Gifts— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, avoid repetition, and add a brief reason or example. Use linking words to connect ideas. Limit to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Not really. I often take a long time choosing a present because there are so many options, and I want it to suit the recipient. For example, when my best friend praised a book she liked, I eventually bought a special edition after researching reviews.

제안: Answer directly then mention one or two typical occasions with smooth linking words and correct phrasing. Remove filler words and be slightly more specific.

예시: I usually give gifts on birthdays and major holidays. For instance, I always buy something small for friends on their birthdays and a more meaningful present at Christmas.

제안: Clarify what you mean by “value” and use precise vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific criteria and an example. Avoid unclear phrases.

예시: I consider both the personal meaning and the recipient's needs. For example, I prefer gifts that reflect the person’s hobbies or that are useful, such as a quality sketchbook for a friend who likes drawing.

제안: Make a concise statement, correct grammar, and give a concrete example of a handmade gift and why you make it rarely. Use linking words like because or so.

예시: Yes, I have, but rarely because handmade gifts take a lot of time. For example, I knitted a scarf for my sister last year for her graduation since it was a very special occasion.

제안: Express opinion clearly and explain reasoning with correct grammar. Consider adding a contrast and a brief example to show nuance (e.g., expensive versus thoughtful).

예시: Not necessarily. Expensive gifts can show appreciation, but thoughtful presents often express feelings more genuinely. For example, a handmade album of memories meant more to my friend than an expensive gadget.

× Not actually, I spend many time for choosing a gift for my friend or best best friend because it's so many things that I could choose.

✓ Not really. I spend a lot of time choosing a gift for my friend or best friend because there are so many things I could choose from.

Errors: 'many time' should be 'a lot of time' (count/noncount and correct phrase). 'for choosing' is unnecessary; use gerund 'choosing' after 'spend time'. 'best best friend' is redundant. 'it's so many things' is incorrect plural construction; use 'there are so many things' and 'choose from' is the correct preposition. Suggestion: use 'a lot of time', remove redundancy, use 'there are' for items and 'choose from'.

× I give gifts to others in uh, their birthdays or some special days, especially like Christmas Day holidays.

✓ I give gifts to others on their birthdays or on special days, especially during the Christmas holidays.

Errors: Use 'on' for days ('on their birthdays'). 'Some special days' should be 'special days' and use 'on' as well. 'Especially like' is redundant; use 'especially' or 'like', not both. 'Christmas Day holidays' is unnatural; use 'the Christmas holidays' or 'Christmas Day'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions 'on' for specific days and 'during' for periods, and avoid redundant words.

× I really care about the value of that gift, like money or something special that give ring to the giver.

✓ I really care about the value of the gift, such as money or something special that is meaningful to the recipient.

Errors: 'that gift' can be 'the gift' for clarity. 'like' should be 'such as' for examples. 'something special that give ring to the giver' is ungrammatical and unclear: 'give ring' is wrong verb and 'giver' should be 'recipient' or 'the person receiving it'. Use passive or relative clause: 'that is meaningful to the recipient'. Suggestion: use 'such as', correct relative clause with proper verb and correct noun 'recipient'.

× Yes, of course, but but is really rare because is take it takes many times to do it, so I just make it to some really special one.

✓ Yes, of course, but it's really rare because it takes a lot of time to make, so I only make handmade gifts for really special occasions.

Errors: Missing or incorrect auxiliary 'it's' (it is). 'is take it takes many times' mixes forms; correct is 'it takes a lot of time'. 'Many times' is wrong here; use 'a lot of time'. 'make it to some really special one' is awkward; use 'make handmade gifts for really special occasions'. Suggestion: ensure third-person singular verbs use 'takes' and include needed pronouns/auxiliaries, and choose natural collocations ('a lot of time', 'special occasions').

× Yes, actually I really love the more expensive gift because it makes me feel like I really a special one and have my own value.

✓ Yes, actually I prefer more expensive gifts because they make me feel special and valued.

Errors: 'really love the more expensive gift' is awkward; use 'prefer more expensive gifts'. 'it makes me feel like I really a special one' missing verb and article; 'feel special' is natural. 'have my own value' is unnatural; use 'valued' or 'that I have value'—'valued' is concise. Also number agreement: 'gift' vs 'gifts' and pronoun 'they' matches plural. Suggestion: use natural adjectives/adverbs and correct subject-verb and noun number agreement; prefer 'feel special and valued'.