Gifts— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, umm), correct grammar (use present simple or present continuous appropriately) and limit to 2–3 supporting sentences. Add a brief reason or example to support your statement.

예시: Yes, I enjoy giving gifts, especially to my wife. For example, on our university anniversary I usually buy her something thoughtful because I want to show my appreciation.

제안: Provide a clear structure: start with a general rule (when you usually give gifts), then give specific examples. Remove fillers and unclear phrases (e.g., “if they got high” is confusing). Use linking words (for example, also) to connect ideas.

예시: I usually give gifts on special occasions. For example, I give a present to my wife on our wedding anniversary and to friends and siblings on their birthdays or when they achieve something.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence listing the main factors, then briefly explain each with one sentence. Avoid repetition and correct word choice (say “budget” instead of “the money I have”). Use linking words like “also” and “because”.

예시: I consider three main things when choosing a gift: the recipient’s gender, age, and my budget. For instance, children need age-appropriate toys, adults may prefer practical or sentimental items, and I always choose something within my budget.

제안: Answer directly and combine sentences smoothly. Correct grammar (use past participle: given) and avoid repetition. When mentioning the received gift, explain briefly why it was meaningful with a linking phrase.

예시: No, I have never given a handmade gift, but my wife once made me a handmade present and I loved it because it was unique and not something you could buy in a shop.

제안: Make a balanced opinion with clear reasoning and avoid repetition. Start with a direct view (yes/no/it depends), then explain why and give a short example. Use linking words like “however” and “for example.”

예시: I think expensive gifts can sometimes show strong feelings, however they are not always necessary. For example, a thoughtful, low-cost gift that meets someone’s needs can be more meaningful than an expensive item.

× Yes I am sometimes if someone was nice to me, especially my wife, then uh in the our uni umm anniversary, I would buy her a very nice gift.

✓ Yes, I sometimes do. If someone is nice to me, especially my wife, then on our university anniversary I buy her a very nice gift.

The sentence mixes tenses and has word order/article errors. Use present simple 'I sometimes do' for habitual action and 'is' to describe a current state (someone is nice). 'In the our uni umm anniversary' is incorrect: use 'on our university anniversary' (preposition and article). Remove filler words and set consistent present-tense habit.

× Well, it depends sometimes, like uh, in my case, uh, in my marriage anniversary, then it would be on the date where when we got married for my friends, uh, or uh, one of my uh, brothers or sisters, then it will be uh, if they got high.

✓ Well, it depends. For example, for my wedding anniversary I give gifts on the date we were married. For my friends or one of my brothers or sisters, I give gifts on their birthdays or when they achieve something important.

The original is unclear and contains tense and structure problems. Break into clear sentences, use past 'we were married' for the past event, and use present simple for habitual actions. Clarify 'if they got high' which is likely intended as 'if they achieve something important' or 'if they get promoted/buy a house'. Provide a clear time reference (birthdays or achievements).

× Well it depends on the gender. So the both genders will have different present. Also we need to consider the age because children will not have the same as adults and also. The the the the money I have.

✓ Well, it depends on gender. Both genders will receive different presents. We also need to consider age because children and adults want different things, and the amount of money I have.

Article and word choice errors: 'the gender' should be 'gender' or 'a person's gender'; 'the both genders' is wrong—use 'both genders'. 'Different present' needs plural 'presents' or 'different gifts'. 'The the the the money I have' should be 'the amount of money I have' or 'my budget'. Use concise nouns and correct articles.

× Well I I haven't give a handmade gift to anyone. However last time I received a gift handmade a gift from my wife.

✓ Well, I haven't given a handmade gift to anyone. However, last time I received a handmade gift from my wife.

Use the past participle 'given' after 'have not' for present perfect tense. Word order and repetition: 'received a gift handmade a gift' should be 'received a handmade gift'. Keep consistent tense and correct verb forms.

× It was nice and I really like it. Because you are not going to see it in any shop.

✓ It was nice and I really liked it because you cannot see it in any shop.

Tense consistency: if speaking about a past event ('It was nice') follow with past 'I really liked it'. 'You are not going to see it in any shop' is unnatural for a general statement; use 'you cannot see it in any shop' or 'you wouldn't find it in any shop'. Also combine sentences to avoid sentence fragments beginning with 'Because'.

× Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

✓ Do expensive gifts express your feelings better?

Question word order is incorrect. Put the adverb 'better' after the verb phrase 'express your feelings' to form a correct comparative question: 'Do X express Y better?'.

× Usually, yes, uh, but this is not always the case because the, the, the gift itself will have the meaning.

✓ Usually, yes, but this is not always the case because the gift itself has meaning.

Avoid unnecessary future marker 'will' when stating a general truth; use present simple 'has meaning'. Remove filler words and duplicate articles.

× If it's, uh, the, the one that I need or, uh, the, the one that I need or, umm, fulfill my needs, then yes.

✓ If it is the one that I need or it fulfills my needs, then yes.

Redundant fragments and mixed forms. Use 'it is' and 'fulfills' in present simple for general statements. Remove repeated phrases and fillers. Ensure subject 'it' matches verbs.