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질문: Do you think that spending time in front of a screen helps people relax?

아이디어 1

Yes,for entertainment and leisure
Yes,for entertainment and leisure
모범 답안
I'd say it depends. If we watch a movie or TV show with the family for fun, then yes, it's a good way to relax. We can talk about what we're watching. But if we just sit and scroll through social media on our phones, I don't think it's good for anyone. It means we just spend hours looking at videos without thinking. That's not what I call relaxing.
I'd say it depends. If we watch a movie or TV show with the family for fun, then yes, it's a good way to relax. We can talk about what we're watching. But if we just sit and scroll through social media on our phones, I don't think it's good for anyone. It means we just spend hours looking at videos without thinking. That's not what I call relaxing.
I’d say it depends really. If we watch a film or TV show with the family for fun, then yes, this is a good way to unwind. We can chat about what we are watching or talk about it afterwards. But if we just sit on our phones scrolling through social media, then I don’t think this benefits anyone and it just means we spend hours scrolling through mindless videos without thinking. This isn’t my idea of relaxing.
I’d say it depends really. If we watch a film or TV show with the family for fun, then yes, this is a good way to unwind. We can chat about what we are watching or talk about it afterwards. But if we just sit on our phones scrolling through social media, then I don’t think this benefits anyone and it just means we spend hours scrolling through mindless videos without thinking. This isn’t my idea of relaxing.
문법 분석
Conditional clause: "If we watch a film or TV show with the family" It uses a conditional clause to express different ways of relaxing under different circumstances, enhancing the logic and situational simulation of the sentence. Past participle as adverbial: "scrolling through social media" The past participle phrase functions as an adverbial, describing a not very active leisure activity, adding specificity and descriptiveness to the sentence. Present participle as adjective: "spend hours scrolling through mindless videos" Present participle functions as an adjective, describing a specific behavior of wasting time, adding detail and criticality to the sentence.
어휘
  • unwind
    unwind
  • scrolling through
    scrolling through
  • social media
    social media
  • benefits
    benefits
  • mindless
    mindless

아이디어 2

No, there are potential negative effects
No, there are potential negative effects
모범 답안
Definitely not. We spend so much time in front of screens at school or work that it's hurting our eyes. Many people need glasses now because they look at computers or phones so much. A lot of people also use their phones before bed, and this makes it harder for them to fall asleep.
Definitely not. We spend so much time in front of screens at school or work that it's hurting our eyes. Many people need glasses now because they look at computers or phones so much. A lot of people also use their phones before bed, and this makes it harder for them to fall asleep.
Definitely, not. We spend so much time in front of a screen at school or work that our eyes are suffering. There are so many people today that need glasses because of the amount of time they’ve spent looking at a computer or their phone. Lots of people scroll through their phones before bed too and this makes it harder for them to fall asleep.
Definitely, not. We spend so much time in front of a screen at school or work that our eyes are suffering. There are so many people today that need glasses because of the amount of time they’ve spent looking at a computer or their phone. Lots of people scroll through their phones before bed too and this makes it harder for them to fall asleep.
문법 분석
Present continuous tense: "We spend so much time" uses the present continuous tense to express ongoing activities, emphasizing the phenomenon of spending time in front of screens, increasing the timeliness and practicality of the sentence. Present participle as an adverbial: "scrolling through their phones before bed" is a present participle used as an adverbial, describing a specific behavior before bedtime, adding vividness and description to the sentence.
어휘
  • suffering
    suffering
  • scroll through their phones
    scroll through their phones
  • fall asleep
    fall asleep

아이디어 3

Sometimes, for relaxation
Sometimes, for relaxation
모범 답안
It depends on what they watch. Some people like watching calm nature shows to relax, and it works for them. Others do yoga online or breathing exercises, which is also relaxing. These activities on devices can be calming and a way to escape. We don't always have to stop thinking when we're in front of a screen.
It depends on what they watch. Some people like watching calm nature shows to relax, and it works for them. Others do yoga online or breathing exercises, which is also relaxing. These activities on devices can be calming and a way to escape. We don't always have to stop thinking when we're in front of a screen.
It depends what they look at. Some people watch nature programs of tranquil scenes to help them relax and this works for them. Others do a yoga class online or follow some breathing exercises and this is also a good way to relax. These kinds of activities on digital devices are relaxing and are a form of escapism. We don’t have to switch off mentally everytime we sit in front of a screen.
It depends what they look at. Some people watch nature programs of tranquil scenes to help them relax and this works for them. Others do a yoga class online or follow some breathing exercises and this is also a good way to relax. These kinds of activities on digital devices are relaxing and are a form of escapism. We don’t have to switch off mentally everytime we sit in front of a screen.
문법 분석
Conditional clause: "It depends what they look at" Using a conditional clause to express that different viewing content may bring different effects, adding logicality and situational simulation to the sentence. Present participle as an adverbial phrase: "watching nature programs" and "doing a yoga class online" Using present participles as adverbial phrases to describe specific relaxation activities, making the sentence more specific and vivid. Gerund as the subject: "switching off mentally" Serving as the subject of the sentence, emphasizing that it is not always necessary to stop thinking in front of the screen, adding descriptiveness and depth to the sentence.
어휘
  • nature programs
    nature programs
  • tranquil scenes
    tranquil scenes
  • breathing exercises
    breathing exercises
  • escapism
    escapism
  • switch off mentally
    switch off mentally