Gifts— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答要更自然，避免重复句首和冗长表达，使用一到两句点明观点，再用一两句具体补充理由或例子。注意连词使用，避免连续用 because 开头句子。可以把“establish a rapport”和“ask for help”结合成更贴切的社交目的表述。

예시: Yes, I think I'm quite good at giving gifts because my parents taught me how to choose them thoughtfully. For example, I try to pick items that match the recipient's hobbies or needs, which helps build good relationships and shows I care.

제안: 表达要更简洁、具体，注意语法（articles 和单复数），并用一两个具体节日举例说明。避免模糊表达如 “demonstrate your happiness to the future”。

예시: I usually give gifts on major occasions, such as Chinese New Year or Mid-Autumn Festival. During these times I send food or small presents to family and friends to celebrate together.

제안: 回答要更自然，用更地道的短语（budget, durability, suitability）。把细节具体化，说明如何在预算与质量之间平衡，以及大小如何影响实用性。避免直译式表达如 'the money is the most primary factor'。

예시: I usually consider my budget first, then the item's quality and whether it's practical for the recipient. For example, if I'm short on money I'll choose something affordable but well-made, like a useful accessory rather than a large, expensive item.

제안: 句子时态和表达不自然，时间点应说 'about three months ago'，不要用冗余短语如 'during that time'。描述手工礼物时给出具体是什么，并说明朋友的反应更清楚，如 'he was very happy and thanked me'。

예시: Yes, about three months ago I made a small photo album for my friend Xu Zihan. He was very pleased and kept telling me how much he appreciated the thoughtful gift.

제안: 观点可以更清晰，用更准确的词汇表达（e.g. depend on the person, relationship and occasion）。避免语法错误和不自然短语如 'friendly ship' 或 'more noticed at the emotions'。给出一到两个具体例子支持观点。

예시: It depends on the person and the occasion. For example, for a close friend who values thoughtfulness, a handmade gift can mean more, while for a professional celebration an expensive, high-quality item might be more appropriate.

× Yes, I am, because my parents usually teach me about how to do this kind of thing.

✓ Yes, I am, because my parents usually teach me how to do these kinds of things.

句子中出现多余或不自然的结构“about how to do this kind of thing”。应直接使用“teach me how to...”。此外“this kind of thing”与后文泛指的习惯搭配更自然为复数“these kinds of things”。建议删去“about”并调整单复数，使表达更地道。

× Because doing this kind of thing is not only beneficial for you to establish a rapport between you and the others, but also can make it easier for you to ask for help.

✓ Doing these kinds of things is not only beneficial for establishing rapport between you and others, but also makes it easier for you to ask for help.

句首不宜以从句独立成句，改为主句。短语“beneficial for you to establish a rapport between you and the others”结构笨拙，应改为“beneficial for establishing rapport between you and others”。另外并列部分应保持结构一致，使用“makes”而非“can make”，保持并列动词形式一致。将“this kind of thing”改为复数更自然。

× I usually give the gifts to the others during the significant festivals.

✓ I usually give gifts to others during significant festivals.

定冠词“the”在这里不必要且不自然，应省略。名词“gifts”和“others”不需要定冠词或不定冠词。此外“significant festivals”不用加“the”。建议去掉多余冠词，简化表达。

× For instance, the traditional Chinese festival is an example, since during that time, giving somebody a gifts is a splendid approach to demonstrate your happiness to the future.

✓ For instance, traditional Chinese festivals are an example, since during those times giving somebody a gift is a good way to show your happiness.

原句冗余重复（“is an example”与前句重复），且时态与数不一致。将“the traditional Chinese festival”改为复数“traditional Chinese festivals”，并把“during that time”改为与复数一致的“during those times”。“a gifts”应为单数“a gift”。“demonstrate your happiness to the future”不自然，改为“show your happiness”。建议简化并修正数的一致性和固定搭配。

× I really consider the prices, quality and the size.

✓ I consider the price, quality, and size.

名词前多余冠词“the”和复数形式“prices”不自然，通常以整体考虑时用不可数或单数“price”。并且“really”在此处冗余可删。建议使用并列名词短语，去掉多余冠词。

× For instance, the money is the most primary factor that I should consider since it could determine the affordability of me.

✓ For instance, money is the primary factor I should consider since it determines my affordability.

“the money”过于具体，改为泛指“money”。“the most primary”重复冗余，应用“primary”。“determine the affordability of me”不符合英语习惯，改为“determines my affordability”。同时将情态动词“could”换为简单现在时以匹配一般事实陈述。

× Besides, the quality is also significant as it could determine the other's emotions directly.

✓ Besides, quality is also important because it can directly affect the recipient's feelings.

“the quality”与上下文可简化为“quality”。“could”可改为“can”或“may”，此处用“can”较合适。“the other's emotions”表达不自然，应改为“the recipient's feelings”或“others' feelings”。另外“determine...emotions”搭配不当，改为“affect...feelings”。

× Yes, I used to. That happened around the three months ago.

✓ Yes, I did. That happened about three months ago.

“used to”表示过去常做某事，但单次事件更自然用“did”。“around the three months ago”中同时使用“around”和“ago”以及“the”都是错误，应改为“about three months ago”。建议用“about + 时间 + ago”或“around + 时间”之一。

× During that time, I gave a handcrafted gift, which was made by me to one of my best friends Xu Zihan, and he felt extremely joyful and expressed the guarantee to me.

✓ At that time, I gave a handcrafted gift that I made to one of my best friends, Xu Zihan, and he felt extremely happy and expressed his gratitude to me.

“during that time”用于一段期间，单次事件用“At that time”。“which was made by me”冗长，可改为“that I made”。姓名前应有逗号分隔。“expressed the guarantee to me”是错误搭配，应为“expressed his gratitude to me”。此外“joyful”在此语境不如“happy”自然。

× That depends on the circumstances.

✓ That depends on the circumstances.

该句语法正确，无需修改。仅确认为正确句子。

× On the one hand, if your friends lack the money in comparison with your friendly ship, the more expensive gifts are the better choice.

✓ On the one hand, if your friends have less money compared to you, more expensive gifts may be a better choice.

原句中“lack the money in comparison with your friendly ship”存在拼写与用法错误：“friendly ship”应为“friendship”但上下文应指“you”。改为“have less money compared to you”。“the more expensive gifts are the better choice”中定冠词和比较结构不当，改为“more expensive gifts may be a better choice”。

× By contrast, if your friends are more noticed at the emotions, the more handmade gifts are better.

✓ By contrast, if your friends care more about emotions, handmade gifts are a better choice.

“are more noticed at the emotions”不符合英语表达，应改为“care more about emotions”或“value emotions more”。“the more handmade gifts are better”结构错误，应为“handmade gifts are a better choice”。同时删除多余定冠词并调整语序使语义清晰。