Websites— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문장이 자연스럽지 않고 어휘 선택과 문법 오류가 많습니다. 먼저 간단하고 직접적인 주제 문장으로 시작하세요. 그 다음에 연결어(for example, and, also)를 사용해 방문하는 사이트 유형을 구체적으로 나열하고 이유를 간단히 덧붙이세요. 어색한 표현(offer busy kind of, cyber shopping apps)을 교정하고 'delivery food apps' 대신 'food delivery apps'처럼 자연스러운 표현을 사용하세요.

예시: I often visit online shopping websites and food delivery apps. For example, I use shopping sites to buy clothes and electronics, and I use delivery apps when I want food delivered to my home.

제안: 중복 표현과 문법 오류가 있고 이유 전달이 불분명합니다. 주제 문장을 명확히 하고 이유는 간결한 이유문장으로 말하세요. 시간 표현과 가능/불가능 상황은 정확히 표현하세요. 'quick delivery'와 같은 표현을 포함하고, 문장 연결을 위해 'because' 뒤에 완전한 절을 제시하세요.

예시: My favourite website is an online shopping site because it offers very fast delivery. For instance, when I am too busy to go out, I can order what I need and receive it within a day.

제안: 답변이 모호하고 비문이 많습니다. 직접적으로 'No, not really'로 시작한 뒤 이유를 명확히 설명하세요. 변화가 없는 이유(습관, 만족 등)를 구체적으로 덧붙이면 좋습니다. 연결어(so, because, therefore)를 정확하게 사용하세요.

예시: Not really. I usually stick to the same websites because they are convenient and meet my needs, so I don't feel the need to try new ones.

제안: 뜻은 전달되지만 어휘와 문장 구조가 부정확합니다. 'server contact website' 같은 표현은 불명확하니 'social networking sites'로 바꾸세요. 이유를 말할 때 'because they are quick' 대신 구체적으로 어떤 점이 빠른지(loading, sharing) 설명하면 더 좋습니다.

예시: Social networking sites are very popular in my country. For example, Instagram is widely used because it makes sharing photos and messages very quick and easy.

제안: 문법과 어휘 오류가 많아 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 선호를 명확히 밝히고 이유를 간결하고 논리적으로 설명하세요. 'websites are faster and more convenient' 같은 표현을 사용하고, 불필요한 단어는 제거하세요.

예시: I prefer getting information from websites because they are faster and easier to access. For quick facts or recent news, I can find information online instantly, while books take more time to find and read.

제안: 의도는 이해되지만 매우 어색한 표현과 반복이 있습니다. 소유 의사 표현은 간단히 하고 목적(what kind of website, why)을 구체적으로 설명하세요. 'planner website'와 관련된 기능(share schedules, customize)도 언급하면 좋습니다.

예시: Yes, I would like to have my own website where I can share my personal planners and ideas. For example, I would create a customizable planner site so others can download templates and organize their schedules.

제안: 주제가 명확하고 이유도 있으나 표현이 어색합니다. 'various information of biology'는 'various information about biology'로 고치고, 구체적인 예시(online lectures, articles, videos)와 결과(grade improvement)도 덧붙이면 더 설득력 있습니다.

예시: I have learned a lot about biology from websites, such as watching online lectures and reading articles. These resources helped me understand difficult topics and improved my grades in college.

× I usually offer busy kind of cyber shopping apps or delivery food apps and any social media contact with my friend.

✓ I usually use busy online shopping apps or food delivery apps and social media to contact my friends.

Multiple errors: 'offer' is wrong verb (should be 'use'); 'busy kind of cyber shopping apps' is unnatural—use 'busy online shopping apps'; 'delivery food apps' should be 'food delivery apps'; 'any social media contact with my friend' should be 'social media to contact my friends' and pluralize 'friends' for general meaning. Suggestion: choose correct verb for the action (use), use natural collocations ('online shopping', 'food delivery'), and match plurality to general statements. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Actually my favorite favorite website is online shopping website because it's very quickly delivery when I could, uh, I couldn't go.

✓ Actually my favorite website is an online shopping site because it delivers very quickly when I cannot go out.

Errors: duplicate 'favorite'; missing article before 'online shopping website' (use 'an'); 'very quickly delivery' misorders adverb and noun—use 'delivers very quickly' (verb + adverb); tense and modal confusion 'when I could, uh, I couldn't go' should be 'when I cannot go out' or 'when I can't go out'. Suggestion: remove repetition, add correct article, use verb 'deliver' with adverb, and use a clear present tense/modal 'cannot/can't' for habitual situations. Grammar problem type ID:22

× Not really because I usually uh, websites only similar website umm, this day so.

✓ Not really, because I usually visit similar websites these days.

Errors: sentence lacks a main verb—add 'visit'; incorrect word order 'websites only similar website' should be 'similar websites'; 'this day so' should be 'these days' for current habitual time. Suggestion: include a clear verb, use plural 'websites' for general reference, and use 'these days' for present habits. Grammar problem type ID:23

× Most people using a server contact website. I think most popular in my city website is Instagram because it is quickly.

✓ Most people use social networking websites. I think the most popular website in my city is Instagram because it is quick.

Errors: 'Most people using' missing auxiliary—should be 'Most people use'; 'a server contact website' is unclear—use 'social networking websites' or 'social media'; 'most popular in my city website' needs article and order: 'the most popular website in my city'; 'it is quickly' uses adverb instead of adjective—use 'it is quick' or 'it loads quickly'. Suggestion: ensure correct verb form, use clear nouns for websites, include definite article 'the' for superlative, and use adjective/adverb appropriately. Grammar problem type ID:27

× I prepare more getting information on the front website because book is a longer time when I get some information but website we can get her easier and screen touch is very easy.

✓ I prefer getting information from websites because books take longer when I am looking for information; websites are easier to use and have touch screens.

Errors: 'I prepare more getting' should be 'I prefer getting' (verb choice); 'on the front website' unclear—use 'from websites'; 'book is a longer time' should be 'books take longer'; missing articles 'book'->'books' and verb forms 'when I get some information' -> 'when I am looking for information'; 'we can get her easier' unclear pronoun 'her' should be removed; 'screen touch is very easy' -> 'they have touch screens' or 'the touchscreen is easy to use'. Suggestion: choose correct verb 'prefer', use plural nouns for general statements, and avoid incorrect pronouns. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Yes, of course I want I would I you know, I would like make all my style of planner because I don't really like decorate my plans.

✓ Yes, of course I would like to create my own style of planner because I don't really like decorating my plans.

Errors: redundant and confused modals 'I want I would I you know'; use a single clear modal 'I would like to'; missing 'to' before verb 'make'—should be 'to make' or better 'to create'; 'all my style of planner' -> 'my own style of planner'; 'I don't really like decorate my plans' needs gerund 'decorating' after 'like'. Suggestion: simplify to one modal, use 'would like to' + base verb, and use gerund after 'like'. Grammar problem type ID:4

× I usually get all various information of biology because it is hard for for my college and my GPA.

✓ I usually get various information about biology because it is hard for my college courses and my GPA.

Errors: 'all various information' is redundant—use 'various information' or 'a lot of information'; 'information of biology' should be 'information about biology'; duplicate 'for for'; 'hard for my college and my GPA' unclear—use 'hard for my college courses and affects my GPA' if intended. Suggestion: remove redundancy, use 'about' for topics, and clarify the relationship to college and GPA. Grammar problem type ID:11