Websites— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more specific and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the sites, avoid fillers, and give 1–2 concise supporting details using linking words (for example, "because" or "and"). Limit to 3–4 sentences.

예시: I often visit Threads and Instagram. I use Threads for short news updates because it aggregates posts from many users, and I use Instagram mainly for photos and lifestyle content. Together they help me stay informed and entertained.

제안: Give one clear reason with specific detail and link ideas. Correct the website name and use linking words like "because" and "so". Keep it concise and natural.

예시: My favourite website is Threads because you can choose topics that interest you and follow experts in those areas. As a result, I see more relevant content and can ignore posts I don't find useful.

제안: Answer directly, give a specific example of a change, and use linking words like "for example" and "so". Avoid hesitation and complete your thought in 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, they change often. For example, Threads recently added a messaging feature, so I can talk privately with friends instead of commenting publicly. These updates make the apps more useful.

제안: Mention 1–2 popular site types and give specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: In my country, social media platforms like Threads and news websites are very popular because you can search keywords to find related information quickly. These sites attract users of different ages, so you can get diverse opinions and updates.

제안: State your preference clearly and give a specific reason and example. Use linking words like "because" and "however" or "when". Keep sentences grammatically accurate and concise.

예시: I prefer both because websites are fast for general information, but when I have a strong interest I consult books for in-depth and reliable details. For instance, I read online articles first and then borrow academic books for deeper study.

제안: Give a direct answer (yes/no) and two clear reasons with linking words. Avoid repetitions and informal fillers. Use precise language for concerns (time, maintenance, privacy).

예시: No, I wouldn't like to have my own website because it would take a lot of time and effort to maintain. I would also worry about managing privacy and negative comments from visitors.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence and give 1–2 specific examples of useful information and how you applied it, using linking words like "for example" and "so". Be concise and reduce hesitation.

예시: Websites have been very helpful for my studies. For example, I found step-by-step guides for essay writing online, so I improved my structure and references. I also watch tutorial videos to learn new software quickly.

× I open, uh, visited stress or Instagram.

✓ I often visit sites like Threads or Instagram.

The original mixes verb forms and misuses pronouns; 'I open, uh, visited' is ungrammatical. Use the present simple 'I often visit' for habitual actions. Also 'stress' seems to be a mispronunciation of 'Threads' (a website/app name). Replace with clear phrasing.

× There's two kinds of websites and, uh, these two applications have a lot of information that can help.

✓ There are two kinds of websites, and both applications have a lot of helpful information.

Use plural verb 'are' with plural subject 'two kinds' (subject-verb agreement). 'There's' is singular contraction. Also reworded for clarity and natural adjective order.

× I too know a lot of, uh, different news.

✓ I also follow a lot of different news.

'I too know a lot of different news' is awkward; 'news' is uncountable and we 'follow' or 'read' news. Use 'also' instead of 'too' for smoother placement.

× I would say threats because, uh, only dress you can choose the topic that you're interested and you can observe these aspects information and also you can avoid observing the information that you didn't interested.

✓ I would say Threads, because on Threads you can choose topics that interest you, view related information, and ignore information that doesn't interest you.

Many pronoun and vocabulary errors: 'threats' -> 'Threads'; 'only dress' unclear; 'you're interested' should be 'interest you'; 'observe these aspects information' is ungrammatical — use 'view related information'; 'you didn't interested' should be 'doesn't interest you'. Correct tense and pronoun forms for clarity.

× Umm, I will say yes, because uh, the application need to update uh umm sometimes and the function might be useful.

✓ Yes, because the applications need to be updated sometimes and the new functions can be useful.

'I will say yes' is awkward for answering a present question; simple 'Yes' suffices. 'the application need' has subject-verb agreement error—'applications need.' Passive 'need to be updated' is more natural. 'function might be useful' -> 'new functions can be useful' clarifies modal use.

× Also at the first phrase that that didn't have the message function, but later it.

✓ At first, the app did not have a messaging function, but it was added later.

Original sentence fragments and repetition ('that that') create structure errors. Use past tense 'did not have' for earlier state and complete the clause 'it was added later' to be grammatical.

× From our perspective, I would say thread because this, uh, web, this application is very useful that you can, uh, type some keywords and you can find a lot of related information.

✓ From our perspective, I would say Threads, because this app is very useful: you can type keywords and find a lot of related information.

Fix app name 'Threads' and streamline pronouns and articles. Remove redundant 'this web, this application' and use concise phrasing. 'type some keywords' -> 'type keywords' is more natural.

× And also, umm, in this application, there are different generations people, you can know a lot of different things.

✓ Also, many people from different generations use the app, so you can learn about many different things.

'different generations people' is incorrect word order; use 'people from different generations.' 'you can know' is awkward—use 'you can learn'.

× From a perspective I would say I prefer both sides because I observe information from the website and if I have something that I want to know, have strong strongly interest and I will try to find some books that is related to this topic.

✓ From my perspective, I prefer both because I get information from websites, and if I have a strong interest in something, I try to find books related to the topic.

Use correct possessive 'my perspective.' 'both sides' -> 'both' is sufficient. 'observe information' -> 'get information.' 'have strong strongly interest' is ungrammatical; use 'have a strong interest in.' 'books that is related' should be 'books related to the topic' (plural agreement and smoother phrasing).

× ABS absolutely I would not like to do these things because I think it's very trouble.

✓ Actually, I would not like to do that, because I think it would be very troublesome.

'ABS absolutely' unclear; likely 'actually.' 'do these things' -> 'do that' (creating a website). 'it's very trouble' is incorrect adjective usage; use 'very troublesome' or 'a lot of trouble'.

× I need to waste my time, energy or something abilities to operate this website and I I may worry about the views or even something.

✓ It would waste my time and energy to run a website, and I might worry about page views or other issues.

'I need to waste' should be conditional 'It would waste.' 'something abilities' is ungrammatical—remove. 'views' likely 'page views.' Simplify 'or even something' to 'or other issues'.

× I will say it's very, very helpful because if something that I want to know or I need some methods will try to use, uh, the websites that's to find something is very helpful for me and also have some useful suggestions there.

✓ It's very helpful because when I want to know something or need a method, I try to use websites to find information, and they often have useful suggestions.

Original mixes tenses and has fragmented clauses. Use present simple 'It's very helpful' for general truths. Rephrase 'if something that I want to know' to 'when I want to know something.' Remove ungrammatical 'the websites that's to find something' and replace with 'I use websites to find information.'