vocabulary error rather than grammar; also remove contraction in formal correction. Keep present continuous because it describes a current ongoing job. Suggestion: use 'a breakfast and pancake house' and include commas for clarity.

× Before that I was just complete my two years diploma in general business.

✓ Before that I had just completed my two-year diploma in general business.

This sentence describes a completed action prior to the present job, so the past perfect or simple past is appropriate. 'Was just complete' is ungrammatical: use 'had just completed' (past perfect) or 'just completed' (simple past). Also use adjective form 'two-year' with hyphen and 'diploma' is countable but fine. Suggestion: use past perfect to show sequence: 'had just completed'.

× As he earlier mentioned that I'm working as a kitchen manager in a stacked breakfast and pancake house which is situated in Saint Thomas.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I am working as a kitchen manager in a breakfast and pancake house situated in Saint Thomas.

The original uses 'he' incorrectly to refer to the speaker and has awkward word order ('earlier mentioned that I'm'). Use 'I mentioned earlier' to refer to the speaker. 'Stacked' is incorrect vocabulary; remove it. Keep present continuous for current job.

× It is a great breakfast and a lunch restaurant.

✓ It is a great breakfast and lunch restaurant.

Using both 'a breakfast' and 'a lunch' with articles is redundant and unidiomatic. Combine into 'breakfast and lunch restaurant' without extra articles. This fixes adjective-noun usage and sounds natural.

× Uh, I'm working there since 2 years and umm, there is a great environment and uh, uh, very good stuff there.

✓ I have been working there for two years, and there is a great atmosphere and very good staff.

When expressing an action that started in the past and continues to the present, use present perfect continuous or present perfect: 'have been working' or 'have worked' plus 'for two years' (not 'since 2 years'). Use 'for' with a duration. Replace 'stuff' (incorrect noun) with 'staff' meaning employees, and 'environment' with 'atmosphere' for natural phrasing.

× And definitely the most important thing is a supportive staff.

✓ Definitely, the most important thing is a supportive staff.

Grammar is mostly correct but needs punctuation and natural word order. 'A supportive staff' is acceptable; could also be 'supportive staff' without 'a'. Suggestion: remove leading 'And' and start sentence with 'Definitely,' for formality.

× So as I'm working there for since 2 years, though the employees and employers are very supportive, If I have any problem in the work, I can easily talk with them without any hesitation.

✓ Since I have been working there for two years, the employees and employers are very supportive; if I have any problem at work, I can easily talk with them without hesitation.

Use 'since' with a starting point and 'for' with durations; here use 'for two years' with present perfect continuous: 'have been working'. Remove redundant 'as' and incorrect capitalization 'If'. Use preposition 'at work' not 'in the work'. Improve clause connection and punctuation.

× Well, in as everyone knows that there are some things matters when you are working at a place.

✓ Well, as everyone knows, there are some things that matter when you are working at a place.

Original has redundant 'in' and incorrect verb form 'matters' after 'things'. Use 'things that matter' (plural noun + verb) and remove 'in'. Add commas for clarity.

× First and foremost is a environment.

✓ First and foremost is the environment.

Use 'the environment' rather than 'a environment' because 'environment' here refers to the specific workplace environment; 'environment' begins with a vowel sound so if indefinite article were needed it would be 'an environment', but definite article 'the' is better. Suggestion: 'First and foremost is the environment.'

× If it will be there will be a good environment.

✓ If there is a good environment,

Conditional sentence uses wrong tense 'If it will be there will be'; in English use simple present in the 'if' clause for first conditional or general condition: 'If there is a good environment,' then result clause follows. Remove redundant words.

× You can work without any stress and anxiety.

✓ You can work without stress or anxiety.

Original is understandable but wordy; 'without stress or anxiety' is more idiomatic. No tense change required.

× Well, as I complete my diploma is the general business, so my first goal will be to open my own business or get my field job, which helps me to improve my lifestyle because field jobs play a significant role in human life and we can get lots of opportunities in our future life.

✓ Well, having completed my diploma in general business, my first goal is to open my own business or get a job in my field, which will help me improve my lifestyle because jobs in the field play a significant role in life and can provide many opportunities for the future.

This sentence mixes tenses and has grammatical errors. Use a participle clause 'having completed' to indicate a completed action. Use 'in general business' (preposition) and 'my first goal is' (present tense for a current plan). 'Get my field job' is unidiomatic; use 'get a job in my field'. Use 'will help' for the future benefit and 'many opportunities' instead of 'lots of opportunities in our future life'. Streamline wording for clarity.