Gifts— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one or two concise, specific examples. Avoid redundancy and minor grammatical errors (e.g., plural/singular agreement). Use linking words like “for example” or “for instance” correctly and keep to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I think I am good at giving gifts because my friends and family usually appreciate what I choose. For example, I often give a bouquet of flowers or write a handwritten letter, which people find thoughtful and personal. These simple presents tend to make recipients very happy.

제안: Give a direct opening sentence and then list typical occasions with proper grammar and linking words. Avoid filler words and the repeated conjunction “or and.” Be specific about occasions (e.g., birthdays, graduations, promotions) and keep answers to a few clear sentences.

예시: I usually give gifts for special occasions. For example, I give presents at birthday parties and when friends celebrate big news like a graduation or a job promotion.

제안: Answer directly then explain with concrete, relevant reasons. Correct vocabulary and collocations (e.g., “other people’s preferences,” “feel seen and loved”) and avoid unclear words like “cured.” Use linking words such as “because” to connect reason and effect, but keep it concise and natural.

예시: I consider the other person’s preferences when choosing a gift because it shows I understand them. For instance, I pick items that match their hobbies or favorite colors so the gift feels personal and makes them feel appreciated and loved.

제안: Start with a brief direct answer, then describe one clear example with correct tense and natural expressions. Avoid exaggerated or awkward phrases like “drool with the flower forever.” Use linking words such as “for example” or “for instance,” and keep it within 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I often make handmade gifts because I enjoy crafts. For example, I once made paper flower bouquets for several friends, and they appreciated the time and effort I put into them.

제안: Start with a clear opinion, then give 1–2 reasons with brief examples. Avoid awkward phrasing (“flexing the money,” “every expenses”); use natural collocations like “show off wealth” or “spending a lot.” Keep sentences concise and coherent with linking words like “because” and “for example.”

예시: No, I don’t think expensive gifts express feelings better because thoughtfulness matters more than cost. For example, a small handmade present that shows you know the person can be more meaningful than an expensive item bought without personal thought.

× I would say that because my friends and my families tend to like the gifts that I give them, and then, for example, a bouquet of flower or a handwritten letter is enough to make them happy.

✓ I would say that because my friends and my family tend to like the gifts that I give them, and, for example, a bouquet of flowers or a handwritten letter is enough to make them happy.

Use 'family' as an uncountable or collective noun in this context, not 'families'. 'Bouquet of flowers' requires the plural 'flowers' since a bouquet contains multiple flowers. Also improve comma placement for clarity.

× I usually provide gifts when someone is throwing a birthday party or and celebration of a very exciting news.

✓ I usually give gifts when someone is throwing a birthday party or celebrating some very exciting news.

Replace awkward 'provide gifts' with the more natural verb 'give gifts'. Remove redundant 'and'. Use a gerund 'celebrating' after 'or' to parallel 'throwing', and 'news' is uncountable so use 'some very exciting news' not 'a very exciting news'.

× I consider the liking of other peoples when I buy them gift because I think it makes them feel seen and it genuinely makes them feel like they are cured and loved.

✓ I consider other people's likes when I buy them a gift because I think it makes them feel seen and genuinely makes them feel cared for and loved.

Use the singular possessive 'other people's' and the noun 'likes' (or 'preferences'). 'Buy them a gift' needs the article 'a'. 'Cured' is incorrect; the intended word is 'cared for'. Also streamline 'it genuinely makes them feel' to avoid repetition.

× Yes, a lot, because I'm a very crafty person and I love to make handmade things. So for example, I would make a bouquet of flowers with papers and then I would just give them to my friends and they would love it and they will drool with the flower forever.

✓ Yes, a lot, because I'm a very crafty person and I love making handmade things. For example, I make bouquets of paper flowers and give them to my friends; they love them and treasure the flowers for a long time.

Use 'love making' rather than 'love to make' for naturalness. 'Bouquet of flowers with papers' is awkward: 'paper flowers' or 'bouquets of paper flowers' is correct. Maintain consistent present tense ('make' and 'give'). Use 'them' to refer back to 'bouquets', not singular 'it'. Replace colloquial 'drool with the flower forever' with 'treasure the flowers for a long time' to convey intended meaning.

× I don't think expensive gifts are more worth it than the cheap and handmade gifts because gifts are meant to be given from the heart, not by just flexing the money and showering every gift every expenses you want.

✓ I don't think expensive gifts are more valuable than cheap or handmade gifts because gifts are meant to be given from the heart, not by flexing money or showering gifts with unnecessary spending.

Use 'more valuable than' instead of 'more worth it than'. Use 'cheap or handmade gifts' (parallel structure). Remove 'just' and 'the' before 'money'. 'Showering every gift every expenses you want' is ungrammatical; rephrase as 'showering gifts with unnecessary spending' to express the idea clearly.