Shopping— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and irrelevant fragments, and correct basic grammar (plural/singular, articles, pronouns). Use 2–4 supporting details linked logically (e.g., why you enjoy shopping, what you buy).

예시: Yes, I enjoy shopping. I like looking for unique items and treating myself when I find something I love. However, I usually only buy things if they are within my budget or truly useful.

제안: Give a clear reason with a coherent supporting detail and use linking words (because, so, therefore). Reduce hesitations and filler words. Be specific about how you compare prices (apps, websites, checking labels) to show range of vocabulary and concrete behavior.

예시: Yes, I always compare prices because I want the best value. For example, I check online reviews and price comparison apps before buying electronics, so I can avoid overpaying and choose a reliable seller.

제안: Answer directly then support with two specific reasons using linking words (because, so, for example). Use correct noun forms and reduce redundancy. Mention concrete examples of what makes decisions hard (too many options, fear of poor quality).

예시: Yes, I often find it hard to choose because there are so many brands and models available. For example, when buying headphones I compare sound quality and reviews for a long time because I want to avoid buying a low-quality product.

제안: Give a clear opinion followed by a few specific reasons and an example. Use linking phrases (for instance, however, therefore) and correct grammar (subject-verb agreement). Avoid trailing off; finish your point with a concluding sentence.

예시: No, I don't think expensive items are always better. Often cheaper brands provide the same quality because pricing can reflect brand name rather than materials. For instance, I once bought a budget blender that performed as well as a more expensive model, so I now read reviews before assuming price equals quality.

× I really love to go to shop or to go to buy an unnecessary things and my and anything.

✓ I really love going shopping or buying unnecessary things and anything I like.

The phrase 'love to go to shop' is unnatural; 'love' is often followed by the gerund when describing hobbies (Verb + -ing). Also 'an unnecessary things' mixes singular article with plural noun and should be 'unnecessary things'. Change verbs to gerund forms and correct article-number agreement.

× I really love to go to shop or to go to buy an unnecessary things and my and anything.

✓ I really love going shopping or buying unnecessary things and anything I like.

The original uses 'an unnecessary things' which wrongly combines singular article 'an' with plural 'things'. Use plural without article: 'unnecessary things'.

× If I like it I will.

✓ If I like it, I will buy it.

The sentence is incomplete for the intended meaning. Adding the object 'buy it' clarifies the consequence introduced by 'I will'. Also add a comma after the conditional clause for clarity.

× If I like it and I have money I will.

✓ If I like it and I have the money, I will buy it.

The clause lacks an explicit verb for the consequence and needs an article before 'money' when referring to a specific sum the speaker has. Add 'buy it' to complete the sentence and a comma after the conditional clause.

× I will buy it even though it's not my nieces.

✓ I will buy it even though it's not mine.

'Not my nieces' incorrectly uses plural noun 'nieces' and possessive form; intended meaning is general possession: 'mine'. 'It's not mine' correctly expresses that the item does not belong to the speaker.

× Yes, I always uh do oh compare uh prices uh uh when I shop because umm if I find it something uh much uh at uh lower Co cost.

✓ Yes, I always compare prices when I shop because if I find something at a much lower cost, I will buy it.

Remove filler words and redundant verbs. 'Find it something' is incorrect; use 'find something'. 'Much at lower Co cost' is disordered and should be 'at a much lower cost'. Add the consequence to complete the thought.

× So rather than buying uh uh much more expense uh, since I love to buy things which are on.

✓ So rather than buying much more expensive items, I prefer things that are on sale.

'Much more expense' is incorrect; use the adjective 'expensive' with 'more' or the comparative 'much more expensive'. 'Things which are on' is incomplete; specify 'on sale'. This corrects adjective usage and completes the idea.

× Yes, it really become difficult for me to make choices whenever I try to shop or buy things because on a shopping set as there are many, there are more choices.

✓ Yes, it really becomes difficult for me to make choices whenever I shop or buy things because in a shopping setting there are many choices.

Use the third person singular verb form 'becomes' to match 'it'. Also 'try to shop' is unnecessary; use simple present 'shop'. 'On a shopping set' is incorrect preposition and noun choice; use 'in a shopping setting'.

× And getting a good and authentic cheese for myself or or any other accessory or electronics, it really take a lot of thinking for me.

✓ And getting a good and authentic case for myself or any other accessory or electronic item really takes a lot of thinking for me.

Subject-verb agreement: 'it really take' should be 'it really takes' or restructure to '...really takes a lot of thinking'. Also 'cheese' seems to be a mispronunciation of 'case'; choose correct noun. Use singular 'electronic item' or plural consistently. Remove the extra pronoun 'it' by restructuring.

× No, I really don't think so that umm only expenses are better.

✓ No, I really don't think that only expensive products are better.

Replace 'think so that' with 'think that'. 'Expenses' (noun) is incorrect; use the adjective 'expensive' to modify 'products'.

× Sometimes uh that uh products which are at lesser prices, umm uh offers same quality and uh qu uh quantity as expensive ones.

✓ Sometimes products that are priced lower offer the same quality and quantity as expensive ones.

Use 'products that' instead of 'that products which'. 'At lesser prices' is awkward; 'priced lower' or 'at lower prices' is better. 'Offers' must agree with plural 'products' so use 'offer'. Include 'the' before 'same quality'.

× Even uh it's just because it's just the price and the branding, which makes them expensive.

✓ Often, it's just the price and the branding that make them expensive.

Use 'that make' for a restrictive clause; 'which makes them expensive' suggests non-restrictive and has singular agreement error. Remove duplicated 'just'.