Websites— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 答えは直接的で内容は伝わりますが、文法ミス（冠詞、複数形、単語選択）、語順の問題、言い換えや具体例の欠如、ためらい語（umm）の使用が見られます。より自然に聞こえるために、冠詞や複数形を正しく使い、短い流暢な文を2〜3文でまとめ、具体的な機能（メッセージ、ストーリー、写真共有）を挙げて説明してください。接続語（for example, because）を適切に使うと論理的になります。

예시: I often visit social media sites like Instagram and messaging apps such as LINE. I use them daily because they make it easy to stay in touch with friends and family. For example, I can send photos, instant messages, and short videos quickly.

제안: 内容はわかりますが、所有表現や語順の誤り（'our my life'）、冗長な言い回し、文の終わりが不自然です。主題文を明確にし、理由を2つまでに絞って具体例を付けて述べてください。接続語（because, so）を正しく使い、文を簡潔に保ちましょう。

예시: My favorite website is Instagram because I can share moments from my life and keep up with friends' updates. For instance, I often check stories to see what my classmates are doing.

제안: 良い構成で変化の例を挙げていますが、文法ミス（'share shared', 冠詞、前置詞）や語選びの改善が必要です。過去と現在の比較を明確にし、リンク語（for example, however, now）を自然に使い、具体的な機能名（stories, reels, short videos）を入れると説得力が増します。

예시: Yes. Instagram has changed a lot: in the past we only shared photos, but now we can post short videos like Reels and Stories. This makes it easier to show daily moments.

제안: 全体の意味は明確ですが、単数・複数の一致、語順、前置詞の誤り（'contact with others'→'contact others'）、語彙の選択がやや不自然です。一般化の表現を簡潔にし、具体的な用途（work communication, group chats, announcements）を一つか二つ挙げると良いです。

예시: In Japan, messaging apps like LINE and Microsoft Teams are very popular because they make it easy to contact people and stay in touch. I use LINE for chatting with friends and Teams for work meetings.

제안: 理由は明確ですが、冗長表現と文法ミス（'whatever I we want'）があります。比較の観点（speed, accessibility, up-to-date）を一つ追加すると説得力が増します。具体例として実際に使う検索方法を述べ、接続語（for example, because）で整えましょう。

예시: I prefer getting information from websites because they are fast and accessible anytime. For example, using search engines I can find answers quickly by typing a few keywords.

제안: 答えはあるが表現が不自然で文法ミスや言いかけ（'and also at.'）があり、理由の説明が簡潔で具体性に欠けます。否定を述べる際は丁寧に理由を2点まで挙げ、感情表現は控えめにすること。'scared'ではなく'related vocabulary'（concerned, worried about）を使い、具体的な懸念（privacy, hacking）を述べてください。

예시: I wouldn't like to have my own website because I'm worried about cybercrime and privacy. For instance, I fear hackers or personal information being exposed.

제안: 良い例（YouTube）を挙げていますが、語法の問題（'others lives', 'visit abroad'冗長）や文の流れの繰り返しがあります。学んだ具体的な内容（language tips, local customs, travel advice）を1〜2点挙げ、接続詞（for example, additionally）で整理すると自然になります。

예시: I've learned about daily life and customs in other countries from YouTube. For example, videos taught me basic greetings and local food etiquette, which helps when I travel.

× I often use SNS site such as Instagram or line or message application because it is very convenient to connect with others image immediately.

✓ I often use SNS sites such as Instagram, Line, or messaging applications because they are very convenient for connecting with others immediately.

'Site' should be plural 'sites' to match 'SNS' and 'such as' list (quantifier/plural agreement). 'Line' is a proper noun and capitalized. 'Message application' is better as 'messaging applications'. Use plural 'they are' to agree with plural subject. 'Connect with others image' is incorrect; use 'connecting with others immediately'. Suggestion: make nouns and verbs agree in number and use natural collocations.

× So umm I use a lot in a daily life.

✓ So, umm, I use them a lot in daily life.

Original sentence lacks an object and has unnecessary article 'a'. The verb 'use' needs an object (them refers to the apps/sites). 'Daily life' does not take 'a'. Suggestion: include the object and remove incorrect article.

× My favorite website is Instagram because it helps me to share our my life and also I can check the updates of my friends constantly so it is convenient for me to keep.

