Gifts— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a direct, clear topic sentence and avoid repetition and unclear time references. Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences. Use correct tense and simple grammar to describe ability and past habits. For example, say whether you are good at giving gifts now, then briefly mention past behaviour with clear time phrasing.

예시: No, I'm not very good at giving gifts. When I was 16, I often made handmade presents for people I cared about. However, I sometimes struggled to choose the right gift for others.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence stating typical occasions, then add one or two specific details. Use linking words (for example, "for close friends" or "for others") to make the answer coherent. Avoid long, repetitive clauses and correct basic grammar (plural/singular, articles).

예시: I usually give gifts on birthdays and special occasions. For my closest friends I try to make or choose a personal gift, but for acquaintances I often buy something practical or give money so they can buy what they want.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence about the main consideration, then give specific reasons and link them logically. Use correct question/statement forms when reporting what you ask others. Avoid vague words and filler sounds. Aim for two to three coherent sentences.

예시: I mainly consider how useful the gift will be to the person. I usually ask them what they need or prefer so I don't buy something they won't use, because that would feel like a waste and make me unhappy.

제안: Give a concise, clearly structured answer: state that you have given handmade gifts, then describe one example with specific details (who, what, why, outcome). Avoid confusing or unrelated phrases and practice past-tense correctness.

예시: Yes, I have given handmade gifts. For example, I made a small scrapbook for my best friend while she was recovering from an illness, and she was very touched and happy to receive it.

제안: Answer directly whether you agree, then justify with one or two clear reasons and a short example. Use comparative language correctly and avoid ambiguous phrases like "that time". Keep sentences clear and logical.

예시: I don't think expensive gifts always express feelings better. What matters more is the thought behind the gift; for example, a handmade present can feel more personal and meaningful than a costly item.

× Umm absolutely not. Umm in the past when I was the 16th just one years ago, I was a girl that who usually do hand did handmade gift and give it to my boyfriend's old boyfriend's.

✓ Umm, absolutely not. Umm, in the past, when I was 16, just one year ago, I was a girl who usually made handmade gifts and gave them to my boyfriend.

The sentence has multiple past tense errors and incorrect forms. Use 'was' for age (past) and 'made' and 'gave' as past tense verbs instead of 'do' and 'did'. Remove redundant words ('the' before age, 'that who', 'old boyfriends') and correct object reference ('gave them to my boyfriend'). Suggestion: simplify and use consistent past tense for completed actions.

× Maybe in their birthday, but not all the people who I know, I will do a handmade gift for them in the birthday, like a birthday gift.

✓ Maybe on their birthday, but not for everyone I know; I will make a handmade gift for only my best friends on their birthdays.

Use 'on' with 'birthday' not 'in'. 'Not all the people who I know' is awkward; use 'not for everyone I know'. 'Do a handmade gift' is incorrect; use 'make a handmade gift'. Keep plural agreement and concise phrasing.

× Just my best friend and the other people, I will buy something that they want. I just give them the money for them to buy everything they want.

✓ For my best friend and other people, I will buy something they want. Sometimes I just give them money so they can buy what they want.

Avoid redundant pronouns ('for them to buy everything they want') and use 'so they can' for purpose. 'The other people' should be 'other people'. Keep pronoun references clear and concise.

× I will depend on its usefulness because, uh, I will ask them what do they need and do they like that gift when I give it to them Because maybe I will buy something that they don't like and they don't use it and it's mean. It's make me feel unhappy and ensure.

✓ I will depend on its usefulness; I will ask them what they need and whether they will like the gift when I give it to them. If I buy something they don't like and don't use, it makes me feel unhappy and unsure.

Questions embedded in statements should use indirect question word order ('ask them what they need' not 'ask them what do they need'). Use 'whether' for choice. Use correct verb forms: 'makes' not 'make', 'unsure' not 'ensure'. Avoid incorrect gerund usages and fragmentary clauses.

× Absolutely yes, I have, uh a best friend that they come appraised to cur a severe illness and I believe that when a people who, uh fall 100 paper store, uh and the the people you give to maybe have uh been happy and.

✓ Absolutely yes, I have. A best friend of mine recovered from a severe illness, and I believe that when someone receives a handmade gift, they may be happy.

The original is fragmented and contains many incorrect words ('appraised to cur', 'fall 100 paper store'). Reconstruct the meaning: use 'recovered from a severe illness' and a clear general statement 'when someone receives a handmade gift, they may be happy'. Ensure complete clauses and correct vocabulary.

× I think it depends on that time, what I like and what I want to buy. If I have a chance to have that and maybe not the expensive gift not really make me very happy because I think the handmade gift may be more you.

✓ I think it depends on the situation and what I like and want to buy. If I have the chance to get it, an expensive gift does not necessarily make me very happy because I think a handmade gift may be more meaningful.

Use present tense consistently ('depends', 'does not make'). Correct subject-verb agreement ('gift does not make me'). Replace unclear phrases ('may be more you') with 'more meaningful'. Clarify conditional expression 'if I have the chance'.