Shopping— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details (when, who, what you buy). Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' if needed, and keep to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy shopping, especially with my friends after a busy day at school. We usually go to the local shopping mall at the weekend to browse clothes and have a coffee, so shopping is both social and relaxing for me.

제안: Give a direct, clear reason and avoid hesitations or unclear phrasing. Use coherent linking (e.g., 'because', 'so') and specific examples of what you compare (e.g., clothes, electronics). Keep sentences simple and grammatical.

예시: Yes, I compare prices because I want to get the best value. For example, I often check prices of shoes and phone accessories online and in-store before buying so I don't overspend.

제안: Answer directly and reduce filler words (uh, um). Give a concise reason with one clear supporting detail about how you plan. Use linking words like 'because' and avoid double negatives.

예시: No, it's not difficult because I usually make a shopping list beforehand. Planning what I need for my daily routine helps me decide quickly when I'm at the mall.

제안: Be clearer and use accurate vocabulary. State your opinion directly, then give a specific reason and an example (e.g., quality vs. price, brand vs. function). Avoid confusing metaphors and filler phrases.

예시: No, I don't think expensive products are always better. Often cheaper items perform just as well; for example, I bought a low-cost headphone that had better sound quality than an expensive brand-name pair, so price doesn't always equal quality.

× Yes I do.

✓ Yes, I do.

Punctuation: A comma is needed after 'Yes' in responses. Add a comma to follow standard written conventions for short answers.

× I'm really into going shopping with my friends, especially after a busy day in school.

✓ I'm really into going shopping with my friends, especially after a busy day at school.

Incorrect preposition (Grammar Problem Type 11): use 'at school' to indicate being present in the school environment. Replace 'in' with 'at'.

× It's really entertaining and engaging for students like us.

✓ It's really entertaining and engaging for students like us.

No grammatical correction needed; sentence is correct. (Kept for completeness.)

× I always tend to hang out with my friends at the weekend to go to the shopping mall to shop with each other too.

✓ I always tend to hang out with my friends at the weekend to go to the shopping mall and shop together.

Singular and plural issue / sentence structure (IDs 1 and 26): 'with each other' is redundant when combined with 'together'; simplify to 'shop together'. Also replace the repeated 'to' structure with 'and' for clarity.

× Yes. Are you sure you compare prices when I shop?

✓ Yes. Do you mean 'do you compare prices when you shop' or 'do I compare prices when I shop' ?

Sentence structure and pronoun confusion (IDs 26 and 12): The speaker appears to ask a clarifying question but mixes perspectives. Provide the correct forms depending on intended meaning: 'Do you compare prices when you shop?' or 'Do I compare prices when I shop?'. Use correct subject pronoun to match the intended question.

× Because I have to compare disparate prices between different shops to to gain a an appropriate and proper price between them so that I'm able to gather cards price stuff.

✓ Because I have to compare different prices at various shops to find an appropriate price so that I can collect discount cards or price information.

Incorrect use of prepositions and articles (IDs 11 and 22) and sentence structure (26): 'between different shops' is awkward; use 'at various shops' or 'in different shops'. Remove duplicate words ('to to', 'a an'). 'Gain a price' is unnatural; use 'find an appropriate price'. 'Gather cards price stuff' is unclear; interpret as 'collect discount cards or price information.' Clarify and simplify the sentence for natural English.

× No, it isn't.

✓ No, it isn't.

No correction needed; sentence is grammatically fine as a short negative response.

× It is always not so, uh, difficult or arduous for me to make choices when I shop because I always, uh, plan what I'm supposed to buy or purchase for my daily routine before I, uh, go to the shopping mall to go shop with my friends or my family together.

✓ It's usually not difficult for me to make choices when I shop because I plan what I need to buy for my daily routine before I go to the shopping mall with my friends or family.

Word choice and sentence structure errors (IDs 13 and 26): 'It is always not so' is awkward; use 'It's usually not difficult'. 'Arduous' is overly formal and uncommon here. Remove filler 'uh'. 'Plan what I'm supposed to buy or purchase' is redundant; use 'plan what I need to buy'. 'Go to the shopping mall to go shop' is repetitive; use 'go to the shopping mall' or 'shop'. 'With my friends or my family together' is redundant; 'with my friends or family' suffices.

× No, I don't.

✓ No, I don't.

No correction needed; appropriate short negative response.

× I'm so enlightened to believe that, umm, actual beans products are always not better or greater than the cheaper ones because luxurious products can make other runoff, the mill or, uh, feel uncomfortable for the money or the price.

✓ I don't believe that expensive products are always better than cheaper ones because luxury products can make people feel uncomfortable about the price.

Multiple errors: tense/aspect and word choice and sentence structure (IDs 6, 13, 26). 'I'm so enlightened to believe' is unnatural; use 'I don't believe' to directly answer. 'Actual beans products' seems incorrect—likely intended 'expensive' or 'branded' products; use 'expensive products'. 'Always not better or greater' is awkward; use 'always better'. 'Luxurious products can make other runoff, the mill' is nonsensical; interpret as 'make people feel uncomfortable about the price'. Simplify and clarify the sentence for meaning and grammatical correctness.