Shopping— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn: bắt đầu với câu chủ đề trực tiếp, tránh lặp từ và hoàn thiện các câu bị ngắt. Thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: loại cửa hàng bạn thích, tần suất) và dùng từ nối hợp lý để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

예시: Yes, I enjoy shopping because it helps me relax after studying. I usually visit local markets or thrift shops once a week to browse clothes and books, and I find the casual atmosphere very refreshing.

제안: Cần hoàn thành ý và tránh mâu thuẫn thông tin; tổ chức câu rõ ràng (lý do chính, chi tiết bổ trợ) và dùng liên từ như 'because' hoặc 'so' để nối ý. Giải thích rõ hơn về quy định và cách bạn so sánh (ứng dụng, đọc nhãn, hỏi giá) để cụ thể hóa nội dung.

예시: Yes, I always compare prices because I have a limited budget. For example, I check online reviews and compare listings on different websites before buying, and I often look for basic, affordable options that meet my needs.

제안: Cần sửa ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó nêu lý do với các ví dụ cụ thể. Tránh nói lặp và dùng các cụm từ chính xác như 'I usually know what I need' hoặc 'I have a clear budget'.

예시: No, I rarely find shopping difficult because I usually know what I need and set a clear budget. For instance, when I need a new notebook I decide the size and price range beforehand, which makes choosing quick.

제안: Cần trình bày ý chính mạch lạc hơn và cung cấp ví dụ rõ ràng, liên kết các câu bằng từ nối như 'however' hoặc 'for example'. Tránh từ ngữ lặp và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp để ý nghĩa rõ ràng (ví dụ so sánh chức năng, chất lượng và giá trị).

예시: No, I don't think expensive always means better. It depends on the product; for example, a pricey designer bottle may look nice but a cheaper reusable water bottle can be more practical and healthier for daily use.

× Yes, I really enjoy shopping. Shopping is a great way for me to relax and recharge after busy and tired times of studying. Moreover, shopping. Can.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy shopping. Shopping is a great way for me to relax and recharge after busy and tiring periods of studying. Moreover, I find shopping calming.

Error type: present tense and word choice. 'Busy and tired times of studying' is awkward; 'tiring' should be used to describe periods that cause tiredness (adjective), and 'periods' is a better noun than 'times' here. The fragment 'Moreover, shopping. Can.' is an incomplete sentence (sentence structure error) and must be completed; corrected to 'Moreover, I find shopping calming.' Suggestion: use continuous or simple present appropriately to describe habitual activities and ensure sentences are complete.

× Yes I do. I'm a student and I don't have a large budget. That's why I always compare prices between products before making a decision. Moreover, I'm a Buddhist monk and according to the Buddhist regulations I am not allowed to buy something expensive, so I need to check the.

✓ Yes, I do. I'm a student and I don't have a large budget. That's why I always compare prices of products before making a decision. Moreover, I'm a Buddhist monk and, according to Buddhist regulations, I am not allowed to buy expensive items, so I need to check the price.

Errors: preposition and article usage. 'Compare prices between products' is unnatural; use 'compare prices of products' or 'compare prices between products' is acceptable but 'of' is more natural. 'According to the Buddhist regulations' -> 'according to Buddhist regulations' (no definite article needed). 'Buy something expensive' -> 'buy expensive items' (plural noun without 'something'). The sentence ended abruptly 'check the.' Complete the noun 'price'. Suggestion: choose correct prepositions and articles and finish sentences with the appropriate object.

× No, I seldom find it difficult to make a decision because I how to say I usually have my state, what should I buy and which price prefer? So I seldom difficult.

✓ No, I seldom find it difficult to make a decision because, how can I say, I usually know what I should buy and which price I prefer. So I rarely find shopping difficult.

Multiple errors: sentence structure and verb usage. 'I how to say I usually have my state' is ungrammatical; replace with 'how can I say' for a filler and 'I usually know what I should buy'. 'Which price prefer?' needs subject and verb: 'which price I prefer'. Final fragment 'So I seldom difficult' lacks a verb; corrected to 'So I rarely find shopping difficult.' Suggestion: include subjects and verbs in clauses and avoid fragments.

× No, I don't think so. I mean it depends on the situation. I think uh there are some products are so expensive, but it's function maybe it's not usable for your health, for instance if you thirsty. Uh-huh.

✓ No, I don't think so. I mean it depends on the situation. I think there are some products that are very expensive, but their function may not be good for your health, for instance if you are thirsty.

Errors: relative clause and verb forms. 'There are some products are so expensive' is redundant; use 'there are some products that are very expensive' or 'some products are very expensive.' 'It's function maybe it's not usable for your health' is incorrect: use 'their function may not be good for your health.' 'If you thirsty' is missing the verb 'are'. Suggestion: use correct relative pronouns, possessive pronouns for plural nouns ('their'), modal verb 'may' with base verb, and include the correct form of 'be' in conditionals.