Gifts— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and precise: remove hesitations, correct grammar, and give a clear description of the gift and its effect. Use one topic sentence and one or two supporting details, linking them naturally. For example, state what the gift was, why you chose it, and how the recipient reacted.

예시: Yes, I enjoy giving gifts. Last year I bought my wife a new Samsung smartphone because she needed a better camera for her photos, and she was really happy and appreciative.

제안: Avoid repetition and tense errors. Start with a clear topic sentence and then use linking words (for example, or when) to add one specific detail or example. Keep it concise.

예시: I usually give gifts when friends help me or on special occasions. For example, I often buy a small thank-you present after someone helps me move or on birthdays.

제안: Reduce fillers and be more specific: explain why gender and age matter and give examples of how the gift changes. Use linking words like firstly and secondly to organize your answer.

예시: I consider two main factors. Firstly, the recipient's gender, because men and women often prefer different styles; secondly, their age, since younger people may like trendy items while older people prefer practical gifts.

제안: Answer directly and expand briefly with a linked example. Correct grammar and use one or two concise sentences: state you haven't made one and mention the handmade gift you received and why it was nice.

예시: No, I haven't made a handmade gift because I'm not good at crafts. My wife once made me a handmade card and I appreciated it because it felt personal and thoughtful.

제안: Avoid absolute statements and explain your opinion with balanced reasons. Remove hesitations and improve vocabulary (e.g., remember, meaningful). Provide one reason and a brief counterpoint to sound more natural and thoughtful.

예시: I think expensive gifts can show strong appreciation because they often last longer and feel more special, but I also believe a thoughtful, inexpensive gift can be very meaningful if it suits the recipient.

× In fact, last uh, last year I gave my wife a very nice present.

✓ In fact, last year I gave my wife a very nice present.

Redundant filler words 'uh, last' interrupt the past-tense statement. Remove the repeated 'last' and filler to make a clear past-tense sentence. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary fillers when describing past events.

× It was a new brand. Samsung is 23.

✓ It was a new Samsung phone model, model A23.

Original sentences are fragmented and 'Samsung is 23' is unclear. Combine into one clear noun phrase describing the item. Use 'model A23' or 'Galaxy A23' to specify model. Ensure adjective placement ('new Samsung phone') is correct.

× She like it and she loves me more.

✓ She liked it and loved me more.

Mixes present and past tenses and has subject-verb agreement issue: with past context, use past tense 'liked'. Also unnecessary repetition of subject; 'loved me more' follows past-tense narrative.

× I usually give a gave gifts to my friends when I when they help me with anything or if there is a special occasion then I will give a present in those time.

✓ I usually give gifts to my friends when they help me or on special occasions.

Original contains mixed tenses ('give a gave'), repetition, and awkward phrasing. Simplify: use present habitual 'give', plural 'gifts', remove redundant clauses, and use 'on special occasions' rather than 'in those time.'

× ...or if there is a special occasion then I will give a present in those time.

✓ ...or on special occasions I give a present.

Using 'will' is unnecessary for habitual actions; use present simple 'give'. Also 'in those time' is incorrect preposition and number; use 'on special occasions.'

× Uh, usually I, uh, I will focus on two things.

✓ Usually I focus on two things.

'Will' implies future but the speaker means a habitual present action; use present simple 'focus'. Remove fillers and duplicate 'I' for clarity.

× The first one would be the gender and the second one would be the age.

✓ The first is the recipient's gender and the second is their age.

'Would be' is unnecessary modal; use simple present 'is' for general statements. Clarify 'gender' and 'age' by adding 'recipient's' and replace duplicated structure for natural phrasing.

× So therefore, umm, uh, the, the gender will differ from one to another, while the age it would be different as well.

✓ Therefore, gender preferences differ from person to person, and age matters as well.

Original uses awkward pronouns and redundant fillers. 'From one to another' is less natural than 'from person to person.' Remove 'it would' and use concise parallel structure.

× To be honest, no I haven't because I'm not good at making any gift by hand.

✓ To be honest, no; I haven't because I'm not good at making gifts by hand.

Use plural 'gifts' for general statements (quantifier). Also add appropriate punctuation and remove 'any' which is unnecessary in positive-negative context. 'By hand' is fine.

× However, last time my wife gave to me handmade gift it was really nice.

✓ However, last time my wife gave me a handmade gift, it was really nice.

Correct word order: 'gave me a handmade gift.' Add article 'a' before 'handmade gift' and comma before 'it was really nice.' Maintain past tense consistently.

× Yes, I do think so because uh expensive gift people will usually tend to like it and to memorize it for long long time.

✓ Yes, I do think so because people usually tend to like expensive gifts and remember them for a long time.

Original word order is incorrect ('expensive gift people'). Use plural 'gifts' for generalization. 'Will usually tend to' is redundant—use 'usually tend to' or simply 'usually.' Use 'remember' instead of 'memorize' for natural collocation and 'for a long time.'

× Unlike if it was small or uh the gift would last for couple of days then usually they tend to forget it soon.

✓ If the gift is small or cheap and only lasts a couple of days, people usually forget it quickly.

Use consistent tense ('is' for general statements), correct quantifier 'a couple of days,' and adverb 'quickly' instead of 'soon.' Reorganize sentence to remove 'unlike' misplacement and improve clarity.