✓ My favorite website is Instagram because it helps me share my life, and I can constantly check my friends' updates, so it is convenient for me to keep in touch.

'Our my life' mixes pronouns; should be 'my life'. 'Helps me to share' is correct but 'help me share' is more natural. 'Check the updates of my friends' should be 'check my friends' updates'. 'Keep' is incomplete; 'keep in touch' is intended. Suggestion: use correct possessive forms and complete phrasal verbs.

× Yes, there are slight changes of Instagram that I use every day.

✓ Yes, there have been slight changes to Instagram, which I use every day.

Use 'have been' for present perfect to indicate changes that occurred over time. 'Changes of Instagram' is incorrect preposition; use 'changes to Instagram'. 'That' can be 'which' to add non-restrictive clause. Suggestion: use correct verb tense and prepositions with 'changes'.

× For example, in the past we only share shared the photo we took.

✓ For example, in the past we only shared the photos we took.

Tense is inconsistent: use past 'shared' for past action. Remove duplicated 'share' and pluralize 'photo' to 'photos' unless only one. Suggestion: keep simple past for past events and avoid duplicate verbs.

× However, now we can share a short video to others as well.

✓ However, now we can share short videos with others as well.

'A short video' can be plural 'short videos' for general ability. Preposition 'to' is wrong; use 'with others'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions and pluralize when speaking generally.

× In Japan, the message application such as Line or Teams are very popular among people because it is very convenient for us to contact with others and keep in touch.

✓ In Japan, messaging applications such as Line or Teams are very popular because they are very convenient for contacting others and keeping in touch.

'The message application' should be 'messaging applications' (plural). Subject-verb agreement: 'applications ... are'. 'Contact with others' is incorrect; use 'contact others'. 'Keep in touch' should be 'keeping in touch' to match gerund structure. Suggestion: match plurality and use correct verb forms after 'convenient for'.

× I use those applications for works and private.

✓ I use those applications for work and private matters.

'Works' is incorrect; use uncountable 'work'. 'Private' needs a noun: 'private matters' or 'personal use'. Suggestion: choose correct noun forms and collocations.

× I prefer getting information from websites because it is really convenient for us to use anytime and anywhere.

✓ I prefer to get information from websites because it is really convenient to use them anytime and anywhere.

Both 'prefer getting' and 'prefer to get' are possible; 'prefer to get' is more common here. 'It is really convenient for us to use anytime and anywhere' is awkward; specify 'to use them'. Suggestion: include object and use natural infinitive phrasing.

× For example, by putting the keywords on the website, we can get the information whatever I we want to know.

✓ For example, by entering keywords on a website, we can get the information we want to know.

Remove accidental 'I'. Use 'entering keywords' or 'typing keywords' and singular 'a website' or 'websites'. 'Whatever we want to know' is wordy; 'we want' suffices. Suggestion: remove stray pronouns and simplify.

× I would not like to have my personal website regardless of whatever I can do or not because I really scared.

✓ I would not like to have my personal website no matter what I can or cannot do because I'm really scared.

'Regardless of whatever I can do or not' is awkward; use 'no matter what I can or cannot do'. 'I really scared' lacks 'am'. Suggestion: use proper modal negation and include auxiliary verb for state verbs.

× I am really scared of the cyber crime and also at.

✓ I am really scared of cybercrime and online threats.

Original ends abruptly 'and also at' is incomplete. 'The cyber crime' should be 'cybercrime' (uncountable). Suggestion: complete the list and use correct noun form.

× From YouTube I learned a lot about others lives in foreign countries.

✓ From YouTube, I learned a lot about other people's lives in foreign countries.

'Others lives' should be 'other people's lives' (possessive). Suggestion: use possessive to show ownership.

× It is very convenient for me when I go abroad and visit abroad.

✓ It is very convenient for me when I travel abroad and visit other countries.

Repeating 'abroad' is redundant and 'go abroad and visit abroad' is incorrect. Use 'travel abroad' and 'visit other countries'. Suggestion: vary vocabulary and avoid repetition.

× In addition, I can be familiar with other cultures.

✓ In addition, I can become familiar with other cultures.

'Be familiar with' is a stative phrase but 'can be familiar' is awkward; 'become familiar with' expresses acquiring familiarity. Suggestion: use 'become' or 'get' to indicate acquisition.