Shopping— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a clear, grammatical topic sentence and limit length to 2–3 sentences. Be specific about why you enjoy shopping (e.g., relaxing, finding bargains, trying new styles). Use correct grammar (e.g., "even when I have little money" ) and avoid contradictions. Add a linking word if you add a second idea.

예시: Yes, I like shopping because it helps me relax and discover new styles. However, even when I have little money, I enjoy browsing for affordable make-up and clothes because I can find good bargains.

제안: Start with a direct topic sentence and follow with one clear reason supported by a brief detail. Use natural expressions like "I do, because" and correct phrasing such as "on a tight budget." Keep it concise and use a linking word for clarity.

예시: Yes, I do, because I’m on a tight budget. Therefore, I check prices and look for discounts so I can afford the items I need.

제안: Provide a clear, grammatical answer. Say why choices are hard (too many options, indecision, limited budget) and give one specific example. Use linking words like "because" or "for example" and keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, it is quite difficult for me to choose because there are so many options and I can’t decide quickly. For example, when stores have many similar dresses, I spend a long time comparing them before I pick one.

제안: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with a specific reason or short example. Avoid vague fillers like "OK, OK." Use linking words like "because" or "for example" and give a concrete comparison (quality vs. price, brand vs. value).

예시: No, I don’t think expensive products are always better because cheaper items can offer similar quality. For example, I have several affordable shirts that look and last as well as more expensive ones.

× Yes I do. I like shopping with I have no money because I can buy my makeups, my shirts, my dresses and everything I want.

✓ Yes, I do. I like shopping even when I have no money because I can buy my makeup, my shirts, my dresses, and everything I want.

The sentence uses an incorrect pronoun phrase 'with I have no money.' Replace with 'even when I have no money' to show contrast. 'Makeups' is incorrect; 'makeup' is an uncountable noun. Add commas for clarity and include the conjunction 'and' before the last item in the list.

× Yes, I compare prices when I'm going to shopping because I don't have a lot of money and my money is budget only.

✓ Yes, I compare prices when I'm going shopping because I don't have a lot of money and my money is limited.

Use 'going shopping' not 'going to shopping'; 'going to' requires a verb (going to buy). 'My money is budget only' is ungrammatical; replace with 'my money is limited' to express limited funds. Also 'a lot of money' is fine.

× Yes, it's difficult to make the address Where are you? I want this, I want this, I want this. How can I be possible to choose if I don't have a serious one?

✓ Yes, it's difficult to decide. I keep thinking 'I want this, I want this, I want this.' How can I possibly choose if I don't have a clear plan?

The original mixes unrelated phrases and has incorrect words: 'make the address' should be 'make a decision' or 'decide.' 'How can I be possible to choose' is ungrammatical; use 'How can I possibly choose.' 'Serious one' is unclear; 'a clear plan' or 'a clear idea' fits context. Rephrase to improve coherence and correct word choices.

× Uh, no, I don't think so because all my clothes I have from OK, OK.

✓ No, I don't think so because most of my clothes are okay.

Original word order 'all my clothes I have from OK, OK' is incorrect. Use 'most of my clothes are okay' to convey that many clothes are acceptable. 'Okay' as an adjective does not need repetition; reduce to a single clear term. Adjust subject-verb order to 'my clothes are' for correctness.