Gifts— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct with a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitations and unclear phrases, and give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Use natural expressions (e.g. ‘awkward’ instead of unclear words) and limit to 2–4 sentences.

예시: I'm not very good at giving gifts. I often feel awkward and shy in social situations, so I struggle to choose or present gifts confidently. Because of this, I usually ask a close friend for advice before buying something.

제안: Start with a clear time expression, avoid repetition, and provide a specific example with linking words to show reasons or feelings. Keep sentences concise and correct grammar (verb agreement, word choice).

예시: I usually give gifts on special occasions, such as birthday parties or celebrations hosted by close friends. For example, when my best friend has a birthday party, I bring a small present because it feels like an important way to show appreciation.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence stating what you consider, avoid contradicting statements, and provide specific factors (recipient's interests, budget, usefulness) with linking words. Reduce filler words and repetition.

예시: I usually consider the recipient's interests and my budget when choosing a gift. For instance, if they like cooking, I might buy a useful kitchen gadget, and if I'm short on money I choose something thoughtful but inexpensive.

제안: Answer directly, then give a brief reason and a contrasting detail if relevant. Avoid harsh language like 'waste of time'; instead explain practicality or preference. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: No, I haven't given handmade gifts. I prefer to buy something because I think store-bought presents are more useful and save time, although I appreciate handmade items when others make them.

제안: Be clear and grammatical: state your opinion, give a specific example with linking words and reflect on the result. Correct tense and word order, and avoid long unclear phrases. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: No, I don't think expensive gifts always express feelings. For example, I once bought an expensive bicycle for a friend, but he said he didn't like it, which showed that thoughtfulness matters more than price.

× No really, I'm not good at uh, giving gifts at all because I'm too Angel warded and sorry to chat with each other with my friends.

✓ No, really. I'm not good at giving gifts at all because I'm too awkward and shy to chat with my friends.

The student used 'Angel warded' and 'sorry' incorrectly; these are incorrect word choices (adjectives). Replace with appropriate adjectives 'awkward' and 'shy' to convey the intended meaning. Also remove redundant 'each other' and adjust word order for natural English. Suggestion: learn correct adjective vocabulary and collocations (e.g., 'awkward to do something', 'shy to chat').

× Umm, it's quite awkward and uh, support for me to do so, Especially uh, I have to chat or socialize with others.

✓ Umm, it's quite awkward and uncomfortable for me to do so, especially because I have to chat and socialize with others.

Original sentence has incorrect word choice ('support') and poor structure (comma splice, wrong capitalization). Replace 'support' with 'uncomfortable' and join clauses properly using 'because' and lowercase 'especially'. Suggestion: practice linking reasons with 'because' and use appropriate adjectives to describe feelings.

× I always give gifts to others, especially when my best friend have held a party for others.

✓ I always give gifts to others, especially when my best friend has held a party for them.

The verb 'have held' does not agree with singular subject 'my best friend'; use 'has held'. Also 'for others' is vague; 'for them' or 'for someone' is clearer. Suggestion: match singular subjects with singular verbs ('he/she has') and use consistent pronouns.

× So I have to go and give a gift to him and it's quite amusing and entertaining to do so by the consequence of friendship.

✓ So I have to go and give him a gift, and it's quite amusing and entertaining because of our friendship.

Original uses awkward phrase 'give a gift to him' (less natural than 'give him a gift') and strange prepositional phrase 'by the consequence of friendship'. Replace with 'because of our friendship' to show cause. Suggestion: use natural pronoun placement and common causal expressions ('because of', 'due to').

× Actually, I consider nothing when choosing a gift because I'm the person who always makes schedules and plans before purchasing something like gifts.

✓ Actually, I don't consider much when choosing a gift because I'm the kind of person who always makes schedules and plans before purchasing gifts.

'I consider nothing' is unnatural; use 'I don't consider much'. 'I'm the person who' is acceptable but 'the kind of person who' is more natural. Also 'purchasing something like gifts' is redundant; use 'purchasing gifts'. Suggestion: use natural negation patterns and concise noun phrases.

× So I would just plan a gift before choosing it. So I don't uh, consider anything when choosing it.

✓ I usually plan the gift before choosing it, so I don't really consider many options when choosing it.

The student repeats the same idea awkwardly. Improve cohesion by combining sentences and using natural adverb 'really' and 'many options' instead of 'anything'. Suggestion: avoid repetition by merging related ideas and using clearer quantifiers.

× No, I haven't. I'm not that kind of person who always give others a handmade gift because from my standpoint, that's a kind of waste of time.

✓ No, I haven't. I'm not the kind of person who always gives others handmade gifts because, from my standpoint, that's a waste of time.

Subject-verb agreement: 'who always give' should be 'who always gives' because 'who' refers to 'person' (singular). Also 'a handmade gift' made plural 'handmade gifts' fits general statement. 'That's a kind of waste of time' is wordy; 'that's a waste of time' is clearer. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with antecedent and use plural when making general statements.

× Umm, Therefore I always tend to purchase or buy something for them. That's enough in my opinion.

✓ Therefore, I usually buy something for them. That's sufficient in my opinion.

Redundant 'purchase or buy' should be simplified to 'buy'. 'Always tend to' is awkward; 'usually' is more natural. 'That's enough' is colloquial; 'That's sufficient' fits formal speech. Suggestion: prefer concise verb choices and appropriate adverbs for frequency.

× No expensive and luxurious gift can cannot always express better my feelings.

✓ No expensive or luxurious gift can always better express my feelings.

Double negative 'can cannot' is incorrect. Word order 'express better my feelings' is unnatural; place adverb 'better' before verb phrase 'express my feelings'. Use 'or' between 'expensive' and 'luxurious'. Suggestion: avoid double negatives and follow standard adverb placement (verb + object order).

× For instance, once I have given a luxurious and pretty on high scale gift a bicycle to my friends, but he has told me that it's not super before him.

✓ For instance, once I gave a luxurious, high-end gift—a bicycle—to my friend, but he told me that he didn't like it.

Original mixes tenses ('have given' with 'but he has told') and uses incorrect word order ('pretty on high scale gift'). Use simple past 'gave' for a past event. 'My friends' conflicts with singular 'he'; 'my friend' matches 'he'. 'He told me that he didn't like it' is natural. Suggestion: use consistent past tense for completed events, correct noun phrases ('high-end gift'), and ensure pronouns agree in number.