Gifts— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear and natural in your opening sentence, use correct vocabulary and concise structure. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g., "I'm not very good at choosing gifts."), avoid incorrect words like "urgent" for this context, and limit details to two or three short sentences. Use a linking phrase to introduce an example (e.g., "for example" or "last year").

예시: I'm not very good at choosing gifts. It usually takes me much longer than others to decide what to buy; for example, last year I spent several weeks picking a present for a friend, but she didn't like it.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and organize supporting details with linking words. Correct plural and phrasing (e.g., "family" not "families") and avoid long, awkward clauses. Mention the main occasions first, then add one specific personal detail with a linking phrase like "for example" or "in particular."

예시: I usually give gifts to family and friends on their birthdays. In particular, my girlfriend really cares about Christmas, so I always prepare a Christmas present for her, which can be difficult but I think it's worth the effort.

제안: Begin with a direct topic sentence naming your main criteria, then add specific supporting details with linking words. Use consistent tense and pronouns (e.g., "whether he or she would like it"). Avoid repetition and keep it within three sentences by combining closely related ideas.

예시: I mainly consider whether a gift is practical and whether the recipient will like it. Because I prefer something meaningful and personal, I often spend a long time deciding, but I think the effort pays off.

제안: Good content and personal example; improve small grammar issues and tighten sentences. Use correct articles and plural forms ("a handmade gift" or "handmade gifts") and combine short sentences for fluency. Add a linking word before the example (e.g., "for example" or "for instance").

예시: Yes, I have. Handmade gifts feel more personal and meaningful. For example, last year I made a birthday card for my girlfriend and wrote a heartfelt message; she loved it and it made me very happy.

제안: Start with a clear stance then qualify it with a contrasting idea using linking words like "however" or "but." Correct vocabulary mistakes ("Gibbs" -> "gifts") and avoid absolute statements. Provide a concise reason and an example to support your view.

예시: They can, to some extent, because an expensive gift may show how much you care. However, I don't think gifts should be judged by price; a thoughtful, inexpensive present can be just as meaningful.

× No, I'm not urgent.

✓ No, I'm not urgent about it.

The original sentence uses 'urgent' incorrectly; 'urgent' describes something, not a person's tendency to act quickly. The speaker likely means they are not in a hurry or do not feel urgency when giving gifts. Adding 'about it' clarifies the object, or better alternatives include 'I'm not in a hurry' or 'I'm not someone who is in a hurry.' Ensure verb 'am' matches adjective use.

× It always takes me much longer time than other people to decide what to buy.

✓ It always takes me much longer than other people to decide what to buy.

The phrase 'longer time' is redundant when using 'longer'; use 'much longer than other people' or 'much more time than other people.' The present simple 'takes' is correct for habitual actions.

× For example, last year I spent several weeks to decide the gift for my friend, but as a result she didn't like it.

✓ For example, last year I spent several weeks deciding on a gift for my friend, but she didn't like it in the end.

After verbs like 'spend' when indicating duration before another action, use the -ing form ('spending several weeks deciding') or 'spent several weeks deciding.' Also use 'deciding on a gift' or 'deciding what to buy.' 'As a result' is acceptable but 'in the end' is more natural here.

× I usually give gifts to my families or friends at their birthdays, and because my girlfriend cares about the Christmas Day very much, I always prepare a Christmas present for her, which is not easy for me, but I think it's worth doing.

✓ I usually give gifts to my family or friends on their birthdays, and because my girlfriend cares a lot about Christmas, I always prepare a Christmas present for her, which is not easy for me, but I think it's worth it.

Use 'family' (uncountable) rather than 'families' when referring to one's family. Use 'on their birthdays' for timing. 'Cares about the Christmas Day very much' is unnatural; say 'cares a lot about Christmas.' 'Worth doing' should be 'worth it' to refer to the effort. These changes improve pronoun/reference and idiomatic usage.

× I usually think about whether it is practical or she or he would like it.

✓ I usually think about whether it is practical and whether she or he would like it.

The original mixes structures; coordinate parallel clauses for clarity: 'whether it is practical and whether she or he would like it.' Also 'she or he' is better as 'he or she' or use 'they' for singular gender-neutral pronoun: 'whether they would like it.' Maintain present tense for habitual action.

× I wanted the gift to be more meaningful and personal, so it often takes quite a long time to decide what to buy, but I think it's worth doing.

✓ I want the gift to be more meaningful and personal, so it often takes me quite a long time to decide what to buy, but I think it's worth it.

Tense mismatch: the surrounding context is habitual/present, so use 'I want' not 'I wanted.' Also add 'me' after 'takes' for natural phrasing: 'takes me quite a long time.' Replace 'worth doing' with 'worth it.'

× Yes I have. I think a handmade gifts are more personal and meaningful.

✓ Yes, I have. I think handmade gifts are more personal and meaningful.

'A handmade gifts' mixes singular article with plural noun. Remove 'a' or make it singular: 'a handmade gift.' Also add comma after 'Yes.'

× Last year I prepared a birthday card for my girlfriend and I wrote some words on it.

✓ Last year I prepared a birthday card for my girlfriend and wrote some messages on it.

Parallel verbs: when two verbs share the same subject and tense, omit the repeated 'I' for smoother English: 'prepared ... and wrote.' 'Some words' is awkward; 'some messages' or 'a few words' is more natural.

× She enjoyed it very much and I was happy as well.

✓ She enjoyed it very much and I was happy too.

'As well' is grammatically correct but 'too' is more natural in short spoken sentences. Tense 'enjoyed' and 'was' are past, matching 'Last year.' No structural error otherwise.

× Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

✓ Do expensive gifts express your feelings better?

Adverb placement: place 'better' after the verb phrase or at the end: 'express your feelings better.' The original fronted 'better' before verb is nonstandard in this question form.

× Yes they do because expensive gifts can show how much you care about the person.

✓ Yes, they do, because expensive gifts can show how much you care about a person.

Add commas for clarity. 'The person' is awkward; use 'a person' or 'that person.' Tense and verb agreement are correct.

× But I think Gibbs should not be evaluated by their prices.

✓ But I think gifts should not be evaluated by their prices.

'Gibbs' is a misspelling of 'gifts.' This is a word-choice/spelling error; replace with 'gifts.' The structure 'should not be evaluated by their prices' is acceptable.

× A good gift can be cheap but meaningful and thoughtful as well.

✓ A good gift can be cheap but meaningful and thoughtful as well.

Sentence is acceptable. No article change needed; included here to confirm correctness.