Shopping— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: もっと自然で簡潔な答えを心がけ、文法や語順の誤りを直すこと。具体的には不要な繰り返しや発話のフィラー（uh, um）を減らし、トピック文を明確にした後に1～2の具体例をつなぎ言葉で述べる練習をすること。例：'I like shopping, but I try to save money.' のように始め、'For example' や 'so' を使ってオンライン購入の習慣を説明する。

예시: Yes, I like shopping, but I try to save money. For example, I usually browse stores online because it’s cheaper and more convenient.

제안: 質問には直接答えたが、話の流れが混乱しており文法や語彙選択に誤りがある。まず簡潔に理由を述べ（topic sentence）、次に具体例を論理的な接続詞（for example, however）で続ける練習をすること。仮定や例を出す時は文を短くして明確に。

예시: Yes, I always compare prices because I want to save money. For example, if I buy a jacket and later find the same one cheaper at another store, I would feel frustrated and try to return it or ask for a price match.

제안: 繰り返し表現を避け、時制と語形（thinking → think, takes → take）を正しく使う練習をすること。理由を述べる際は一つの明確な理由を提示し、接続詞（because, so）で結果をつなぐと流れが良くなる。

예시: Yes, I find it difficult to make shopping decisions because I always try to choose the best option. As a result, I often spend a lot of time comparing items before I buy.

제안: アイディアは伝わるが、文法ミス（has have, it's expensive products）や不明瞭な表現が多い。明確な主張（topic sentence）を述べ、その後に対比を示す接続詞（however, on the other hand）と具体例を付け加える練習をすること。また不要なフィラーを減らす。

예시: No, I don't think expensive products are always better. While expensive items can be higher quality, cheaper products can also be good if they are well-made or come from reliable brands.

× Uh, yes, I do, but I don't have so much money so I try not to buy too much thing.

✓ Uh, yes, I do, but I don't have much money, so I try not to buy too many things.

'Much' is used with uncountable nouns (money) and 'many' with countable nouns (things). 'Too much thing' mixes forms and should be 'too many things'. Also add a comma before the coordinating conjunction and pluralize 'thing' to 'things' to match 'many'.

× Umm, so I often go out and go on to their, uh, store and I really, uh, buy something on the Internet.

✓ Umm, so I often go out and go to their store, and I often buy things on the Internet.

Use 'go to' rather than 'go on to' when referring to entering a store. 'Buy something' is acceptable but 'buy things' fits general shopping habits. Maintain parallel structure with 'often' and use plural 'things' for general actions.

× Yes, of course, because I'm very frugal, but please imagine that you've, you have bought a very nice growth.

✓ Yes, of course, because I'm very frugal, but please imagine that you have bought a very nice coat.

'Growth' is incorrect in this context; likely intended 'coat' or 'outfit'. Also avoid stuttering duplicates ('you've, you have'). Use 'you have bought' as a single phrase.

× But if when you go to another store at the same day and do find, uh, the almost the same clothes, but very cheaper one, how to think it's?

✓ But if you go to another store on the same day and find almost the same clothes, but much cheaper, what would you think?

Remove extra 'if'/'when' combination; use 'on the same day' not 'at'. 'Do find' is unnecessary; simple past or present 'find' is fine. 'Very cheaper one' is ungrammatical — use 'much cheaper' or 'a much cheaper one'. Form a proper question 'what would you think?'. 'Clothes' is plural so avoid singular 'one' unless specifying an item.

× Yeah, I always, I always thinking over and over and it's very difficult to make decision because I always, I always try to make the best choice.

✓ Yeah, I always think over things again and again, and it's very difficult to make a decision because I always try to make the best choice.

Use simple present 'think' rather than present continuous 'thinking' for habitual actions. 'Make decision' needs an article 'a decision'. Remove repeated fragments for clarity.

× So it never fails to takes a lot of time.

✓ So it always takes a lot of time.

Subject-verb agreement: after 'it' the verb should be 'takes' without 'fails to'. 'Never fails to takes' is incorrect combination. Use 'always takes' to express the intended meaning.

× I don't think it's uh, expensive products, uh, always better than cheaper ones cause cheaper ones has have also the, the advantage.

✓ I don't think expensive products are always better than cheaper ones, because cheaper ones also have advantages.

Avoid 'it's' before plural noun 'expensive products' — use a full clause. Subject-verb agreement: 'cheaper ones have' not 'has have'. Use 'advantages' plural or 'an advantage' depending on meaning. Use 'because' not 'cause' in formal speech.

× Not all, not all of the cheaper ones, uh, VAT products, So they may and sometimes uh, contain good ones.

✓ Not all cheaper products are of low quality; some cheaper ones can sometimes be good.

Original is fragmented and unclear. Remove 'VAT products' which seems irrelevant. Use clear clause: 'Not all cheaper products are of low quality; some cheaper ones can sometimes be good.' Maintain subject-verb agreement and natural word order.