Gifts— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, use a clear topic sentence and avoid repetition. Provide one brief reason and a specific example. Use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: Yes. I enjoy giving gifts because it’s a simple way to show love and appreciation. For example, I usually buy small, thoughtful presents for my cousins’ birthdays, like books or handmade cards, which always make them happy.

제안: Start with a direct topic sentence, be specific about occasions, and avoid vague or exaggerated examples (e.g. cars). Use a linking word to add a detail.

예시: I usually give gifts on birthdays and important occasions such as graduations. For instance, at my sister’s birthday I gave her a handmade photo album to make the day more special.

제안: Answer directly: focus on the recipient’s preferences rather than your own ‘satisfaction’. Give one or two concrete factors you consider and link them logically.

예시: I consider the recipient’s interests and practical needs. For example, if my friend loves cooking I might buy a high-quality cookbook or a useful kitchen tool so they can actually use and enjoy the gift.

제안: Keep the answer natural and concise. Use one topic sentence, then give a specific example of a handmade gift and explain briefly why it mattered.

예시: Yes, I often give handmade gifts because they feel personal. For example, I once made a knitted scarf for a friend, and she appreciated the time and effort I put into it.

제안: Respond clearly and politely, provide a reason and a brief example to support your opinion. Use linking words (however, because) to make it coherent.

예시: No, I don't think expensive gifts express feelings better. Instead, thoughtful gifts or gestures show care; for example, writing a heartfelt letter to a close friend meant more to them than an expensive item.

× Yes, I'm good at giving gifts because it is the one way of showing a love towards our friends, family or cousins.

✓ Yes, I'm good at giving gifts because it is one way of showing love towards our friends, family, or cousins.

Use of articles is incorrect: 'the one way' is too specific; use 'one way'. Also 'a love' is incorrect: 'love' as an uncountable noun does not need 'a'. Add a comma before 'or cousins' for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'one way' and no article before 'love'.

× So I usually give gifts to my cousins, friends, family.

✓ So I usually give gifts to my cousins, friends, and family.

List items should be parallel; include 'and' before the last item (Oxford comma optional). 'family' is a singular collective noun but is acceptable here as a list item. Suggestion: keep parallel structure and add conjunction for clarity.

× I usually give in occasions or birthdays because it is a very special day for them.

✓ I usually give them on special occasions or on birthdays because those days are very special for them.

Wrong preposition: use 'on' with 'occasions' and 'birthdays' when referring to days. Also 'it is a very special day' should agree with plural 'occasions/birthdays' so use 'those days are'. Suggestion: use 'on special occasions' or 'on birthdays' and match plurality.

× We might make a more special by giving a gifts for them like cars or handmade gifts.

✓ We might make it more special by giving gifts to them, like cars or handmade items.

Several article and determiners errors: 'make a more special' is ungrammatical — use 'make it more special'. 'a gifts' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'a'. Use 'to them' not 'for them' in this context, though 'for them' can work; 'handmade gifts' repeated is okay but 'handmade items' sounds natural. Suggestion: ensure pronoun/object agreement and correct article use.

× While giving a gift, I usually consider my satisfaction because if you feel satisfied then only we can give a gift.

✓ While giving a gift, I usually consider my own satisfaction because if I do not feel satisfied, I cannot give a gift properly.

Pronoun inconsistency: sentence switches between 'I' and 'you' and 'we'. Use consistent subject 'I'. Also 'then only we can' is unnatural; rephrase to 'I cannot'. Suggestion: keep the same subject and clarify the condition.

× For someone to make their day special, if it's not satisfying then they can't.

✓ If a gift does not make someone's day special, then it cannot achieve its purpose.

Sentence is fragmented and unclear: 'for someone to make their day special' followed by an unrelated clause. Also 'it's not satisfying' is vague. Recast as a conditional showing cause and effect. Suggestion: write a single clear conditional sentence.

× Satisfaction is very important to give out. Give to someone else.

✓ Satisfaction is very important when giving a gift to someone else.

Fragmented sentences: 'Satisfaction is very important to give out.' and 'Give to someone else.' are awkward and split. Combine into a single coherent sentence and use 'when giving a gift' for context. Suggestion: combine fragments and use appropriate gerund phrase.

× Yes, mostly I used to do handmade gifts for my friends, cousins and all because it satisfies me a lot and even they feel very good and they might feel it is a very effort.

✓ Yes, I mostly used to make handmade gifts for my friends and cousins because it satisfied me a lot, and they felt very happy; they might feel it was a lot of effort.

Tense: 'used to do' is okay for past habit but 'do handmade gifts' is incorrect collocation — use 'make handmade gifts'. Agreement: mix of present and past tenses; align to past ('satisfied', 'felt'). 'it is a very effort' is ungrammatical; use 'it was a lot of effort' or 'it required a lot of effort'. Suggestion: use correct verb collocation, consistent tense, and proper noun phrase for 'a lot of effort'.

× So I like handmade gifts.

✓ So I like handmade gifts.

No grammatical error requiring change; pronoun use is acceptable. Keeping sentence as is.

× Not, not at all. Expensive gifts doesn't make up feelings better.

✓ No, not at all. Expensive gifts don't express feelings any better.

Start with 'No, not at all.' then correct subject-verb agreement: 'gifts' is plural so use 'don't' not 'doesn't'. 'make up feelings better' is awkward; use 'express feelings any better'. Suggestion: use correct auxiliary and choose appropriate verb.

× It depends upon our love, care and courage we have on them.

✓ It depends on the love, care, and concern we have for them.

Preposition choice: use 'depend on' not 'depend upon' (both can work, but 'depend on' is more natural). Use 'for them' rather than 'on them'. 'courage' is the wrong noun here; 'concern' or 'affection' fits better. Suggestion: choose correct preposition and noun that matches meaning.

× It only depends that expensive doesn't even matter over there.

✓ It only depends; expense does not matter there.

Awkward phrasing and article/word choice: 'that expensive doesn't even matter' is ungrammatical. Better: 'expense does not matter there' or 'how expensive the gift is does not matter.' Suggestion: use noun 'expense' or phrase 'how expensive a gift is' to convey meaning clearly.