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질문: Do people queue consciously while waiting for the subway train?

아이디어 1

Yes
Yes
모범 답안
I would like to say yes, but after seeing the rush hour, I think not. When there's a crowd of people at the station, everyone heading in the same direction, there's not much politeness. People quickly position themselves where the train doors might open, and as soon as they do, everyone rushes in, pushing to get on the train. This happens mainly during the busy rush hours.
I would like to say yes, but after seeing the rush hour, I think not. When there's a crowd of people at the station, everyone heading in the same direction, there's not much politeness. People quickly position themselves where the train doors might open, and as soon as they do, everyone rushes in, pushing to get on the train. This happens mainly during the busy rush hours.
I'd like to say yes, but having witnessed the rush hour, I have to say no. When there are thousands of people waiting on the platform, all going the same way, there is very little politeness as far as I can see. As soon as the train comes, the commuters position themselves where they think the doors will open, and when they open, it's a free for all, with people pushing and cramming themselves onto the train. This is just in rush hour mind.
I'd like to say yes, but having witnessed the rush hour, I have to say no. When there are thousands of people waiting on the platform, all going the same way, there is very little politeness as far as I can see. As soon as the train comes, the commuters position themselves where they think the doors will open, and when they open, it's a free for all, with people pushing and cramming themselves onto the train. This is just in rush hour mind.
문법 분석
Adverbial clause of condition: "When there are thousands of people waiting on the platform" sets a specific situation and describes a possible outcome, increasing the practicality of the sentence. Present participle as adverbial: "with people pushing and cramming themselves onto the train" uses "pushing" and "cramming" as present participles to describe specific actions, adding a sense of dynamism to the sentence. Emphasizing sentence structure: "As soon as the train comes, the commuters position themselves" emphasizes the urgency of the actions that take place when the train arrives, making the expression more specific and vivid.
어휘
  • rush hour
    rush hour
  • witness
    witness
  • politeness
    politeness
  • commuter
    commuter
  • with people pushing and cramming for themselves
    with people pushing and cramming for themselves
  • free for all
    free for all

아이디어 2

No
No
모범 답안
No, not really. In subway stations, especially during rush hours, it's more like a crowd than a queue. People often push past each other to get in because it's so packed. There are just too many people, which makes forming a proper line almost impossible.
No, not really. In subway stations, especially during rush hours, it's more like a crowd than a queue. People often push past each other to get in because it's so packed. There are just too many people, which makes forming a proper line almost impossible.
Regrettably, in the context of subway stations, particularly during peak hours, orderly queuing is often not observed. The sheer volume of passengers transforms the platform into a sea of people, where the urgency to board often leads to individuals pushing past each other. The overwhelming crowd size makes the notion of maintaining a structured line somewhat impractical.
Regrettably, in the context of subway stations, particularly during peak hours, orderly queuing is often not observed. The sheer volume of passengers transforms the platform into a sea of people, where the urgency to board often leads to individuals pushing past each other. The overwhelming crowd size makes the notion of maintaining a structured line somewhat impractical.
문법 분석
Present participle as attributive: In "pushing past each other," the present participle "pushing" serves as an attributive to describe people's actions, making the sentence more dynamic and descriptive. Adjective phrase: "overwhelming crowd size" uses the adjective "overwhelming" to modify "crowd size," increasing the intensity of the description, while also making the sentence more vivid and concrete. Attributive clause: "where the urgency to board often leads to individuals pushing past each other" This attributive clause provides a detailed description of the state of "sea of people," increasing the complexity and richness of information in the sentence. Noun phrases as subject and object: using noun phrases like "sheer volume of passengers" and "notion of maintaining a structured line" as subject and object provides specific information points, enhancing the accuracy and depth of the sentence.
어휘
  • peak hours
    peak hours
  • sheer volume
    sheer volume
  • sea of people
    sea of people
  • urgency
    urgency
  • push past
    push past
  • overwhelming
    overwhelming
  • somewhat impractical
    somewhat impractical