Websites— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating the kinds of websites, then give 1–2 specific supporting examples with brief reasons. Avoid repetition and filler words. Use linking words (for example, and, also) to make the answer coherent.

예시: I often visit cooking websites and social media sites. For example, I use recipe blogs to find new dishes and Instagram and Facebook to stay connected with friends and family.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence naming one favourite site, then explain why. Keep to 2–3 sentences and include a specific reason (e.g., features, how it helps you). Avoid repeating words and unclear phrases.

예시: My favourite type of website is cooking blogs because they give step-by-step recipes and helpful tips. I also use English learning sites to practice vocabulary and prepare for exams.

제안: Answer directly: say whether there have been changes, then list 1–2 clear examples (appearance, features) and explain briefly how they affect users. Use simple correct grammar and linking words such as "for example" or "because".

예시: Yes, many websites have changed recently. For example, their design is cleaner and they add new features like personalized recommendations, which make it easier for users to find content.

제안: Start with a clear statement about popular websites, then give specific categories and reasons (e.g., social media for communication, design tools for content creation). Use correct plural/singular forms and avoid repetition.

예시: Social media sites like Instagram and Facebook are the most popular because people use them to share photos and videos and stay in touch. Also, design tools like Canva are widely used for making posts and presentations.

제안: Give a clear preference and justify it with 1–2 specific reasons and an example. Avoid repeating words and unclear phrases. Use linking words such as "because" and "for example".

예시: I prefer getting information from websites because they are quick and updated. For example, I use online English courses and articles to practice for tests and to find study materials easily.

제안: Answer directly and clearly state reason(s). Use 2–3 sentences: one topic sentence and one supporting reason. Mention specifics like time, cost, or skills to make it concrete.

예시: I would not like to have my own website because it requires a lot of time to update and maintain. I am currently too busy to manage content and learn the technical skills needed.

제안: Provide one clear example of a skill or useful information learned from websites and explain how it helped you. Keep to 2–3 concise sentences and avoid vague phrasing. Use linking words like "for example" and "as a result".

예시: Websites have helped me learn cooking techniques and save time with online orders. For example, I learned how to make several recipes from cooking blogs, which made meal preparation faster and more enjoyable.

× Actually, I did my I visited more things and more kinds of the website such as the the website of the cooking on this website of the of the of the social media such as the Instagram and Facebook to still keep keep connected with my friends and family and still under and some of them broke.

✓ Actually, I visit many different kinds of websites, such as cooking websites and social media platforms like Instagram and Facebook to stay connected with my friends and family; some of them are still under maintenance or broken.

The original sentence has multiple structure issues: redundant words, incorrect tense, and unclear phrases. I changed 'did my I visited' to 'I visit' to use present simple for habitual action, corrected plural forms ('many different kinds of websites'), specified 'cooking websites' and 'social media platforms', used 'to stay connected' (correct infinitive purpose), and clarified 'some of them are still under maintenance or broken.' Suggestion: keep sentences concise, use present simple for routines, ensure subject-verb clarity and remove repeated words.

× Actually, I like my favorite websites such as cooking website and the website of the social media such as the website and Instagram and Facebook to connect with my friend and family and and the programs of the of the English to improve myself and prepare to test.

✓ Actually, I like my favorite websites such as cooking websites and social media sites like Instagram and Facebook to connect with my friends and family, and English learning programs to improve myself and prepare for tests.

Errors include article misuse and pluralization: 'cooking website' should be plural 'cooking websites' for general preference; 'connect with my friend and family' should be 'friends and family' plural. 'Prepare to test' corrected to 'prepare for tests'. Remove redundant words. Suggestion: use plural nouns when speaking generally and use correct preposition 'prepare for'.

× And yes there is a many difference of the changing other websites such as a design or two brings people to brings people help herself and their to to add more factors on them website to different and improving herself and developed any has website.

✓ Yes, there are many changes to the websites I visit, such as redesigns that make them more attractive and add features to improve and develop the sites.

Original uses incorrect 'there is a many difference' — should be 'there are many changes' (subject-verb agreement and plural). Removed awkward and incorrect pronouns ('herself', 'their') and clarified purpose of changes. Suggestion: use 'there are' for plural subjects, 'changes' instead of 'difference' when multiple alterations, and simplify to clear verbs like 'make', 'add', 'improve'.

× I think the more popular website on my country is it's a social media such as the website such as the Instagram, Facebook to connect all the people and to share the videos and the picture and connect with with which with each other and the all of the programs such as the the Canva to different to.

✓ I think the most popular websites in my country are social media platforms like Instagram and Facebook for connecting people and sharing videos and pictures, and other programs like Canva for creating content.

Problems: incorrect preposition 'on my country' should be 'in my country'; incorrect superlative 'more popular' changed to 'most popular' when indicating top popularity; plural agreement 'websites...are'. Also corrected 'the picture' to 'pictures' and clarified 'Canva for creating content.' Suggestion: use 'in' for countries, use 'most' for superlative, and match singular/plural consistently.

× I think the website is very easy to me to get all the information I have to need all the information and such as the study, study and learning the English on the program on the English to test to to prepare my testing on such as the islands and other type.

✓ I think websites make it very easy for me to get all the information I need, such as study materials and English-learning programs to prepare for tests like IELTS and other types of exams.

Errors include awkward phrase 'easy to me to get': corrected to 'easy for me to get'. Removed redundancies and fixed verb forms: 'I have to need' -> 'I need'. 'Prepare my testing' -> 'prepare for tests'. Clarified 'islands' to 'IELTS' assuming intended exam. Suggestion: use 'for me' after 'easy', avoid repeating words, and use correct preposition 'prepare for'.

× Actually I don't like to have a website because it is need more time to updating. The to updating the updating is. Therefore I don't have any time to to get a website and developed it.

✓ Actually I wouldn't like to have my own website because it needs a lot of time to update. Therefore I don't have time to create and develop a website.

Errors: modal and tense mix-ups. 'I don't like to have' improved to 'I wouldn't like to have' for preference, though 'I don't want' is acceptable; corrected 'it is need' to 'it needs' (subject-verb), 'to updating' to 'to update' or 'to be updated'. Removed redundancy. Suggestion: use 'needs' with singular subject, use infinitive 'to update', and use 'have time to' + base verb.

× Actually there is there are more difference of the website it to ease my life, such as the website of the of the cooking to ordering me or more more different means and the social media such as the website of Instagram, Facebook to connect it with my friend and family, to share a photo, art, watching videos and the more of more.

✓ Actually there are many different websites that make my life easier, such as cooking sites for ordering food and social media like Instagram and Facebook to connect with my friends and family, share photos and art, and watch videos.

Issues: mixed 'there is there are' and 'more difference' should be 'many different websites' and 'make my life easier'. Corrected 'to ordering me' to 'for ordering food' and 'connect it with my friend' to 'connect with my friends'. Removed repetitions. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement ('there are many'), use plural nouns for general statements, and keep verbs in base form after 'to'.