History— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and direct with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitation words (e.g. "kind of"), correct grammar, and limit to 3–4 sentences. Add one specific example to support your point and use a linking word to connect ideas.

예시: Yes. History has been a required subject at school, so I studied it throughout my education. Because remembering dates and names was difficult, I developed specific study methods, such as timelines and note summaries, to help me retain key facts.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your main method, fix small grammar mistakes (e.g. "her history" → "history"), and use linking words to sequence methods. Mention one specific example of how you apply a method in practice.

예시: I learn history mainly by using active recall and spaced practice. For example, I create flashcards for important dates and people, then review them in Pomodoro sessions (25 minutes study, 5 minutes break) to improve retention.

제안: Provide a single clear topic sentence about one or two main benefits, avoid rhetorical questions and short fragments, and give a specific supporting example or result. Use linking words (for example, therefore, furthermore) to show logical flow and limit to 3–4 sentences.

예시: Studying history helps people understand their national identity and learn from past events. For example, learning Philippine history raises awareness of social issues and can guide future decisions, so citizens are better prepared to contribute to their country.

제안: Good clear response with relevant reasons. Improve by adding a linking phrase and one specific example to make it more convincing, and keep it within 3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I think history is essential because it explains our identity and reveals the causes of major problems. For example, understanding the causes of world wars teaches leaders and citizens to avoid similar mistakes, which helps society progress.

× I have built study methods that specifically works on history because it's sometimes hard to be familiar with the dates and names of the people that are associated with it.

✓ I have built study methods that specifically work on history because it's sometimes hard to become familiar with the dates and names of the people associated with it.

Subject 'methods' is plural so the verb should be 'work' (base form) not 'works' (subject-verb agreement). Also, 'be familiar with' is acceptable but 'become familiar with' is more natural when describing acquiring familiarity; remove the unnecessary 'that are' for conciseness. Suggestion: use plural agreement and prefer concise phrasing.

× I found it difficult to review her history during exams when I was in elementary, so I searched for different methods in studying such as the Pomodoro technique and flash cards or active recall, and I used them until now to familiarize myself with our lessons regarding history.

✓ I found it difficult to review history during exams when I was in elementary school, so I searched for different study methods such as the Pomodoro technique, flashcards and active recall, and I have used them until now to familiarize myself with our history lessons.

The pronoun 'her' is incorrect here; use no pronoun or 'history' alone. 'Elementary' should be 'elementary school' for clarity. 'Flash cards' is normally one word 'flashcards'. The tense 'used them until now' is better as present perfect 'have used them until now' to show an action that started in the past and continues. Also reorder 'study methods' (noun + noun) instead of 'methods in studying'.

× For example, studying Philippine history.

✓ For example, studying Philippine history is important.

This fragment lacks a complete clause; it's a sentence fragment. Adding a verb makes it a full sentence that fits the context. Alternatively it could be joined to the previous sentence. Ensuring sentences have a subject and verb avoids sentence fragments.

× How are we supposed to love our own country if we do not know it right?

✓ How are we supposed to love our own country if we do not know it, right?

The original intended informal tag 'right?' should be separated by a comma. Without punctuation it reads awkwardly. Also 'do not know it' is acceptable; ensure the question tag 'right?' is punctuated correctly.

× So, studying the Philippine history makes students be aware of what's happening in the country.

✓ So, studying Philippine history makes students aware of what is happening in the country.

'Makes students be aware' is awkward; use 'makes students aware' (causative structure: make + object + adjective). Also 'the Philippine history' should be 'Philippine history' (no article). Use full 'what is' instead of contraction in formal answers if preferred.

× Therefore, we will use it for the future.

✓ Therefore, we can use that knowledge in the future.

'Use it for the future' is vague and awkward. Clarify the object ('that knowledge') and use preposition 'in the future'. This produces a natural, meaningful sentence.

× We will use it to guide.

✓ We will use it to guide our decisions.

'Use it to guide' is incomplete; add the object being guided (e.g., 'our decisions' or 'our actions') to complete the thought.

× Yes, it is very important to know our identity and the causes of our problems from before, such as the causes of world wars.

✓ Yes, it is very important to know our identity and the causes of our past problems, such as the causes of world wars.

'From before' is awkward; use 'past' to modify 'problems'. This improves clarity. No article change needed for 'causes of world wars' though consider 'the world wars' if referring to World War I and II; if so write 'the causes of the world wars'.

× Studying these problems can help us to avoid making the same mistakes and contribute to our society to make it a better place.

✓ Studying these problems can help us avoid making the same mistakes and contribute to society to make it a better place.

Omit the infinitival 'to' after 'help' ('help us avoid' is idiomatic). 'Contribute to our society to make it a better place' is awkward—use 'contribute to society to make it a better place' or 'help make our society a better place'. This improves natural preposition and verb patterns.