Shopping— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason or example. Avoid awkward phrases like “emotional values” and maintain correct grammar (e.g., “improve my quality of life”).

예시: Yes, I enjoy shopping because it lifts my mood and can improve my quality of life. For example, buying a comfortable chair made working from home much easier for me.

제안: Make the sentence structure clearer and correct grammar. Use linking words and be specific about how you compare (e.g., apps, filters, delivery). Avoid repetition and awkward phrases like “choice choosing.”

예시: Yes, I usually compare prices on different platforms such as Taobao and JD.com because it helps me save money. For instance, I check product listings, shipping fees and seller ratings before I decide which one to buy.

제안: Improve fluency and grammar; avoid repetition and unclear phrases. State your main idea, then give one clear supporting detail using linking words (e.g., “because”, “so”, “for example”). Correct word choice: “reviews” instead of “public comments.”

예시: Yes, I find it difficult because I pay close attention to online reviews. Therefore, I read both positive and negative reviews on social media and compare them to decide if the product is worth buying.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and a specific reason or example. Fix grammar and awkward phrasing (e.g., “many premium brands are expensive but not necessarily better”). Use linking words to contrast ideas (e.g., “however”, “for example”).

예시: Not necessarily. Many premium brands charge more for their name rather than better quality; for example, I once bought an expensive bag that wore out faster than a cheaper alternative from a reliable local brand.

× Yes, of course shopping can provide me emotional values and buying products can improve my life quality.

✓ Yes, of course. Shopping can provide me with emotional value, and buying products can improve my quality of life.

Use of adjectives/nouns was incorrect: 'emotional values' should be singular 'emotional value' or phrase 'emotional benefits'; add preposition 'with' after 'provide me' (this is a preposition issue but primarily adjective/noun choice). 'life quality' is unnatural; correct phrase is 'quality of life'. Also add a period and conjunction for clarity.

× Yes, while choice choosing the same products, I often compare the prices in different shopping platforms such as Taobao and Jingdong and choose the cheapest 1 to buy.

✓ Yes. When choosing the same products, I often compare prices on different shopping platforms such as Taobao and Jingdong and choose the cheapest one to buy.

Original has awkward structure and word choice: 'while choice choosing' is incorrect; use 'when choosing'. Use 'compare prices on' rather than 'in'. Use 'cheapest one' instead of 'cheapest 1'. Break into clearer clauses with punctuation.

× Yes, of course, because I'm sensitive to the public comments of the of the products. So I will complete com compare with both negative and positive comments on the social media and judge it by myself whether this product is worth buying.

✓ Yes, of course, because I'm influenced by public comments about the products. So I read both negative and positive comments on social media and judge for myself whether a product is worth buying.

Multiple issues: 'sensitive to the public comments of the of the products' is ungrammatical; better: 'influenced by public comments about the products'. 'Complete com compare' seems to be a mistake; use 'read'. Preposition 'on social media' is correct. 'Judge it by myself' should be 'judge for myself'. Also use 'a product' for general reference.

× Not really because a lot of premium brands they products are really expensive but the quality is normal because you pay for the brand volume not for the quality.

✓ Not really, because many premium brands' products are very expensive but the quality is average; you often pay for the brand name rather than for quality.

Pronoun and noun phrase errors: 'a lot of premium brands they products' is wrong; use 'many premium brands' products' or rephrase. 'They' is unnecessary and ungrammatical here. 'Normal' is better replaced with 'average' and 'brand volume' is incorrect—use 'brand name' or 'brand reputation'. Also insert commas and clearer conjunctions.